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Published: 2010-01-29 22:26:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 476; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 8
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Your tattered, tasseled clothing,button eyes without thread,
chewed up, half-painted fingernails,
I love you,
You and your
disfigured sex appeal.
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I like it just the way it is so I can't suggest you change anything about it
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Thank you.
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I think it's just perfect. You give a very nice description of what you're explaining with colorful and descriptive words (sorry if i'm being redundant here?) I think the length is just perfect, honestly :3
I loved this piece completely!
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It's sweet, sort of. I like that you describe it "sex appeal", actually... It's unusual. Beauty is subjective, and infected by personal attachment to something, but sex appeal is something different.
I like your idea, and the shortness of this.
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Thank you! I'm glad it has that unusual feeling, because that's exactly what I was going for!
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I donβt think itβs too short or not detailed enough at all! I love how it points out things that really should be unappealing but for whatever reason you canβt help but love sometimes. Personally, I would put a full stop after the βI love you,β because then the rest would be seen as another point instead of flowing on from the rest of it, but thatβs just personal preference.
And having re-read my comment...I donβt think I make sense. Iβm sorry, today is not my day. Great poem though!
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Haha, personally I want to keep the last line, because actually that was my signature line to writing the poem. That line popped up on my head and that's how I got this poem. 
Thank you.
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Oh no, sorry! I wasn't meaning get rid of the last line. I don't actually know what I was saying now...I think I was saying having 'I love you.' with a fullstop instead of a comma and then the last line as usual. Sorry if I've misunderstood or made you misunderstand or...I'll stop now.
I feel like that's pretty much how I've been for weeks now. I'm thinking more sleep and less work would help. XD
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OH! Haha. Hmm, I feel like the comma keeps it from looking too open and too closed though. 
Yes, more sleep is good.
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i really love it
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Thank you.
THANK YOU!
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looooool! babble all you want 
YOU ARE VERY WELCOME
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This seems like one of your scraps but better. Its a short journey but makes it point with the last line.
You could make it longer, add more detail, but why? Its good.
I also detect a hint of humor in it.
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Hehe, you've detected well.
Thank you very much.
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Welcome. Just a little off beat, humorous twist...
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Kind of, yes.
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True. I think it's our quirks that give us depth, makes us interesting.
Personally, I dont have any quirks, so I am quite boring....
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Pfft, I bet that you have some quirks.
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Well, I do have Will Smith ears...its not a quirk per se, but I do tape them to my skull so they wont stick out as far!
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I say that's a quirk.
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Ya, maybe. I bet if I used Superglue. it would cease being a quirk and go right to inspired!
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I think it's amazing just how it is. If it were longer it would be too detailed. This is just the right amount to give us a taste of what you're talking about, and I can tell you it's a great taste.
Like lemon zest(:
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Thank you!
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You're welcome!
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Simple, yet striking. Short, yet profound. I love the last lines. They have a "Dammit! I love you!" feel to them that made me smile. And a nice use of magery too.
Woot! Unintentional Coraline reference! 
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You're welcome! And Coraline does rule!
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This piece is short, but delectably so. It has all the right trimmings to get the imagination stirring. The detail is a bit slim, but in this case, detail isn't what makes this piece stands out and so, it's not of importance. It's the openness of the poem that really makes it a charm. 
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your feedback on this piece.
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You're welcome, and I enjoyed reading it.
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Thank you! And thank you for the favorite on "All our fault" as well!
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Don't we all love someone who's just not right.
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Actually... the button eyes remind me of Coraline, which gives the opposite effect, seeing as the Beldam tries to sew buttons onto Coraline's eyes to 'love her forever' when she pretty much eats souls.
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Haha, yeah I wasn't necessarily intending it to be cute... but I need to see that movie.
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Well, the book is better... it only takes a couple of hours to read, too. But the movie is pretty good.
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Oh, I didn't know that it was a book. Not too surprising, though.
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Yeah, by Neil Gaiman. That guy is a creative genius.
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I will have to check that out as well.
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