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nephrite-butterfly — SMOCT -round one- p1
Published: 2010-07-15 10:30:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 1743; Favourites: 33; Downloads: 23
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Finally, first page of SMOCT round one comic.My Sailor Butterfly VS 's Sailor Nocturne
Warning, I'm not very well in English! There may be many mistakes!
From left to right ->
Next -> [link]
In Russian
Слева на право ->
- Это здесь. Место где состоится битва в первом раунде.
<Увязался следом, но из-за того что был очень занят, не смог подать заявку вовремя и в соревновании не участвует.>
- Странно, никого нет.
- Ты ошибаешься. Она просто умело скрывает свое присутствие.
- Я Sailor Butterfly, Воин что охраняет Волшебный источник.
- Я Sailor Nocturne, Воин ночи.
Sailor Butterfly & Aone Kitoku (c) me
Sailor Nocturne (c) FallenAngelAraya
Sailormoon (c) Naoko Takeuchi
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Comments: 9
Ooooo This is very entertaining! Your English is really good 
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This is amazing I hope there's more on the way!
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Very nice! I like both of these designs in your style..
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Wow Cool... I know I shouldn't be excited to see my OC get beat, but your art is so pretty!
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I like how Aone is being a cheerleader in the background. 
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Very nice artwork and shading, I'm a bit jealous.
Just one English spelling error [source] instead of [sourse]. One little other thing [She is very good at hiding her presence.] is alright but [She is very good at hiding her aura.] would be better. [Hiding her presence] would bring to mind that she is hiding her immediate surroundings.
And you might need {don't truly know about Sailor Nocturne} to adjust the bow and brooch to be more level with her shoulders when she appears - just suggestions.
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Thank you for remarks.
I fix [source] error and re-upload file.
And what about [presence]. I not clearly understand what do you mean, but anyway I think that [presence] better than [aura]. Because in russian word "присутсвие" equal [presence], not [aura] - in russian "аура". I tried represent this Nocturne ability: (from Sailor nocturne reference -> [link] ) "As one of the two guardians of the dimensional gate she can manipulate reality around her. Without her twin sister Sailor Sol's power this only really means that she can make herself more or less noticeable around others depending on whether or not she wants to be noticed." But may be I've failed with it.
And about brooch - yea, it's my mistake.
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You are welcome. Glad I could help you with corrections. Any why, the presence/aura thing was something is because I have little knowledge of Sailor Nocturne {will look at the reference - but I might not remember much}. And I have little knowledge of Russian language.
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