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SouthBlade [2021-06-16 13:02:18 +0000 UTC]
Any update on the sequel?
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deystor [2021-05-19 20:45:30 +0000 UTC]
Is it playable on android
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Pixargirl [2020-08-03 05:17:58 +0000 UTC]
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JimTemp [2018-05-31 16:35:42 +0000 UTC]
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I thoroughly enjoyed playing & then further exploring 'WitchQuest'!
The inevitable outcome of the prologue came as a nice, twisted surprise. (I half expected for the captive to be brought 'out of retirement' to fight a greater evil before the game ended.)
It's my favorite interactive story to date! I liked the richness, the excellent illustrations, and the mixture of attitudinal choices and puzzle challenges. I particularly liked the delayed consequence for wrongly solving the last puzzle.
Here are two things that might enhance a follow-on story:
(1) Although I liked the mid-level challenges of the puzzles in the story, I'm a bit tired of seeing mathematical puzzles inserted 'everywhere'. I'd like to see challenge questions that fit more closely into the story's context. In this case, they could relate to: martial arts, magic spells, bondage techniques, and escapology. Consider for example items #2613, #2614, #2560, & #1140 from 'The Ashley Book of Knots'. Even something as simple as selecting the right set of shibari terms to describe an illustration might work.
(2) K-a-r-y-u (aka Redragon) has been one of my favorite artists ever since I first discovered Deviantart. I love the way the clean-cut style & lucid colors capture the heroines' attitude & physicality. It always has a lite, fun touch; yet the binds are quite restrictive & secure. I love the cute outfits, the reinforced restraints, the masks & hoods, giving the impression that they're not coming off anytime soon.
Of course, in a future story, I'd like to see a greater variety of confining postures, and more interaction between characters.
Interactive fiction is quite demanding in terms of the number of illustrations. So consider combining modular illustrations, for example, showing Cynthia trussed up on one side with Fantom on the other. Half-panels showing Cynthia presenting either her front or back could be mixed with half-panels showing Fantom holding either a crop or a feather duster. The key is to maintain a consistent perspective. Such an approach could portray a variety of interactions. (On the other hand, I don't want to limit K-a-r-y-u's creative freedom by imposing too many constraints.)
Perhaps you could set up some sort of open contest on DeviantArt to generate a large set of images of the characters in an upcoming story. Achieving the right balance between being too prescriptive & not getting what you need could be tricky.
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phantomdotexe In reply to Arcannon123 [2018-05-27 15:18:23 +0000 UTC]
I'd have enjoyed more illustrations, but I'm not a visual artist - and there are 393 illustrations!
If I were to do another one that was entirely illustrated, it'd only be about 5 or 6 passages long.
thank you so much for the helpful critique!
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slayers80 [2020-03-23 07:23:34 +0000 UTC]
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phantomdotexe In reply to nevergiveup2407 [2019-12-23 02:08:24 +0000 UTC]
I hope to finish it in 2020. And you’re right it is a lot of work. But thank you, I’m honored you liked it.
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phantomdotexe In reply to sk8punkm [2019-11-19 03:50:48 +0000 UTC]
I want to, but expectations are so high...
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sk8punkm In reply to phantomdotexe [2019-11-19 05:08:00 +0000 UTC]
haha youve wrote the first one too well?
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KappaoMark [2019-10-02 07:42:49 +0000 UTC]
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phantomdotexe In reply to Danteboy94 [2019-09-14 05:53:27 +0000 UTC]
I meant to work on it this summer, but life just got in the way. :/
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logbed [2019-06-19 05:59:42 +0000 UTC]
When will part 2 be up?
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BigBossEzio [2019-04-19 11:47:58 +0000 UTC]
Damn, this was awesome! Thank you!
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phantomdotexe In reply to BigBossEzio [2019-04-21 21:08:12 +0000 UTC]
I'm so glad you liekd it. It takes a while to make but I want to make more.
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SouthBlade [2019-01-02 01:25:58 +0000 UTC]
I love these stories, any idea when the next part will be released?
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dfgsdlfg [2018-11-30 10:26:11 +0000 UTC]
Any update as to when we will get to enjoy the sequel?
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phantomdotexe In reply to dfgsdlfg [2018-11-30 19:25:29 +0000 UTC]
By the end of this year for sure.
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sk8punkm In reply to phantomdotexe [2019-01-20 03:58:01 +0000 UTC]
Haha so this next year? Jk take all the time
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phantomdotexe In reply to sk8punkm [2018-09-15 03:08:09 +0000 UTC]
Hahah. It's coming this Autumn.
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Falinzer [2018-06-25 02:31:33 +0000 UTC]
Fantom's a witch? Wasn't she a ninja?
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Falinzer In reply to phantomdotexe [2018-08-31 05:06:40 +0000 UTC]
Mayhap. But I am particular about my witches!
(Ninja Quest sounds better imo tho, despite the cliche sounding title.)
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Falinzer In reply to phantomdotexe [2018-10-02 12:52:28 +0000 UTC]
Cooool, looking forward to it.
But you done a bunch of them tho!
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phantomdotexe In reply to Falinzer [2018-10-06 02:51:24 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, bbut that's because I had a lot of help. If you ever have ideas, let me know.
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Falinzer In reply to phantomdotexe [2018-10-07 18:14:41 +0000 UTC]
Oh really? Well, my ideas mostly deal magic, witches, and my witchy OC. Probably not much help there ha.
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VoraxArtifex [2018-06-24 06:43:26 +0000 UTC]
Honestly I cannot stress enough how much I love this whole thing! (≧ω≦)
I had only read one of the endings, before I had to go out IRL and do something, but the whole time I was out, I was just thinking about coming back to this~! It's so captivating. I love the writing style and story progression, as well as the pictures~! Now I wish I had gotten in on this story while you were still making it! ^^
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VoraxArtifex In reply to phantomdotexe [2018-09-16 00:06:10 +0000 UTC]
Favorite ending? There're so many to choose from~! Honestly, I'm a fan of just any of the peril endings. Like the ending where the mirror binds Fantom if you spend too long looking in it, or the part where the orcs overthrow you and keep you as a trophy. And, of course, the podded plant ending ^^
A lot of my favorite bits aren't even endings, though. For example, I'm a huge fan of the scenario where Sanae gets encased with the shiny black ichor~! Or the bit with the explorer, Deanna. I'm basically always enjoying going through ever scenario ^^ I also like how you can do away with Zanthie and just leave her alone and bound... I could go on for a while about my favorite segments~
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n00dls In reply to VoraxArtifex [2019-01-15 05:05:15 +0000 UTC]
How do you get to the potted plant ending?
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Tarbal40 [2018-06-08 09:58:26 +0000 UTC]
Nice. I haven't played through all the endings yet, but so far, I like this as much as Double World Ninja, and that was one of the first things I ever favorited on Deviantart.
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phantomdotexe In reply to Tarbal40 [2018-06-21 20:41:44 +0000 UTC]
wow! thanks a bunch, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. ^_^
I'm glad I could produce several things you really loved!
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