destreavaux-myst [2008-07-27 06:46:33 +0000 UTC]
first i agree with astiniguid2 except i'm lazy and dont like typing a lot this is also finally after three months searchin a new angle on naruhina
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astniguid2 [2008-06-06 17:04:41 +0000 UTC]
I think this story is amazing.
You can really see the mental struggle that Naruto goes through; coping with his emotions, duties as a ninja, and duties as a friend. Of course, we can see that the main issue here is the love that he feels for Ino, the betrayal she sentences him to, and the journey for true love.
I think this story touches a part in all of us. We can all relate in one way or another. Whether it's the betrayal we all occasionally feel, the pressure to do better, or the willingness to cut off your best friend's penis when he's boning your girlfriend.
Don't change a thing. This is beautiful work, a true masterpiece (I cried during the last paragraph, I admit).
You, my friend, have a gift.
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Led-Head [2008-06-06 16:57:01 +0000 UTC]
You might want to try capitalizing names and the beginnings of sentences. I also suggest studying grammar for a little while.
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