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Edd-Would-Be-Proud [2019-01-16 20:48:59 +0000 UTC]
Looks like a good OC! Just maybe not use green/blue and white and use the colors that they use a lot in hazbin hotel.
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OtakuTheUnicorn In reply to Edd-Would-Be-Proud [2019-02-26 15:12:50 +0000 UTC]
Um? No offence but shit cretique. She has like 1 thing green and 1 thing blue considering how black and white she is she needs the colour.
Shes basically meant to look more innocent too. Try reading her bio mate
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Edd-Would-Be-Proud In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2019-02-26 20:36:57 +0000 UTC]
Then why isn't she in heaven? She's done noting wrong or is she in heaven? The hazbin hotel location is in heaven. If that's the case, please pardon my comment.
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OtakuTheUnicorn In reply to Edd-Would-Be-Proud [2019-03-13 10:18:07 +0000 UTC]
Hi its called a bio... Read it. Suicide is a sin and her fucking family are mobsters.
Next time read a bio before embaressing yourself. I put a lot of work into my bios.
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StrategistRobyn [2017-08-29 07:05:11 +0000 UTC]
Great picture, as usual.
I haven't read the whole story before and after death (I'm a bit busy), but I noticed that she's both stubborn and easily discouraged...
These traits kinda contradict each other, unless it has an explanation in the story. In which case, please correct me.
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OtakuTheUnicorn In reply to StrategistRobyn [2017-08-29 12:21:15 +0000 UTC]
I'm stubbourn and easily Discouraged so i know for a fact that they dont contradict eachother.
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OtakuTheUnicorn In reply to StrategistRobyn [2017-08-29 13:38:06 +0000 UTC]
Stubborn means when you make up your mind or something like that you wont change your mind.
Easily Discouraged means you can easily make her feel shit about herself.
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StrategistRobyn In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2017-08-29 13:56:22 +0000 UTC]
I finally had time to read it all.
The sad thing about this death story is that it's actually possible...
Internet harassment can most certainly lead to suicide...
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OtakuTheUnicorn In reply to StrategistRobyn [2017-08-29 13:59:03 +0000 UTC]
Yep owo why do you think shes from the year 2000's?
And Dolls death is possible also. You just gotta find a fucked up person.
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StrategistRobyn In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2017-08-29 14:00:42 +0000 UTC]
Right...
Can I mention a little thing I would improve in the writing?
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OtakuTheUnicorn In reply to StrategistRobyn [2017-08-29 14:05:12 +0000 UTC]
Improve? Thats insulting dude considering i stayed up late to write this and I'm a good writer.
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StrategistRobyn In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2017-08-29 14:11:30 +0000 UTC]
No, no, no.
Just Something for writing in general that I believe would make your writing better. Though, it's just an opinion.
I believe using phrases like 'bitch' and 'fucked up' when describing things expresses very strong opinions, and I believe that readers should come to their own conclusions about characters and situations.
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StrategistRobyn In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2017-08-29 14:32:04 +0000 UTC]
It's just a little thing I believe would make it better.
But, you don't have to accept my opinion.
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StrategistRobyn In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2017-08-29 14:37:05 +0000 UTC]
I'm not talking about the story, mint.
I'm talking about this very specific use of strong language to express very strong opinions.
It's a general thing. I won't tell you what to write, but I was hoping to give you a tip about -how- to write it.
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StrategistRobyn In reply to OtakuTheUnicorn [2017-08-29 14:45:36 +0000 UTC]
..............
........
Well, I tried.
Nothing is perfect! Toodles! -Robyn used Teleport!-
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