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Published: 2004-04-02 09:12:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 138; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 32
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An unrequited love, it seems ---With curiosity intense...so smitten
An enticement posed so diffident:
From roots pronounced forbidden...
Deficient valor in battle misplaced
Have forced fervor and triumph perchance;
The search of my pieces in your embrace
Grow trivial through candor's trance.
Appeal masqueraded in flattery ---
In denial of kismet atypical;
So arrogant, you prepared the portico
But fall short of words so cynical.
In pursuit, dumbfounded, a match in circles:
When accustomed to one of squared...
Though deceptively shaped so absolute
Still blemished in provisioned affair.
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response poem
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Deja Vu
poetical verbose reverence
emotional brink, brim forgone,
overflown; she knows not the difference
for love is all she has ever known.
hysteria mocked and mimmicked
malicious intent unseen; Don Quioxote
dodders, dodding, words limericked
to settle suppleness insaitible and clean.
perfection grows but dies all the same
complacency gives way to neglagence
a bloc of words, exact three proclaimed
and her heart is set a flame with excitements
auspicious inate phrases, diablical
in key; tone, pitch, motive and air
uttered for purposes obvious avidity
one touch, one caress, and one sensual affair...
-Jeffrey S. Burns
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Muse you always seem to raise the bar with each and every piece that you submit
always are you showing your skill as a writer
and your talent as an observer
I must applaud this piece for not only its use of brilliant vocabulary
but also for its inspirational qualities as well
you again wrap text to suit your desire
taking the literary elements to uses not seen since shakespeare himself
what I see when i read this piece is life, what i see is desired passion
and hidden intentions
you managed yet again to spark something within me that was dormant
very well written Iren
very well expressed, and imaginative, creative, and overall beautiful
(erotic though...hm..perhaps there is some underlining fit of sexual tension but you'll have to point out just how erotic this piece is.. my interpretation of your words gives me the sense of expression of longing and the gift of affection.. )
again..nice work... nice work
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it speaks of a sexual encounter with a female that stemed from curiousity. and thank you again for another wonderful post on your thoughts.
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I'll have to read it once more then with my mind in the proper mindset as it were
I see sexuality inn the piece...lust and also desire
but hm... you managed at least for me to be just vague enough for the reader to come to thier own conclusions of the piece and situation itself
of course perhaps others grasped it and I am just one to be left to ponder..
but still my opinion stnds.. beautifully written
again.. vocabulaary meets intellegence...
grammer meets sophistication...
art meets poetry..
and lust of the flesh...meets beautifully transposed words..
hat goes off to you
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