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  As I turn to leave he attacks me from my back! As he does so, he has taken me by

surprise,so I fall to the ground with a hard thud! I fell the bones in my lower

back break with a hard cracking noise! As I am on the ground he turns to my forest

were I live were I am doninte I slowly rase to my feet then I crouch low to the

ground. Then when he turns to look at me I have slashed him in the chest where his

blood is now all over me. He falls to the ground still very much alive and were if

I turn my back on him now he will get away and he will leave and it maybe another

100 years before I see him agin.
I think to my self, should I let him live or let his cold heart less body fall to

the very floor were I have killed one of my brothers?
Well you going to kill me or not?
He said in my mind
" Old man I told you that I was good and I was strong but no matter what I am not

going to let you kill any more familys like you do, and like you did to me,so I

have to kill you this maybe the only chance I get!"
Then at the same time we both pounce on each other, he grabs me by the throat,and

I grab him by the head. He is trying to make it to were I can't breath but what he

dose not no I can hold my breath for as long as I want.
While he is holding on to my throat I am slowly pealing off part of the skin on

his head.
So when he has had enough of me pulling off the skin on his head he lets go of me

and my long ,sharp nails dig deap into his soft bloody head. He lets out a cry so

bad that it will make the ears of a mortal bleed, so bad infact that I must cover

my very own ears.
When he has recovered from that, his eyes turn a deep red color, almost like the

color of the moon.
He turns to lash at me but i had him by suprise and I ripped his own throat out

with my bare hands.
He falls to the floor spilling blood all over me and all I am doing as laughing

with not even the look of hurt in my eyes for what I have just done.
Now that he is gone that means I rule all vampiers,and wolfs around the world I

am the one that can end a race to all this hurt disaster and madness!
I now have to make a decision if I kill myself all the wolfs and vampiers will all

fall dead, but if I dont kill my self then they all live and they will kill and

they will not stop but I can not kill my self. I am told that I still have a full

life to live. So I have decided I will not kill my self but I will not hunt not

tonight instead I will leave this place for sometime.I dont no how long I will be

gone but one thing is for sure anyone that trys to take my place I will kill ,just

like I did my father!
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Comments: 35

LVeraWrites [2011-06-08 13:59:14 +0000 UTC]

doninte? Dominate maybe?
rase = raise
deap = deep
It's not a big deal but when you post in dA it usually has a spell checker. I usually write my stories on Evernote, it's a really good program especially if you have multiple computers. Then I move it to microsoft word for spelling and grammar checks. Then I post it on dA and check if it finds anything. Stuff still gets through and I thank people here for helping me find them.

You also need to go back and pick a tense. I suggest past tense. So you can say he slashed me and he fell to the ground.

I usually have the same mistakes. I have to go back a second time and just check tenses. I'm finally getting better at it. I hope all this helps you.

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Niathefreak In reply to LVeraWrites [2011-06-08 19:08:47 +0000 UTC]

kk thanxs for caching all the little mastkes that no one cought lol

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LVeraWrites In reply to Niathefreak [2011-06-08 21:13:15 +0000 UTC]

yeah, i hate it when i have a piece up and there's like an obvious one i missed like using "the" instead of they. I think a lot of people are to nice to say anything, but I would love to fix the mistakes.

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Niathefreak In reply to LVeraWrites [2011-06-08 21:15:00 +0000 UTC]

ya same here like this one i saw just have not had time to fix it

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AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-24 17:27:52 +0000 UTC]

It's okay... but some stuff is really hard to check. Always remember a reader doesn't know the story before, that is very important. Btw I'd like to help you with your writing-stuff if you need help again.

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Niathefreak In reply to AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-25 01:31:00 +0000 UTC]

well oks i can do that iwas in a rush ppl keat on bugging sooooooo i had to have them up then sorry but yes u can help

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AntifascistLilitu In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-25 12:03:33 +0000 UTC]

That's the wrong way of thinking, Nia. Surely I also hurry up writing sometimes because of people. But NEVER submit stuff or show it anybody if you don't think you have done the best of the text, if you don't love your baby. Okay, just write me a note.

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Niathefreak In reply to AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-25 21:17:06 +0000 UTC]

ok i am very lost i was happy with it i just needed grammar help

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AntifascistLilitu In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-26 13:30:21 +0000 UTC]

ah, okay, then it's alright.

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Niathefreak In reply to AntifascistLilitu [2011-05-27 01:40:16 +0000 UTC]

k

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StarFire9819 [2011-05-23 08:50:17 +0000 UTC]

Awesome!!!!! (even though I already read it before everyone else ) Thanks for the credit!!!!

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Niathefreak In reply to StarFire9819 [2011-05-23 14:04:01 +0000 UTC]

thanxs and no prob i said i would

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StarFire9819 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-24 06:04:43 +0000 UTC]

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Niathefreak In reply to StarFire9819 [2011-05-24 13:46:56 +0000 UTC]

u get one to

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StarFire9819 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-25 06:41:18 +0000 UTC]

you get an even bigger one!!!

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Niathefreak In reply to StarFire9819 [2011-05-25 21:23:56 +0000 UTC]

yay thanxs

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StarFire9819 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-26 06:45:42 +0000 UTC]

Lol

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Niathefreak In reply to StarFire9819 [2011-05-27 01:43:25 +0000 UTC]

i no

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MichiKitten [2011-05-23 04:05:02 +0000 UTC]

TOTALLY EPIC!!!!

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Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 14:04:09 +0000 UTC]

thanxs

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MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 14:14:28 +0000 UTC]

:3 your welcome!

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Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 14:18:24 +0000 UTC]

kks

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MichiKitten In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 14:18:52 +0000 UTC]

xD

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Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 22:42:06 +0000 UTC]

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Niathefreak In reply to MichiKitten [2011-05-23 22:41:54 +0000 UTC]

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Demon-Jinchuriki14 [2011-05-23 00:16:36 +0000 UTC]

Amazing again, you are a really good writer I really liked this whole story

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Niathefreak In reply to Demon-Jinchuriki14 [2011-05-23 00:18:55 +0000 UTC]

yay thanxs did it all make sence??

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Demon-Jinchuriki14 In reply to Niathefreak [2011-05-23 00:22:19 +0000 UTC]

Yes it did and your welcome

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Niathefreak In reply to Demon-Jinchuriki14 [2011-05-23 00:24:34 +0000 UTC]

yay and kk

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deviantmozez [2011-05-23 00:15:28 +0000 UTC]

what the fuck - BOOOOM!!!!!!!!

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Niathefreak In reply to deviantmozez [2011-05-23 00:16:57 +0000 UTC]

ok what was that for i dont no if it is a complement or not and if u did not get it then plz read i and 2

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deviantmozez In reply to Niathefreak [2011-07-03 02:50:08 +0000 UTC]

if you dont get it now, u never will, so dont worry 2 much mate

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Niathefreak In reply to deviantmozez [2011-07-03 17:26:37 +0000 UTC]

oooo its fine i asked around sooo its cool

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deviantmozez In reply to Niathefreak [2011-07-17 03:13:55 +0000 UTC]

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Niathefreak In reply to deviantmozez [2011-07-18 20:14:47 +0000 UTC]

lol u like saying that a lot ay hahaha

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