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blackpearleyes [2008-04-24 01:22:38 +0000 UTC]
This is incredibly beautiful.
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freigo [2008-03-05 15:18:57 +0000 UTC]
^_^
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tounderstand [2007-12-02 20:37:40 +0000 UTC]
wow.
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ohfever In reply to tounderstand [2007-12-03 02:27:10 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. So much!
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dreamscape-painter [2007-11-23 22:30:53 +0000 UTC]
I think this is fantastic. Great way to capture a dream on paper.
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ohfever In reply to dreamscape-painter [2007-12-18 07:47:57 +0000 UTC]
Thank you.
I always want to capture my strange, beautiful dreams..
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dreamscape-painter In reply to ohfever [2007-12-18 07:57:46 +0000 UTC]
My dreams are always strange, and rarely beautiful. I wonder what that says about me as a person?
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ohfever In reply to dreamscape-painter [2007-12-18 21:02:49 +0000 UTC]
What is beautiful though? I have dreams I see zombies in oceans, that people try to hurt me. And then I float off, somewhere safe.
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wolfbiter [2007-11-03 00:33:06 +0000 UTC]
Good piece.
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EvergreenGardens [2007-10-24 03:45:26 +0000 UTC]
Oh, I think I see one of the elephants. The poem was beautiful and potent as ever and not quite as dark as usual, although still bittersweet. Ever the pleasure to read. Not very long, but your poems never needed to be, you say exactly what you need and it creates the image. Lovely, lovely. I adore you.
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ohfever In reply to l0stwhispers [2007-10-24 18:37:38 +0000 UTC]
hehe i agree..this was just an experiment i think.
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bloodwitness [2007-10-24 00:55:03 +0000 UTC]
In my opinion (not that it matters), "Her torn up daydreams." seems a weak way to end the poem, a bit clichΓ©, actually, although the rest is quite beautifully enjambed.
Also I don't think the picture fits, but since it's your picture and your poem, can't really know what's going on there.
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ohfever In reply to bloodwitness [2007-10-24 18:37:03 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I see what you mean. ;] The photo just seemed to stuck, not sure why. Im not taking this one too seriously. I was even going to scrap it but I'm not sure now.
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bloodwitness In reply to ohfever [2007-10-24 22:39:12 +0000 UTC]
I dunno--it's your piece. I thought the poem was good enough.
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ohfever In reply to ohfever [2007-10-24 18:37:14 +0000 UTC]
er stick, not stuck.
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chelx [2007-10-23 13:25:50 +0000 UTC]
i like the last line.
somehow it feels like reality poking into a dream.
and adds a whole other dimension.
(:
beautiful, both the words and the picture.
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haydey [2007-10-23 11:56:54 +0000 UTC]
i love this its so cute ^_^
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