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Description Okay, so 's contest at UnT requested a 'school' theme. And the current drawing theme in the Harvest Moon club here at dA is fall, even if it's not a contest. And so I came up with a comic idea for the contest that could also fit the current theme in the club

Here's the original comments I made on the contest thread:

They are wearing the school colors and emblems of The Ohio State University, where I go to school The Oval is a courtyard at school, and this really is a legend at our school ^^ If two people are walking alone on the oval when the school bell tolls, they're supposed to be destined to fall in love or share eternal love or etc. There are a lot of different versions of the story, but I made a kindof ideal one for this comic BTW even early in the morning, two people walking alone on the oval is very rare. It would have to be like 4 AM on a day there was no school for anyone or something XD And then what's the chance that TWO people would go by at that time??

Gray x Clair is one of my favorite Clair pairings I was really torn on who to choose... Pony or Clair? Gray or Rick? Stuff like that I was even considering a professor-looking Trent or Carter In the end I thought it would look the cutest with Gray and Clair.

The second panel is supposed to be a birds-eye view of the pathways with the tops of Gray and Clair's heads to show they're the only people around XD But like, I don't know really how to make it look like that, so that's the best I could come up with.

Also, poor design on my part: I should've made another panel where Clair hears the bell and turns around.

Also, you can imagine the narration is by either of the two When I was writing it, I wanted it to be so that either of them could be saying it. I guess in my head it's Clair saying it, but I think it seems cute if you think of Gray saying it too

ANYWAY, hope you like it XD I like how it came out in the end Even though it looks messy, I spent a lot of time on it, and it's organized mess. It's SUPPOSED to look that way

Also, I realized after I saved it that I spelled "beginning" wrong at the bottom (it was just a typo, I got it right at the top XD) but it's too late now, because I already compressed the layers and stuff, so I'd have to like... erase that part and type a new version on top, and it would stick out, or just redo the whole thing from the beginning, scanning and all, and I'm so not doing that XD So please excuse my typo.

(there were faces in there that didn't get displayed I think XD)

Anyway, now to submit to the HM clubs too

Hope you guys like it~~ And don't forget to tell me all the stuffs you think I could do better, too ♥
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Comments: 46

GreenTeaForTheSoul [2010-09-09 00:58:29 +0000 UTC]

I'm OSU too! The version I heard was that if you and your significant other manage to to walk down the entire length of the oval (ending at the library) without anyone crossing the path in front of you and during that time the bell rings, then you'll be happily together the rest of your life.

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kaikaru [2008-09-13 05:08:58 +0000 UTC]

Gaaa~~~ I love this! -^^- It's adorable~ I like the whole feel of the plot and everything~ X3

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nesseggman In reply to kaikaru [2008-09-13 05:15:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much

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kaikaru In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-13 05:18:28 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome!

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FallenAngelKokoro [2008-09-10 20:39:21 +0000 UTC]

omg o.o u did such a wonderful job on this >< the details the coloring the poses all of it is terrific ><

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nesseggman In reply to FallenAngelKokoro [2008-09-11 03:53:09 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much ;-;!

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FallenAngelKokoro In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-15 22:07:02 +0000 UTC]

np np ><

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andraliba [2008-09-10 15:44:58 +0000 UTC]

Cute!!!!
Love the expression on the 5th panel and I really like the leaves

Good luck on the competition too

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nesseggman In reply to andraliba [2008-09-11 03:53:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much

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TheHarvestMoon [2008-09-10 11:19:48 +0000 UTC]

Omaygawrsh ! This is so Win!!! I love the themes, Fall (Spot on!), School (AU for the win!!!) and urban legends (Little cliched but I love it anyway!).

Ah I like how the leaves are drawn too, alogn with how the wind blows. Feels like a gentle breeze. Though for critique, Claire's hand on the first panel is wrongly inverted and your trees need more....um treeness But it's cool^^.

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nesseggman In reply to TheHarvestMoon [2008-09-11 03:54:33 +0000 UTC]

lol yeah IDK how to do trees so I just made it up XD;

I'm glad you like it Thanks a lot

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TheHarvestMoon In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-12 13:46:47 +0000 UTC]

X3

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straw-hat-luffette [2008-09-10 01:32:58 +0000 UTC]

Well, I already left my big opinion on it on your LJ, but I'm gonna say it again... I LOOOOVE THIS!

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nesseggman In reply to straw-hat-luffette [2008-09-10 04:46:08 +0000 UTC]

Kehehe, thank you so much D

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straw-hat-luffette In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-10 17:55:35 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome.

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ScarletSnidget [2008-09-09 02:24:00 +0000 UTC]

Lol, Carter or especially Trent as a prof would have been hot... but I do think that Gray makes it the cutest. Now a critique:

Panel 1: Claire's hand is backward. And chins dont really curve like that unless your seeing them from far below. The just get kind of flat and sqaured at that angle.

Panel 2: Yes, I could definitely tell it was a shot from above. It's quite good... I would just show some shoulder on them so they aren't just floating heads... and I would make your trees a little bigger.

Panel 3: Looking better. I think Gray's head and neck are a smidge too far forward... and both need a little more flow from chin to neck.

Panel 4: Fabulous.

Panel 5: Love it! Claire's bangs get a little short-looking on the left (our left) side of her head. And note the chin-neck flow on Gray again. But I love her expression, and the hair is incredible! And a nice hand; you just might want to add one more finger.

Panel 6: Pointy chin. But it looks good.

Overall: I love your coloring. Love love love it. Just add more background it my advice. All the white gets boring after a while. Like maybe add some bold blue autumn sky behind the bell tower.

And that's such a cool legend. I love the autumn theme... my favorite season.

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2008-09-09 04:19:28 +0000 UTC]

I want to hug you XD That was such a helpful comment, everything ♥_♥

Some of the stuff you mentioned adding (shoulders on the above thing, another finger on Clair's hand, etc) I actually considered doing but decided not to. I should go with my gut more ._. I actually had drawn shoulders on the from-above-heads but erased them because I thought it looked weird 9_9;

I need to remember that um. Sometimes things look weird as you draw them but in the overall picture they look important/good/etc. That's something I have a problem with.

Autumn is also my favorite season!! I love it so much *_*

I don't like Trent much, but thinking of him as a professor in this type of scene makes him so much more appealing to me XD (I don't dislike him, I almost married him once but ended up picking Rick in the end... again XDD It's just that he isn't all that appealing to me XD)

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ScarletSnidget In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-20 04:15:22 +0000 UTC]

Yay, hugs! I love hugs. XD

I usually go with the rule that I draw it how I think it would actually look, even if it's a little awkward... Like you said, it's important to the overall picture.

I get really stuck between Autumn and Spring. The beauty of the earth as it dies, and the beauty of it coming back to life. And the smells. I do think I like Autumn more, though.

Trent is alright. None of the Mineral Town guys are that great, but I like his personality in DS Cute. And he's pretty adorable. And thinking of him as a professor is a big improvement. XD I think I'm developing a partiality to student x teacher ships, lol.

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2008-09-20 06:56:03 +0000 UTC]

yayhugs XD

Autumn is by far my #1 fav XD Spring is nice but it doesn't compare for me I don't like summer too much D: Winter has some good points, but it's not my fav or anything.

Hahaha, student x teacher ships are ♥♥♥... I love that kind of thing XD

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ScarletSnidget In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-30 00:51:17 +0000 UTC]

I think that one of the things I like more about autumn is that everybody's attitude is still fresh as they go into school; by spring, the earth is fresh, but the student body is stale. And I like the color palette better... and Halloween... and Thanksgiving... and the build to the holidays. XD What's not to love about autumn? (Besides that it gets cold... lol.)

The more student x teacher ships I find, the more I like them... usually. Harry Potter is an exception. But even there, I like ships that have age gaps...

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2008-09-30 02:24:05 +0000 UTC]

I like that it gets cold in autumn. I love wearing jackets and coats and sweatshirts and sweaters and stuff like that. Winter is a bit TOO cold, but fall is ♥

Student x Teacher is so so love *_* It's because I love teachers and I'm a student LOL. Right now I'm totally crushing over my astronomy prof 9_9

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ScarletSnidget In reply to nesseggman [2008-11-10 22:22:46 +0000 UTC]

I really feel like I didn't even get the chance to enjoy fall this year. By the time I got done being busy, most of the leaves had fallen off the trees already and it was the end of daylight savings time. And I missed Halloween.

I'm definitely looking forward to the holidays, though. Especially Christmas. I plan to make this year feel especially Christmas-y, because the past few years haven't.

"It's because I love teachers and I'm a student LOL." I think I'd have to agree with you there, somewhat... I've had a few big crushes on teachers. But I question which one stemmed from which.

I do realize that even as a kid I found older men more attractive than younger men. Still do. I was watching a movie this weekend, "Entrapment," with Sean Connery... it's all in the eyebrows...

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2008-11-16 18:53:36 +0000 UTC]

Fall didn't really feel like fall here. It was SO HOT and then one day a couple days ago it just like... became wintery and crappy T_T I did get to look at pretty trees though for like... a day.

My xmases never feel Christmasy anymore :\ So I just spend them playing games with my bro when he gets off work.

I like oldermans, of course, so teachers tend to be closer to oldermans than students, lol. And plus I kinda like the 'taboo'-ness of teacher/student relationships 9_9; And plus teachers tend to be smart, passionate, etc. And sometimes they dress nice LOL.

Sean Connery is *___*

I had a Korean class in which the teacher would like... prepare slides before class. And like, he would use example script thingies. Like, just make little dialogues of students in our class talking. So usually it would be things in their personality, like often he would make me and this one girl talk about games.

But once one of the examples had me telling someone that the older Sean Connery gets, the hotter he looks O_o;;;;;;;;;

I'm not really sure why he would ever think to use that example for ME. I mean, like, sure it fits me perfectly, but how would he know that?? So I was kinda creeped and thought maybe he stalked us all to make Korean language examples LOL

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ScarletSnidget In reply to nesseggman [2008-12-08 23:40:53 +0000 UTC]

I haven't replied to you in ages... So much for staying on top of my messages.

This year hardly feels Christmasy at all... except when I go to the mall. I still feel like it's too soon to be playing Christmas songs on the radio, then I remember we're almost halfway through December already.

I'm starting to think I've always liked "oldermans," as you refer to them. XD Not exclusively, of course, as I find young guys attractive as well. But I can remember thinking 40- or 50-year-olds were attractive when I was, oh, about six. XD

Sean Connery has quickly become one of my favorite olderman actors. Alongside Alan Rickman and Stanley Tucci.

That is so wierd! But your teacher is right. Lol "maybe he stalked us all to make Korean language examples." Thats hilarious... how old is he? XD

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2009-01-20 01:55:01 +0000 UTC]

*like two months later*

Yeah, I didn't have a Christmasy Christmas... it feels like it just didn't happen this year.

I think I at least have always liked guys in uniforms XD I think it took me a while to realize I liked oldermans, but I've always liked them, too, maybe. IDK.

Yay Rickman and Tucci Have you seen Devil Wears Prada? I like that film a lot~~~

My Korean teacher is like... nearing 40 now I think. This year I have private lessons with him rather than classroom lessons. Kinda scary O_O

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ScarletSnidget In reply to nesseggman [2009-01-22 05:46:24 +0000 UTC]

Ahhhh!!!!!!!! I've missed you so much! Lol, dA seems lots more lonely without our conversations under my "replies" section.

We didn't even decorate our house til December 23 and 24... we had so little time. And we still haven't taken down our tree, lol. I went to my aunt's house, but it didn't feel like Christmas at all. Maybe Thanksgiving, but not Christmas. New Year's was good, though. I spent it with my friends.

Guys in uniforms... it depends what you mean by that. Like military men? I don't know about that, but to allude to a well-known 80's song, I definitely like sharp-dressed men. Guys are multiple times more attractive in even slacks, a shirt and tie... let alone wearing a suit.

Yes, I've seen Devil Wears Prada! Fabulous movie... it's been a while, though; I need to watch it again. I originally saw Tucci in "The Core" (lol-able B movie that I love). I recently saw him in "A Midsummer Night's Dream," and I liked that a lot.

That is kind of scary... especially if he's been stalking you already. XD Do tell if he makes any more freakish comments.

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2009-01-22 06:16:23 +0000 UTC]

I knowwwwww I've missed our convos here, too!! I always wanted to come back but the like 1000 devs and 300 comments to check or whatever... it was all very intimidating!! I'm finally cleaning it all up though.

Yeah, we didn't decorate at all this year. No gifts either. For dinner on the 25th we had hot dogs. >_> For New Year's, I also did nothing... my friend came over and we sat and talked and had tea while I played Animal Crossing. It was like the... least holidayish holiday season evar D: and I'm the type of person who loves all the mushy feely holiday joy stuff. But I just didn't get any at all this year ._.

Guys in all kinds of uniforms! Particularly I was thinking of Navy uniforms when I said it, but only because when I was a kid I admired people in them so much without understanding why, hahaha. But like, I LOVE guys in suits, and even just in slacks with a shirt and tie! Seriously, any kind of thing other than street clothes gets me, though. Police uniforms, tuxedos, religious garb, historical costumes (omg suits of armor are wonderful~~ I love samurai armor as well, especially the really elaborate and fantastical types... and um, you know guys all fancylike with the white curled wigs and stuff, that's awesome, too...)... um, OH, sports uniforms, especially baseball and American football uniforms... um... seriously, I like all kinds of uniforms and costumes and stuff XDDD

Yeah, I need to watch DWP again, too. I watched it on OnDemand though... I need to buy the DVD D:

Hahaha, I ended up dropping that class in the end ._. it was just too much for me right now. I don't have any time, and it was something I added on as just something extra to take, so... I gave up T_T I sent a long apology letter to him and he just said basically "oh. keep in touch" so maybe he hates me now ._.

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ScarletSnidget In reply to nesseggman [2009-03-02 05:39:52 +0000 UTC]

D: Just when I say I've been trying to come on here regularly I go and disappear for a month... oh, well. You know how it goes. >_>

No gifts and no Christmas dinner! I can't imagine! Was there a reason for it? I thought mine didn't feel like a holiday... that sucks.

Ahhhhhhh, I just got a prom magazine... and there are so many more guys in this year's edition! Tuxes, yay. :3 I was saying to my mom how so many girls think guys are so hot when they take their shirts off... and I'm just the opposite. I usually don't like it when guys walk around without shirts on. I like it when they put the effort into looking nice.

And, oh, do I know guys "all fancy-like with the curled wigs and stuff." That's one of the reasons why I love the Pirates of the Caribbean movies so much.

Sports uniforms just make me think "jock"... and I don't care much for jocks. *shrug*

I don't know that he hates you... from my experience, people don't usually add "keep in touch" if they hate you. Whatev. I understand why you dropped it, though... sometimes too much is bearable, and sometimes it isn't. In this case it wasn't. :\

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nesseggman In reply to ScarletSnidget [2009-03-02 20:44:57 +0000 UTC]

Haha, don't worry, I take forever to respond to anything these days anyway.

Yeah, I haven't really had a Christmasy Christmas since I was like... 11 or 12, so don't worry about it XD Once my parents split, they like... stopped wanting to have xmas for some reason O_o so now it passes like a normal day.

LOL WHEN I FIRST READ THIS, I thought it said a porn magazine XDDDDDD I don't think I'd want to see high-school aged guys in tuxes though O_o as much as I like nice clothes. And I know what you mean, I am the opposite, too... I'd rather guys dress up nice than take their shirts off. Even if they have a nice body or whatever, I'd like to see that body with some pretty attire added on XD

Haha, yeah I love PotC for that too XD

Yeah, I don't like jock types really... but like... professional athletes can be nice. Except I guess they're just older jocks, but still XD I love baseball uniforms a lot... my friend and I used to go to baseball games with binoculars... we wouldn't know who was playing or who won or anything, but we'd stare at the guys in the uniforms and comment on their butts and stuff XDDDD and it like weirded out the people around us, especially since I was a guy with a beard LOL. (My friend was a girl XD) It was fun though ♥ I especially love mustached baseball players LOLOLOL and little league coaches O_o;; because they're like the dad version of soccer moms or something?? And I like that "dad next door type" omg I'm rambling something fierce. And weird.

I don't have that much experience with people so I guess I don't know XD; But it was just so abrupt and felt so... unforgiving >_>; but maybe I just assume everyone hates me too easily.

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CalypsoTea [2008-09-08 15:26:06 +0000 UTC]

This is really cute, Ness! I love it. Other than the hand in the first panel, I think the only other thing to fix would be in the last panel where you misspelled "beginning". Other than that, I think you did a great job! ^_^

Good luck with the contest! ^_^

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nesseggman In reply to CalypsoTea [2008-09-08 18:12:57 +0000 UTC]

Thanks I'm so embarassed I made those two huge mistakes like that XD But at least it looks good overall.

Thank you!

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557M [2008-09-08 13:17:45 +0000 UTC]

That is a bit neat; good work with this. An interesting combination of fiction and reality. ^ ^

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nesseggman In reply to 557M [2008-09-08 18:12:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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557M In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-08 21:43:58 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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LainaInverse [2008-09-08 06:42:58 +0000 UTC]

Hmmm critique? The hand in the first panel is indeed backwards, and the faces are a little bit mushed in the third panel. Otherwise it looks pretty cute. :3

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nesseggman In reply to LainaInverse [2008-09-08 06:48:00 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much I'm so embarassed about the hand now XD I didn't realize it at all x_x;

Those ... direct sideways profiles are my worst D:

Thanks for your comments And I'm glad it is cute ^_^ That's of course the point~

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LainaInverse In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-08 08:12:17 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, hands are the bane of many an artist's existence.

I understand that too. An easy way to handle it is find a style of sideways profile that works for you and you like. For example in mine, I eliminate the lines of the lips, and I find it makes it easier on me to make it look the way I want.

Also with sideways eyes, remember that the upper and lower corner of the eye should be near-touching.

Here's hoping I helped a little more

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nesseggman In reply to LainaInverse [2008-09-08 18:12:15 +0000 UTC]

That was helpful, thanks!!

And yeah, hands are evil D:

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LainaInverse In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-08 20:30:22 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

:Giggle: They are. Best advice for hands it to draw your own a lot. Without looking at the paper, draw your hands in different poses. It really helped me ^^

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nesseggman In reply to LainaInverse [2008-09-09 02:07:34 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I've done that a few times. And then drew Pony's gloves over top of all of them XD I've really improved at hands from how I used to be, but I still don't like my hand drawing too much. I'll keep practicing though.

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LainaInverse In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-09 03:01:56 +0000 UTC]

Just keep at it and you'll keep improving ^^

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nesseggman In reply to LainaInverse [2008-09-09 04:14:30 +0000 UTC]

Right! *determined pose*

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LainaInverse In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-09 04:25:42 +0000 UTC]

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PipersAngel [2008-09-08 06:37:55 +0000 UTC]

Gaaaasp!
That's absolutely adorable - brilliantly done!
I love the last two panels especiallyyyy <3
Erm, as my critique, in the first panel the hand she is using to yawn is kinda backwards..

Good luck on the competition

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nesseggman In reply to PipersAngel [2008-09-08 06:42:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much

AND OMG, you're right, the hand is backwards!! I didn't realize at all X_X; Thanks so much for pointing that out. I was holding up my left hand to my face to get an idea, but then drawing it on her right hand... I'm such a dummy!

And thanks for the luck There are lots of good entrants so far, and I'm sure there will be lots more so it'll be tough

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PipersAngel In reply to nesseggman [2008-09-12 08:12:23 +0000 UTC]

It's no problem!

Haha, oops! I often do the same thing, and don't realize until someone else points it out

I'm sure you'll go great

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