Niathefreak In reply to ??? [2011-07-18 20:26:48 +0000 UTC]
well at least its getting better but it will be fixed and changed and ya i will keep wrighting
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AntifascistLilitu In reply to Niathefreak [2011-07-21 16:57:16 +0000 UTC]
Yeah.
Niathefreak In reply to AntifascistLilitu [2011-07-25 04:00:31 +0000 UTC]
kk
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LVeraWrites [2011-06-08 13:00:07 +0000 UTC]
Spelled "sense" wrong. The formatting needs a little improvement but I do like the way it's more like a poem. This story seems more like someone talking to himself and would probably benefit from having a third person narration. Once again I think it's definitely has potential and overall I can see you getting better. I recommend reading and writing all the time. The only way you get better is by doing it a lot. "Never stop reading"
Niathefreak In reply to LVeraWrites [2011-06-08 19:08:12 +0000 UTC]
ya sorry not all of it was cought i will have tooo go back and fix all that thanxs
roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 01:52:57 +0000 UTC]
i luv this!! <3
Niathefreak In reply to roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 02:01:36 +0000 UTC]
now u have to read 3 and thanxs
roseweasly101 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-06-05 02:02:30 +0000 UTC]
welcome
Niathefreak In reply to roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 02:04:13 +0000 UTC]
roseweasly101 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-06-05 02:04:51 +0000 UTC]
kkkkkkkkk
Niathefreak In reply to roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 02:08:57 +0000 UTC]
u weird
roseweasly101 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-06-05 02:14:57 +0000 UTC]
u just figured this out?
Niathefreak In reply to roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 02:17:54 +0000 UTC]
no
roseweasly101 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-06-05 02:20:00 +0000 UTC]
i was about to say
Niathefreak In reply to roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 02:22:54 +0000 UTC]
lol ok
roseweasly101 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-06-05 02:25:31 +0000 UTC]
lol
Niathefreak In reply to roseweasly101 [2011-06-05 02:28:36 +0000 UTC]
i no
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AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-23 15:12:07 +0000 UTC]
"epic" (kellybell226 said) is too much in my opionion but at least your texts are becoming better. it is a lot more interesting than part 1. it is more creative, you know. but it's for example not really clear who "you" is. But any way it could be that you'll mention later. Still, practise writing and you'll get better - as you can see on my work (I hope) if you compare with stuff I wrote 3 years ago.
Niathefreak In reply to AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-23 22:33:53 +0000 UTC]
yeps i am trying thanks i no practise makes perfickt
AntifascistLilitu In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-24 13:48:17 +0000 UTC]
yep. and no problem.
Niathefreak In reply to AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-24 13:59:32 +0000 UTC]
StarFire9819 [2011-05-23 08:50:38 +0000 UTC]
EPIC STUFF!!!!
Niathefreak In reply to StarFire9819 [2011-05-23 13:59:08 +0000 UTC]
lol thanxs
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Niathefreak In reply to StarFire9819 [2011-05-24 13:47:08 +0000 UTC]
MichiKitten [2011-05-23 00:30:00 +0000 UTC]
your welcome ^^ its such an awesome story!!!
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 00:31:38 +0000 UTC]
lol i told u u were going to get creadit lol and thanxs for the fav on it
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 00:50:58 +0000 UTC]
:3 no problem ^^
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 00:54:04 +0000 UTC]
kk did u read part 3??
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 04:05:55 +0000 UTC]
yea, it was awesome!!!!
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 14:02:13 +0000 UTC]
yay thanxs
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 14:14:19 +0000 UTC]
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 14:18:27 +0000 UTC]
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 14:18:59 +0000 UTC]
:3
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 22:41:19 +0000 UTC]
lol sooo what u up to?
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-24 00:42:08 +0000 UTC]
nutton much you?
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-24 01:17:06 +0000 UTC]
nothing a little sad but ok
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-24 11:07:21 +0000 UTC]
aww *huggz
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-24 13:50:42 +0000 UTC]
yeps i am thinking of getting a restraning order agenst 2 ppl
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-24 17:26:58 +0000 UTC]
lol awesome xD
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-25 01:31:36 +0000 UTC]
well it is true i need one
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-25 03:30:15 +0000 UTC]
.3.
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-25 03:33:03 +0000 UTC]
ya my parents r really thinking about it toooo ooooo and i am still testing and what for iti may be getting a year book yay
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-25 03:37:01 +0000 UTC]
.o. lol yayzers x3
Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-25 03:42:38 +0000 UTC]
yeps lol ps i like your icon lol mine sooo boring lol
MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-25 03:44:32 +0000 UTC]
lol xD thanks i like yours ^^