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Published: 2016-06-18 17:17:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 3913; Favourites: 27; Downloads: 7
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Ok finally my own final redesign that's it~!Info:
Name: ShineShine the Rabbiwolf
Species: Half rabbit and half wolf. (Also has dove wings)
Age: 16
Height: Estimated 1.4 or 1.5 meters (In real life I can't remember anymore O.O)
Weight: Around 45 to 49kg (Can't remember either but this is close to what I can recall)
Likes: Sweet and salty foods, listening to music, art, drawing, flying (only in the cartoon world), watching cartoons, hanging out with friends.
Dislikes: Haters, bullies, bitter and sour foods, loud and sharp noises (Ex. A loud speaker or a fork scratching on a plate etc.), people being rude to her friends.
Occupation: Student studying to be a Storyboard Artist or a Digital Animator (Possibly be a Youtuber)~
Fun Fact: She has a secret fetish on something, she's in love with the characters Roughraff/Badude, Manjimutt/Multimutt and Babblong from Yo-Kai Watch, when she was as young as 5 years old she learnt to fly with her big wings~
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Comments: 164
Godet dammit.... the design of ur oc isn't bad but..... the colors.... TOO MANY COLORS! U don't need a lot of colors for make an oc!
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Ok, please, read my comment.
Sorry if i say rude things about you.
But, all that things i say it's because you don't know how to color!
Please, can you listen to my critic?
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Oh and sorry if have something wrong. English is not my native language.
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The colors and design don't bother me, but she has no personality, even though you did give her a goal. She likes drawing because she wants to be a story board artist. However, in the rest of the likes and dislikes, you don't explain why she loves or hates these things.You could say she likes art because it comes naturally to her and isn't good at math because it's hard to grasp. She fears being alone, that is why she likes being around her friends. She doesn't like being bullied because others taunted her about her appearance. However, she accepted her appearance after learning that she unique and bullies don't bother her anymore. Since she learned to stand up for herself, she knows how to stand up to bullies and won't let bullies hurt her friends. Also, ShineShine has way too many love interest, either give her one or non at all. These are suggestions not hate.
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Very nice. But I recommend the colors to change a bit. Make the color number about 4-6 colors, and most different shades of one color or accessory colors.
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Im sorry But ......................... WHY IS SHE TWO SPECIES WAIT SHE HAS DOVE WINGS Β .
A WOLF A RABBIT AND A DOVE MADE THIS.
AND WHY IS IT COLORED LIKE A RABBIT CAN BE MULTIPLE COLOURS YES BUT NOT PURPLE, A WOLF IS SELF EXPLANATORY AND DON'T GET ME STARTED ON THE DOVE PART.
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Well, it's improvement. I would advise changing up the colors a bit and maybe looking at a color pallet. As for the writing section, I'd recommend working on her bio some since it's seems a little bland at the moment alongside the unrealistic height and weight. Otherwise, I'd say you're doing a lot better at least...Please keep practicing.
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This is super cute! Will you draw more of her in the future?
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Nice. I'm glad you change your appearance.
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Adorable! Just don't listen to the assholes.
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Sorry, but, this is beyond cringey and terrible.
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It speaks for ITSELF.
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Oh well why don't you explain what's wrong with this so I can understand?
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I've read some of the comments. This isn't cringe to me. Β Now, the colors do seem a bit off BUT I know you're improving! ^^ I love the occupation and the Fun Fact! The name... should be tweeked.. like... Arliss The Wolf or just ShineShine or like Shine. Just a normal name 
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I think the only thing that is too much on this character is the yellow
Way too bright try going for something different that can actually go with the purple
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Tips:
Try to not make her a triple animal. I don't really know how three animals can have s** and have a dove being the smallest.
Tone down the colors, have you ever seen a purple or yellow wolf/rabbit/dove?
Try to have the clothing match.
Also, Yo-Kai are ghosts. She can't kiss a Yo-Kai unless your using the watch or being a Yo-Kai yourself.
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I wanna help you on your oc, so it wouldn't be so mary sue-ish. And at this point, I don't care about grammar, I already know it sucks. First, the color: The colors aren't as eye bleeding as Shine Shine's, but they still don't match. I know, I know, you would probably say "Your oc's colors don't match eather", or "said the mlp lover". Just hear for some mins. Just think about a theme, like, I dunno, flowers. Or snow. For stuff like snow, just use different colors of blue, or for flowers, use some smooth colors, like a soft pink and purple, with some more darker pink versions, like a bow, or something. Your drawing skills aren't as horrible ad some others (or mine 
So, I hope I could help you and Spartists knights, I will just ignore you guys, when you tell me" this oc isn't a mary sue!You're just jelous, bitch!" TRUST ME. I am NOT jelous. I just wanna help her.
Hope I could help ya and I would be happy if you take some tips! ^-^ ( And please don't hate me for tryin to help)
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You should just change the yellow parts, it's too brigth. Use a darker color, Β it will become more confortable to see.Β
Try to put a light pink or other color close to purple.Β
A tip: Don't use many different colors in your characters or they will become flat and boring.
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So, this is your final design?
Well, at least it's better than the other designs.
Just looking at the others force my eyes to make a waterfall of blood, because the surface was burnt to a crisp and split open.
My eyes can now rest. Finally.
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Can you ppl being mean to her plz. Stop we are all human and think what is some oneΒ said
Β you to kill your self how will you fell? So think be for you speak.
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First off, your grammar and spelling is atrocious. Second, I wouldn't care since it's the Internet and I've seen it so many times to really take it seriously. Third, while yes it's rather rude to say someone should off themselves because they don't like their art or their fetishes, but criticizing her works can help her improve. Saying something like "The colours are very bright" or "Your OC seems rather overpowered, so here's how you can improve" is definitely something that she should take into consideration. She doesn't have to listen to them, but it could help her. I like her art to some extent. It's not something I'd look at everyday, but at least the style isn't bad.
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Is this a fursona or a fan made character for some show?
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I don't see why everybody is still branding this a "Mary Sue." Personality wise this character seems pretty moderate, a good fursona. The character design itself is pretty good too, better than her previous design (no offense). I've seen plenty of winged wolf OCs, the rabbit addition just makes her more unique. The only issue I see is that the color's are still a bit of an eyesore but, you seem to have an fixation to bright so, by all means, please keep them and don't let others try and drag you down.
I've got deep respect for you. You're a talented artist despite what others say. I've seen plenty of people in similar situations that you're in just give up and abandon their DA accounts. Please continue drawing, I'd love to see more!
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Seem like your improving more of your art 030, I like the new design, like how it's color now seem go to together
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You think...? Cause everyone else thinks it's still a Mary Sue...
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Well yeah, but I kinda don't see how it's a Mary Sue tho
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Yeah but I tried to make her less *sighs...* 'cringey'... but why won't the negative comments stop???
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Well I been thinking about redesining shine shine for you, but you do have hangouts or Skype right? So that how I just can send shineshine new design^^" but I don't wanna be rude or anything but, haters aren't thing that you can get rid off completely, unless you block them from your DA
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Yes I have Skype here... Roughraff-Manjimutt-Babblong
Yep I knew that but I wish they can leave me alone...
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Daww, they go away some day, but do you wanna talk it over at skype? ΓwΓ
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(Sorry for the interruption) I had the same problem where people won't stop calling me a Mary Sue even though I'm not...
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Oh well I feel sorry for you too~ :<
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I know... It sucks that I have to keep telling them that I'm not a Mary Sue and that I'm original...
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Yeah I did the same then yeah I realised my character was not...
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I would suggest simply blocking this guy. He's only out to troll and bully you.
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ssssuuuuurrrrreeee -_-
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Not really she's not bad now honestly she alot better then before.
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I'm so glad to see that you've improved and that you aren't using overwhelming amounts of detail like your older work. I do have to say though, the bio seems aΒ little Mary Sue-ish in my opinion. Maybe add a little more detail and maybe some bad things/flaws about this character (I know other people have said this, but I want to capitalize on this subject.) I know giving your original character flaws is kind of hard since you want your oc to be perfect and all, but you should at least try to give her flaws. Flaws other than "painful flashbacks" and "gets extremely angry easily!" I see these ones too much sometimes.
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