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going in to work. I'll give a real description later.EDIT: Ok, back from work. Here we have page two of Musing. This comic was done with complete digital backgounds. The only thing I drew was Mort and Gazoo. You guys like? I really had no idea what Mort's lab would look like. So what happened is that I kept putting off designing it, and it came down to the twelfth hour. So I started putting blobs in there. I figured it'd look something like the crowds in the Clash story (which style I'd been wanting to do again really). What came out for some reason was very sharp and detailed. And oh so shiney! And then there was the chalkboard. That was a bitch. As you can see the joke started to wear thin. Hope you enjoy.
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I'd be a little worried that my mind was slipping too.
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Ok....i wanna revise what i said last...
That long comment was based on your work/writing BEFORE this picture - i have seen the more recent pics and it seems like a improvement in the writing dept actually...
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Life's a journey isn't it..
I think as this comic goes on (and on) the stories will get better. And in the long term that's a good thing. For the short term I've gotta stick to shorter (but in Mort's case not exactly simpler) works. The reason for that is, while the characters are fun, I can't bog myself down with a heavy story (right now) because I really really don't want to get sick of them. I'm glad you like what's come since then. I can see by which page your looking on your views about the writing. Really that was a simple joke and served to open the rest of the story. I think #58 is much better in terms of dialogue.
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Hi again buddy
Heres my very very blunt opinion. Please do not be offended...but i`m sure you will appreciate honest criticism...
In general...Atm it feels as if...
Your art is better than your writing. There, i`ve said it.
Visually, your art is the main reason i look your submissions. And i feel you will benefit if the story can become the main reason for your viewers to come here...not the art.
How can i say this better? Your art is visually appealing for a wider audience...your writing, seems more limited. I have read comics with quite bad art that would appeal more, than work thats really well drawn, but suck in the story...and i don`t even like reading. Visuals are supposed to be the thing that appeal to me because of that...but my opinion is that story carries the art more than art carries the story - or i feel that it should.
And this is where i feel you can work on more.
Even stickmen drawings can be appealing if the script is good enough.
In short...your art is good enough for me to want to read your stuff...but your stories seems lacking. Now maybe your target audience is precise and for specific cultures that may get your jokes...i dunno...But you need to decide who you wanna target in your message.
Please note...i think your characters are really great...your arts really great...i just feel like the actual speech bubbles and script lacks something...
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"Pirate no Jutsu" and "Alternative Power"
made me laugh the most.
and yeah, Mort totally looks like Fred in the last panels XD
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Ya those are fun. I thought of the Pirate one, and Thurinus thought of that great bit on human power. I laughed pretty hard on that last one.
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heehee
"This is wearing thin" made me laugh a lot to
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That was my feeling at the time. In the second panel.. It was fun looking back though.
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Wow. From the first frame I thought Mort looked like a starved Fred Flintstone. Then you pulled out Gazoo on me.
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I've been getting a lot of Fred comparisons. It's the hair/nose combination. And aren't surprises fun?
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Indeed they are. But honestly, I think this time I hit on it due to the stubble and the lack of glasses.
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Ya he definitely has the Flintstones stubble here.
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Lol, that is funny. Often my muse'd run away from me (I'm a fic writer sometimes)
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It's happened to all of us. I'm procrastinating right now in fact.
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OMG! The great Gazoo! The moment Flinstones officially jumped the shark
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Actually what with the kids and the sixties rock bands and Fred losing his mind in a bunch of episodes, The Flintstones had lost it earlier. Gazoo, just finished it off.
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OMG Gazoo! What is he moonlighting? I'd imagine there's not much money in the Fulfilling Caveman's Wishes biz.
I'm partial to the painted backgrounds. 
Be careful with your values-- Gazoo is almost the same value as the blackboard, even though he's a different color, so he tends to blend into the background right now. I'd either lighten him (value), brighten him (saturation), or throw a stronger light on him so his lit side pops forward.
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Well the saturation thing did help a bit. Gazoo has more cartoony colors than the chalkboard. I'll put those into consideration the next time the problem arises, since I've already finished this storyline (in buffer comics that is). Thanx for the helpful critique. Hope to get more like it!
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O well, the background in that panel was actually a copy/paste from the last page. I plopped it in there and blurred it a tad. That's when I decided that I couldn't get away with just putting it in there over and over again, so I put in a bunch of chalkboard gags.
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um... is there any reason you didn't shade mort and gazoo in the fifth panel?
hydro grill! lol! random craziness in the background is ALWAYS good =]
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Ya, I was playing with a new way of coloring flatly. Plus I made Mort look more Hanna-Barbera-ish, I thought putting them in flats would help that. And thanx on the random craziness
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that would explain why he looks a bit like fred flinstone on a diet! not that anyone could get fred on a diet...
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I don't know, they did get him to lose 25 pounds on that game show.
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I see you, taking to us through the chalk board! XD
I love the look on his face when he relizes his mind had indeed been lost. Poor Mort.
Love this comic lots! <3
PS, if I had a Flintstone Muse it would probibly be the can opener.
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"You're dead to me can opener!!"
It seemed like there was more to that chalkboard. seems much smaller when I'm not actually doing anymore of it.
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I love the way that chalk board looks, big or small. I may do a chalk board like that in my comic in the future. XD And your lab BG is made of awesome.
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wait till that chalkboard gets out of the way.
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Heh, you know there's going to be trouble when this guy pops up. Ha! ^.^
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well he's here to teach Mort a valuable lesson.
or something.
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Well, if anything, they're meeting up will mean alot of laughs for sure. ^.^
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Some good expressions anyway.
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I've never really watched hanna barbara toons. Who is that green guy? I'm guessing he's related to the Flintstones somehow.
By the way, I've noticed Mort is the only one who seems to age throughout the comic series.
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He's the Great Gazoo. Turned up in the last season of the Flintstones.
here's some info for you.
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Oh okay. Thanks... If this wikipidea article is correct, you might want to reconsider introducing him to your series. You might can cancelled.
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nah, he's only visiting.
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I love how the perspective on the toaster changes from panel to panel XD And the fact that he's considering using humans as an alternate power source is creepy XD
HOUSE!
Love the detail here, particularly the coloring of the lab. And Mort looks pretty darn cool in that 2nd panel.
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I'm glad someone noticed that house ref. And the human thing was Thurinus' idea I think.
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well it'll lead to something anyway.
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o thanx! Don't applaud, just throw money!
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oooooooo!They make nothing here-we've got Euro cents!
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