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saim-kurom [2015-07-17 09:03:06 +0000 UTC]
Very interesting history indeed.
nicely detailed, I will read more of this interesting history
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to saim-kurom [2015-07-17 09:21:25 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, I tried to model parts of it off the former Soviet Union, as well as in some ways culturally from northern Europe.
I appreciate your reading and commenting, I'm glad you liked it!
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saim-kurom In reply to Nomads-of-Korsun [2015-07-17 18:48:43 +0000 UTC]
now you say so, yea i can see now.
your most welcome ^^
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to saim-kurom [2015-07-18 07:41:24 +0000 UTC]
I try not to make it overly direct, so it's something the reader can interpret a little bit.
That said I try to base the lore off real life history as much as I can.
Of course, thanks again.
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Illusir [2015-06-20 22:28:23 +0000 UTC]
Awesome, thank you for taking the time to read it. (Happy birthday by the way!)
I've read up on the Soviet Union a few times and made sure to double check certain points before including them as part of this back-story entry. (for example I had to amend the part about their currency since it turned out that under the Soviet Union there wasn't a lot of foreign trade and their currency wasn't often used outside their territory). Basically I was striving to make the description interesting without it coming across as Russia bashing or anything.
The cooperatives are actually partially based on an organization on Bangladesh called B.R.A.C (No I didn't name my character after that by the way), which provided employment to its members while also helping to provide them with schooling and medicine; the novelty of it is that it combines some elements of socialism with the decentralized nature of NGO's so I figured it would make an interesting feature for the Soldiens and one that fits their futuristic socialism style society well. (it's also a non goverment organization too, which I found interesting since it serves a lot of government functions to the population areas where it operates).
Anyway, glad it was interesting and seemed to have the right feel to it. I want to make the different societies in the back-story interesting and I feel a good way to do that is by making them reminiscent of interesting points in our own history with some slight changes so it's different enough to be unique.
Thanks so much for reading it and providing your feedback. I know you didn't technically live under the Soviet Union, but your perspective as a native Russian is invaluable insight nonetheless.
Much obliged! I hope you have a very happy birthday as well!
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Illusir In reply to Nomads-of-Korsun [2015-06-21 15:39:23 +0000 UTC]
Oops, dA made two identical comments.
So I made one of them hidden.
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Illusir [2015-06-21 22:53:46 +0000 UTC]
I've had that happen before, no problem on that; technical difficulties are sometimes inevitable.
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Illusir In reply to Nomads-of-Korsun [2015-06-21 15:35:48 +0000 UTC]
Interesting combination of the Soviet Union features and B.R.A.C's ones, I can say. It's really nice how you could combine different things and features to make societies for your world, I like this! It's a big amount of work, but it makes them very well detailed and unique.
I'm glad I could help!
My birthday was nice, thank you!
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Illusir [2015-06-21 23:01:26 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I'm glad you appreciate the blending of different aspects; the belief lore was the only thing I was still kinda shaky on, but I kinda figured it needed to reinforce a strong belief in solidarity over individualism, and yet still have that yearning to build a greater sort of society on earth (hence the kingdom of awe). If I think of any better ways to word it or a more interesting means to convey it I may retype certain things.
I think the Volterrans will turn out more interesting because for them I kinda wanted to combine sort of modern capitalism with Roman cultural and political systems, to kinda have norms and beliefs that seem more in line with how corporations and their advocates seem to go about things (that is a belief that fortune favors the bold, and the strong winning out against their competitors, that sorta thing). I also kinda included some bits about the gender balance since real life lions have many females to one male, I thought a society dealing with that innate imbalance would be interesting to see.
Awesome, I'm glad to hear you had a happy birthday. There were actually many artists I knew with a birthday this month. (Bodycount, you, my prop guy, amandathehamster, etc)
Anyway, thanks for your reading and commentary, it really meant a lot to me. Much obliged as always Illusir!
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Luna-Amina [2015-06-17 02:48:10 +0000 UTC]
Ohh! I like it! Once again I don't see anything wrong with it.
Oh wait, I saw one thing... ~scrolls back up to check~
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-20 22:29:27 +0000 UTC]
Alright cool, we'll have to do another story exchange sometime; Right now I'm kinda managing the feedback from a banner advertisement roll-out I'm doing on another site. Though as soon as I have some more time we'll have to do this again sometime.
Thanks for your feedback!
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-20 23:38:02 +0000 UTC]
Indeed, talk to you next time; thanks for pointing out that spelling mistake too, even if I didn't initially understand what you meant.
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Luna-Amina In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-17 02:49:26 +0000 UTC]
In the third paragraph where you put (more or that later). It doesn't quite make sense
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-20 22:38:25 +0000 UTC]
For some reason I didn't see this comment until I went to the page (my feedback system must have glitched out).
Basically the (more on that later) is a reference to the paragraph where the cooperatives are explained in detail, since it's a term that I've sort of made up for this entry. You think it would be better off omitted? Or does it make sense now that you know what it's referencing?
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Luna-Amina In reply to Nomads-of-Korsun [2015-06-20 22:59:42 +0000 UTC]
Spelling mistake. I see or, not on. That is what I was trying to say
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-20 23:37:30 +0000 UTC]
Ah, I see what you mean now. Sorry I'm so used to how it's supposed to look that I often wont see how it actually is.
Thanks for pointing that out, it's fixed now!
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-21 22:53:06 +0000 UTC]
That's why editing and review are important, I've definitely gotten some of my best edits from the fans and why I always appreciate feedback.
Anyway, thanks again for reading through this first bit of lore. I greatly appreciate it.
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Nomads-of-Korsun In reply to Luna-Amina [2015-06-22 01:09:17 +0000 UTC]
No problem, I do what I can when I can remember.
Indeed, I'll keep working towards them.
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