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Requested by Hitomii-Chan on CR ouo"I was gonna submit this earlier but DA lagged on me and erased EVERYTHING ;[];|||| now I have to write it all over again =_=" orz|||
anyway I think her head is too big .______. it looks weird;;; lol
but I like how the rest came out >:3 <333
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Request info.
Chara nari's name: Dream Mist
Clothes:
pls make it something like this... but the color scheme is pink, purple and blue. xD
[link]
weapon: Etto,, a wand wif cherry decos.
Type: digital
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now I'll go see what I have next eue"
(doing requests was the largest mistake I ever done in my life orz|||) and I'd feel ashamed if I skipped them
Shugo Chara
EDIT: Fixed her lips [ was bugging me for a while ]
(c) *Naru-Kii
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uh ok let me start off that ... out of all my drawings why did you choose my old one? I'm pretty much aware of the head and the eyes are what came out of my own style and if you're gonna compare styles well I think you'll have to take another way of critism... and when I once met an art professor he already stated in 'anime/manga' style the artists always draw the proprtion as 3:2 which also means the head would at least be a bit bigger compared to the cartoon tyle which is 2:3... and the shading I use is "soft shading" I never thought of going to realistic shading since it doesn't suit my style so don't misunderstand....
though I must agree on the rest, I'll make sure to take that in mind C:
and I think you should critique new works I did and improved in
anyway I'm still thankful for the critique <3
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Whether it is old or new, critique is critique. I saw a critique of this on a friend's page and thought I'd give in my own two cents. I didn't go through your gallery. No offense, I didn't even know who you were, nor do I watch you.
And the fact that you're blaming your "style" on this picture is quite funny, seeing as I already knew you would. I've dealt with many people like yourself so I'm used to it. My own sister was like this. You can't blame issues with anatomy on "style". You have to learn to draw realistically to stylize properly.
Like I said, if you don't tell someone what your initial drawing is supposed to be stylized as, no one knows where to critique off of.
"Soft shading" or not, it doesn't follow a face's shape, whether it is Anime or Realistically coloured.
Sure, I will go and critique your newer stuff, but it'd say the same thing. Even anime artists have to have a common understanding of anatomy. And, this is just a little tip: you shouldn't want to draw like other artists if you hope to improve. Your main goal should be to find your own style and stand out. Because as it stands, you can be easily mistake for anyone else drawing shoujo girls. At the same time, I've never seen popular shoujo or anime with head sizes that are THAT big, and I've watched Mermaid Melody.
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first thing I never said you were wrong in the head part but I just pointed out that may be a bit bigger to what the original is ... and YES I do have a head issue orz;;
and I know that someday your critique may gain me more improvement and I thank you for that ... though I really don't get of what you're trying to tell me about the soft shading part o____O;;
I forgot to mention that I never meant to go draw styles like other people have I never want to but Arina Tanemura was my inspiration so my style went a bit to hers though my art is never compared to her art ...
and I didn't compare "style" to "anatomy" since I meant it by my style of drawing the 'eyes' that is all so don't misunderstand
and I'm quiet a stubborn girl I totally confess so I hope you could keep up with o___O;;;
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You basically only shaded the outline of her face. Even in anime, the shading isn't like that.
And you didn't compare style and anatomy, you shrugged anatomy off for style. It'd be best if you took a break from drawing things like this and drew realistic images in your spare time. It'd help you improve a lot more
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ok thank you for your critique then <33
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I forgot to mention the chin in mine D:
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Actually, I also forgot to mention something else on her face. The chin is nonexistant, and the cheek comes in too far. Refer to this tut: [link] once more.
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First things, her head is too big and her eyes are too elongated. I think if you drew the eyes smaller, you could draw the head smaller as well, but I don't know if you draw your head outline first or not. Even if you draw the head that big, her hand then is too small, since your hand is about the size of your face. The eyes are too far apart as well. The eyes should be one eye length away from each other.
Another thing is that if you follow the line on the bottom of her arm, it doesn't continue to the wrist. The indent of the wrist is too deep. A good thing to do is draw a light outline of the character without clothes and draw the clothes on so this problem won't happen again.
The body is too thin and too far to the right, it's inproportionate to the body.
Also the left leg (her right) is too far out and would not be possible on a human being. It needs to be moved in more.
This shading is unnatural. The easiest thing to fix it is to imagine a sun in an area of this picture and shade from there. The way you did your shading shows no definite source of light. Example: If the arm has light shining on the top (you shaded on the bottom), the staff that she has with the cherry would not have light coming from the bottom (you shaded on the top), etc.
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I still don't get why you chose an old drawing :/..
though about the eyes I'd really appreciate no one should critique me on my own style of drawing.. if you don't like this kind of style then it's not my problem, it's something I'll be remembered off I don't have to take out a style EVERYONE uses and I must consider creating my own C:
and as I just said this is an old drawing .. in my new ones I've been trying to draw them naked first then start off the clothes.. though I'd agree anatomy is something not everyone can succeed in very easily and I'm still practicing and I'll be sure to keep your critique in mind for any future mistakes C:
Thank you
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1. I didn't choose it. I saw it on a friend's page. It's not like all your stuff requests criticism. People were getting on her calling her criticism unfair when it was totally right. The picture is from a few months ago, it's not that old.
2. It's not like your new stuff is any different because I just went through your recent gallery. The chihis that you draw have a better sense of anatomy, and they usually are improportionate.
3. You shouldn't blame your style for lack of proportion. If you do that, there is no way you can improve. I don't know if you've ever drawn a real person or if you're in art school/art class. I don't know if you've drawn real people or from observation. I have. I have messed up my anatomy many times, even in my recent stuff but I'm open to criticism. If I wasn't, I can't improve my work. The biggest problem in your work I still see going on is the big heads and the really skinny bodies. But fine, if you want to call it your style, fine. I was only trying to help. My old pictures had WTF anatomy, so it;s not like I was born a great artist. Don't request critique if you're going to get upset about it. You rejected my critique as nonconstructive? Why? I told you what was wrong and how to fix parts of it. But that's alright. Seeing you reject my criticism and reading your response tells me what kind of artist you really are. Don't blame your style. Don't make excuses. It's not like you are the first person to draw like that with the big heads and eyes and skinny body, so don't get all righteos and say "my style" and "I don't want to take out a style everyone uses". I draw relatively proportionate and my style doesn't match anyone else's style. I'm not saying my art is the best, but I try to keep my anatomy correct at most and I can accept constructive criticism for someone who tells me what is wrong. That's all I was trying to do for you. If you csn't accept proper critique, don't request it. It's not like people thought my critique was unfair. 7 out of 8 thought it was fair. I don't know if you were the eight. But it doesn't matter.
Have a nice day
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1. well sorry.. but it's old to me;;;
2. I never said I was pro in anatomy now did I?
3. I really do wish there are any art schools here since art class at school is like a free class.. and yes I did draw realism before but failed at it and as what happened to you I messed up with anatomy BIG time.. though I'm not really blaming my style for proportion nor anatomy and I already confessed my head issue in the drawing already and I just like 'drawing the eyes' this way is what I meant by 'my style' ...
I know what you're trying to tell me and if you're upset by the way I chose your critique is just that I happen to understand by your critique is that I should change my style of drawing people and I TRULY thank you for the criticism on the body I DO infact have an issue with that and I still have so I'm trying to improve that...
hope you'd be patient with me ...
and I will C: <33
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If you want your style to be bad anatomy. That's fine by me. I don't watch you so you can do what you want. I watch anime. I see big head ans eyes all the time but they still manage to keep anatomy on the rest of the body. It doesn't matter what your style is, if a body can't bend that way (i.e, the way her leg and hip go), then it is wrong.
THe big culprit is shoujo anime like: "Full Moon o sagashite" and "pichi pichi pitch"
Yes, they have big heads and eyes and fall under that 3:2 ration but that's not even what you use.
Keep the way you draw the eyes, the head, the lack of chin, that's fine. If you want to take the style of shoujo artists, go ahead. It's not like you're the first and you won't be the last.
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Thank you for your critique then ~ <3
though I'd prefer if you were a bit nicer in criticising me ouo I wouldn't have argued <33
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the cloth is pretty cute, love it, butt the head is too big to support the body, that's all.good job, the nose shading part is not realistic, except if u try to draw some 3D pict like final fantasy stuff, 3D. the arm is too long to support the youth body proportion. the leg is un-realistic for the fact that u place it wrong....that;s all....shading hair everything is good...............................fair or unfair dont kill me, just work hard for it, dont blame this person who try to help by fixing a little detail of it....so dont kill this person who is pass by
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I think I already did mention my mistake with the head;;;
and I really agree with the nose thing too xD;; though I don't get the 3D part I'm not much of a 3D coloring fan I don't have teh prgram to do it anyway;;;
finl fantasy is too pro for me XD;;; iiiiiieeee
Thanks again for the critique <3<3 though you gave me a harsh rating eh? xD
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u dont need a program to do 3d, i did one, i only use photoshop for it
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heeeh~ I didn't know that o0o
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but i suggest u dont do it, sinceis require a good traditional art skill
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I never thought of starting actually 
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i barely work on 3D, is wasting my time too much
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the more time I waste on my art the more I feel like working hard on it
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school start so is time for me to stop drawing
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hehe~ I'm gonna start on September
but I can't stop drawing for just school >:3
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i have too must AP class i dont think i could have time to draw
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advance class in high school?
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oohhh o0o I'm still not in high school so I dunno much
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yeah XD
and I think the new school I'm going to is gonna let me graduate after two years only 8O
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I think it's new system O:
I was surprised myself o:
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actually it's better o___O I get to finish high school quickly and go to the art college I wanna go to
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well at mine place i need to get 4 years of high school, but who care, they still kidnap me to art school to train me to be a game designer which is horrible, they kidnap me
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aww that IS horrible D:
but I think being forced isn't really fun huh :I
[I wanna get kidnapped for art school 
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i got kidnap for 3 different school, and i know i will ending up going two university, one for art, one for medical
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did i just said i have soo many typo?
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i just re red it and said "oh crap, typo"
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I saw this through *vansora 's critique. I honestly think it's too harsh. I think the shading is incredible, the colouring, the way the streaks in the hair is done, and the choises of colours.. I worship you for how amazing it honestly is.
I'd say the eyes are a bit too elongated, but I suppose it's your style? And you'll probably be remembered for it. The head is slightly disproportional, cause if you look at the neck it kinda goes in a V shape, where as normally it would kinda be the opposite.. / \
Since I can't do the stars thing, this'll have to do.
Devious Rating:
Vision:
Originality:
Technique:
Impact:
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Thank yooouu ;A;" <33
I appreciate it really <33
yeah I'll do my best in that orz;;; I can't be perfect at EVERYTHING now xD;;
and thank you for the nice rating I appreciate it A LOT <33 ;<>;
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Paaahahaha I love that picture XD Looks a little wrong though.
Yeah. I wish I was better at colouring *too lazy to try any new techniques*
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A good tip when doing requests or trades is to accept it one at a time and finish it before the next one. That way you won't have a huge list that will drown you later on.
Despite the anatomy issues you already mentioned, the clothes are really nice and the cherry staff is quite cute. Nice shading on the clothes folds also.
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