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Andromedian1 [2014-07-31 02:32:56 +0000 UTC]
Oh my gosh...this story is completely amazing so far. I absolutely love how you set it up like a movie: some set up and explanation in the beginning, a whole lot of awesome action followed by the 'why' and 'how' of the action, and.....CLIFFHANGER! Dang, this is a truly awesome story so far. I look forward to more amazing ideas put into this story, such as how Nala and Neko slowly come to terms with one another after the 'night of reversal', as I'd call the last piece of amazing action so far. Keep up the good work! Hardly any other stories are even nearly as exciting to wait weeks for more on! You, my friend, have achieved what television series and movie trilogies have been doing for decades on end: presenting a slew of minor info to set up the plot, followed by a bout of rising action, and a continuance of explanation and interesting events to 'flesh out' the plot line even more. If you ever need any sort of ideas, let me know!
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NekoLLX In reply to Andromedian1 [2014-07-31 04:18:33 +0000 UTC]
Wow thanks, I've always taken pride in my work and always said "i never give up on a idea, it may go on a break for a long while but i'll always finish it eventually" so i try to give everything i do my whole heart
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LINK-LEGEND [2012-12-09 12:13:57 +0000 UTC]
part 4?? can't find it... did it ever come to fruition?
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NekoLLX In reply to LINK-LEGEND [2012-12-17 19:18:07 +0000 UTC]
no i dont think so
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asdfaoeu [2009-10-18 06:09:49 +0000 UTC]
Will this ever finish?
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NekoLLX In reply to asdfaoeu [2009-10-18 19:40:11 +0000 UTC]
eventually
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Uncle-Ben [2008-11-23 07:44:45 +0000 UTC]
Any word on a part 4?
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Uncle-Ben In reply to NekoLLX [2008-11-23 23:12:24 +0000 UTC]
So, is it that you don't know where you are going with it?
or don't have time for it?
or something else?
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NekoLLX In reply to Uncle-Ben [2008-11-23 23:33:09 +0000 UTC]
i have a idea where im going but im just not anythign solid
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alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 18:44:05 +0000 UTC]
Technically Nala is now only a part of the whole, she and Neko should be one person now.
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 19:06:38 +0000 UTC]
well the story isnt finished just stalled but basicly their still 2 of them at this point
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-15 19:19:01 +0000 UTC]
Also to note, the 'questions and answers' style of mental change is a rare and personal favorite of mine recently. It'll be interesting to behold Neko and Nala become one awareness. And to see what this new awareness does with herself.
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alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 17:06:26 +0000 UTC]
Er... thanks... but I'd rather not create ANOTHER new account on a new web site to see one piece of work. I'm sorry.
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 17:13:44 +0000 UTC]
well since is so dark i cant post it here, sorry
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-15 17:19:59 +0000 UTC]
What's the basics of it?
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 17:22:27 +0000 UTC]
Tainted is th story of Josh, a Personal Assistant in the far future who die ti consequences beyond his control is force to live as a 10 year old girl in a secotr of space where anyone can do anything to him...anything
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-15 19:27:02 +0000 UTC]
"How would the suit rectify that with the spells in place to conceal his magic from the town."
Too bad. Nothing can stay hidden forever. That is the truth every urban magic setting tries to desperate to deny.
"and her newfound tiger companion sat atop Nala’s roof looking at the rising sun."
When did that happen?
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 19:36:41 +0000 UTC]
when she wasn't herself....the tiger comes into play later to Nala's surprise
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-15 20:22:27 +0000 UTC]
'Herself?' Heh. The moment the costume came into contact with her, the term 'herself' became subjective.
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-16 06:27:24 +0000 UTC]
Since it was experiment I suppose the mage can be fogiven for his oversight, but in hindsight it's utterely logical. If each piece of the costume is it's own awareness and each of those awarenesses is Neko... then it makes perfect sense that Nala when thrown into the mix would become Neko herself.
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-16 06:32:54 +0000 UTC]
add in the fact the suit is sort of a hive mind and things get interesting
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-16 06:54:40 +0000 UTC]
She went from being the whole to a piece of the whole. And you can't turn the cake back in the mix and eggs.
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-16 16:40:05 +0000 UTC]
pretty much, and theirs the added disadvantage of their being what 6 nekos who all think as one vs one Nala
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-16 20:27:41 +0000 UTC]
I'm actually surprised Nala doesn't feel vulnerable and alone now she's been cut off from most of the whole, after all, she is 'Neko' too just like the other six.
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-16 20:50:02 +0000 UTC]
Well you have to understand Nala better for that, Nala was raised on military based before Bast took her in so she has a very...militaristic view of things. It might feel weird but if you let your feelings get the better of you on the battle field you die.
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alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 15:30:04 +0000 UTC]
Mental change is the true reason I read any costume TF story. Thank you. Care to join us at costume TF Fans?
[link]
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 16:15:59 +0000 UTC]
joined, im not a fan of the total mental rewrite but a good mental conflict is always fun
Conflict is the key of story telling once their is no conflict the story is over
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-15 16:39:42 +0000 UTC]
Usually. Writing a story with NO conflict is hard. But just because there's no mental conflict, doesn't mean there is no conflict what so ever.
I have several story ideas based around that idea, but I don't have the hobby time to write them.
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 16:44:47 +0000 UTC]
well see the thing is if a person is subsumed by the new personality you could have a conflict with the new persona but the person you started reading about's conflict is over. Sometimes that worlds....most times not. You need to be invested in the character after all
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alexwarlorn In reply to NekoLLX [2008-03-15 16:49:44 +0000 UTC]
I actually had a story set in the Xanadu verse, child molestor targeted a kid dressed as Rika from digimon by dressing as Renamon, when the change hits, his old identity is erased and she protects Rika without question. However, Men in Black who were also at the con, can use Neuralizers to restore the original identity, effectively killing the new person to bring the original person back from the dead. The parents of Rika's costume wearer decide take that course. Renamon however is scared, having learned of who her original self was, if she gets Neuralized by chance or design, that monster gets control of her body and all it's abilities, but if she does nothing, her tamer dies...
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NekoLLX In reply to alexwarlorn [2008-03-15 16:56:16 +0000 UTC]
now that one is a example of "Works" since we get invested in Rena-man and he is a more user friendly character. I have a prety dark story as well you might enjoy [link]
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StuckinaCostume [2007-09-06 18:35:47 +0000 UTC]
I'm liking her being trapped like this I would keep at it with the Neko's demands.
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