Comments: 9
EliteLenny223 [2017-02-22 13:15:22 +0000 UTC]
Spot on with the story. Goodness... Why didn't I see this? You could have tried a writing gig in Fanfiction. PM me if you want a review. ^_^ You've done well on this.
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Boomerang503 [2010-01-23 17:24:26 +0000 UTC]
This is pretty good! It sure gives me some idea of modern striker combat for the CM Air Force.
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pauldy In reply to vjptox [2010-01-11 13:49:11 +0000 UTC]
Actually I'm unsure myself if ACM they used were correct or even proper..
Frankly, when i play in flight sims like Lock On, I actually suck at the Dogfight Aspect. : I'm a type of player whose reliant on Missiles.
But anyway i feel contented placing some real ACMs in it unlike the Random Immelmans and Split S they did in Strike Witches Anime..
"Lieutenant Raisa Quirino" Sorry for that typo, Maybe i was thinking about Faina while i was typing
About Raisa going on a "Rampage" it was supposed to be changed wherein Colonel Yap orders them to defend themselves instead and if they can, Pursuit Xaio Lei's flight.. BUT my eyes were too stressed and went with the current plot anyway (A case of laziness for others maybe)
This is Maria [link] Well she was a witch in the 40s but was KIA. I named her after Cesar Basa, a Filipino pilot who fought in WWII against Imperial Japan.
But yah, She has an issue with Neuroi. I'm choosing whether she has a sort of connection or empathy with them or that the lost of her parents were caused by Neuroi..
About Crissey, she's kinda crybaby at times..
Wow~ Thanks for reading through, Hope your eyes din stressed out cause mine did
As for these "Light Novel" I dunno but i may no longer continue with it.
I had big dreams for this like including illustrations to accompany the story similar to real Light Novels.. but bummer, impossible for a one-man show
Anyway it was sort of a pilot edition, Just trying it out
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sabekuji-kaneda [2010-01-10 10:57:51 +0000 UTC]
There are a bit errors but overall great story!
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