Comments: 21
AlisonBlue [2011-05-31 00:18:53 +0000 UTC]
I have an extraordinary fondness for asterisks.
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AlisonBlue In reply to Panmiro [2011-05-31 01:29:00 +0000 UTC]
yes, they certainly are.
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Fayyde [2011-04-22 18:08:33 +0000 UTC]
Shuffle through the empty spaces
βtween the words that are not there
And visit all the foreign places
Where asterisks stand stark and bare
IS GOOD. and should be included like...
sped through pages of your life
drunk the joy and spit the strife
MISSING STANZA HERE
After, only after,
very very very good, like loved it a lot.
vivre??? your really gonna use french? *sigh* (joke)
also:
I know life is best lived unexplained
And Innocence can't be regained
But one thing which I do maintainβ¦
Is that all life's sentences have researched meaning
that is genius. and mirrors me, in startlingly accurate ways. exact same ideas but different words to express. shit scared me. like that last one where it sort of mirror throne of bayonets. shit.
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Panmiro In reply to Fayyde [2011-04-24 01:30:08 +0000 UTC]
you don't like the collective unconscious?
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Fayyde In reply to Panmiro [2011-04-24 10:49:59 +0000 UTC]
i dont believe in speculation.
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Panmiro In reply to Fayyde [2011-04-24 16:46:20 +0000 UTC]
Speculation? like looking for gold and oil? *playing dumb*
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Fayyde In reply to Panmiro [2011-04-24 19:08:59 +0000 UTC]
-_-' in thinks illogical and spiritual.
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Panmiro In reply to Fayyde [2011-04-30 04:14:14 +0000 UTC]
incoherency?
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Fayyde In reply to Panmiro [2011-04-30 23:09:39 +0000 UTC]
i think** its illogical and dumb
sorry lol
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Panmiro In reply to Fayyde [2011-05-01 17:49:28 +0000 UTC]
No problem. Hah
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CHiC-con-STiCKS [2011-04-22 05:16:06 +0000 UTC]
uber cool. (I sound like a dork)
like I WAS saying, this is brilliant. I like the stanza you didn't include in your piece, although I'm not sure where to put it.
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collinsajoshua [2011-04-22 04:17:05 +0000 UTC]
If it was me I would put it just before the line 'So after you have gone the mile' because the poem then becomes more fluid flowing nicely connecting even more so then before your two forms of imagery which is writing and travelling.But thats just me, put it wherever you think is right.
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collinsajoshua [2011-04-22 03:53:58 +0000 UTC]
Soooo good!
And yes include the extra stanza
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