Comments: 36
FiWithASmile [2013-06-30 20:07:58 +0000 UTC]
Oh my god, that was amazing! Weird how in a GhiraFi fic, Demise is always the bad guy. Yay! Don't worry, Fire! We'll help Ghirahim together!
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JelloPixel [2013-06-28 19:15:19 +0000 UTC]
This is pure awesomeness! i mean seriously, a sequel! AMAZE-BALLZ!
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JelloPixel In reply to OcarinaGreen [2013-06-28 19:40:52 +0000 UTC]
i do half my thinking and stories at school XD
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SpatialDimensions [2013-06-16 17:42:06 +0000 UTC]
This is amazing for a first fanfic! I have my own fanfic and this clearly surpasses mine. Please do more!
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JelloPixel [2013-05-10 18:01:38 +0000 UTC]
im waiting for the next part... but its great ^_^
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free2bhaley [2013-05-09 02:17:08 +0000 UTC]
This is fantastic. The pain in her last moments, just no, I cried. Wow...., great job!
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free2bhaley In reply to OcarinaGreen [2013-05-10 02:00:29 +0000 UTC]
Well, I'm telling you now, that if your dad does give you mean criticism, he is wrong. This is amazing. If you feel confident enough in it, definitely let him read it.
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GameMasterKyro [2013-05-08 00:02:49 +0000 UTC]
This is excellent!
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GingerBalsom [2013-05-07 03:24:35 +0000 UTC]
I have to say, I believe this is the best fanfiction I have ever read. It was perfectly planned, brilliantly written, and actually would have made a great backstory in the game. The story fits perfectly! You have a wonderful talent as a writer, I would love to read more ^-^
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JelloPixel [2013-05-04 12:13:09 +0000 UTC]
thats great cant wait
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FitheSwordSpirit [2013-05-03 04:17:44 +0000 UTC]
*bows head but says nothing*
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Contraltissimo [2013-04-28 06:14:04 +0000 UTC]
Hehe, okay, I gotta tell you something.... .... I can't stand most of these sword-origin arts and stories because a lot of them seem to be so over-the-top, over-dramatic and just kinda flouncy.
But when I started reading this, why, my gosh, what a nice beginning you have to this story! Really, that is a sweet little hook with a great personality to start the story off. I wonder what their nomadic history was like....
And the interactions between the kids just felt so real and true. Kids can be so cruel.
And then when the demons started showing up, gaaah! I had flashbacks right then and there of the beginning cinematics in the game, about the ancient war.... I love how you've zoomed in past that stylized kind of portrayal, and given us a living, vibrant little glimpse of this tiny front of that war, just two frightened children, two swords and a knife.... oh gads, it's just such a desperate, tiny little battle that they probably know will never be known or remembered.
And Demise was so frightening; I loved how you wrote him. He really sounded true to the game; very------oh wait, you said you hadn't gotten to the end yet? .... then I won't say anything else on that point.
Ghirahim's transformation was just heartbreaking. ;.; And that he killed his friend.... Oh gads.... I don't even. Your descriptions and the way you painted the scenes and the action and the characters throughout all that part were just lovely. Lovely and sad.
And the ending has this bittersweetness.... that Fire will never remember. Her meeting with Hylia was so tender. These poor, poor mortals all swept up by demons and gods....
Just wonderful. Wonderful, wonderful work.
You have a wonderful writing style, and lovely taste in plot. Congratulations on your very first fanfiction! I hope you never stop writing.
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