ReGaSLZR [2014-04-29 07:11:32 +0000 UTC]
Gotta say, this chapter tested my... hm, what do I call this? Patience? (oh, but please don't be offended)
Having seen this featured in Werewriters, I quickly had the burning expectation of reading something related to werewolves, normal wolves and the like. So I read on and had my expectations go down a bit.
But, in truth, I got reminded of how important it is to have patience especially when things started to heat up, with the mysterious stranger and all.
This piece is fine, considering how well you describe people and places and actions. I kind of get the feeling that you're not a newbie at that area. But you could use some introductory lines or thoughts/narration of the protagonist to infuse ideas to readers. (Ideas on how the story goes or ends, or what it's about)
All in all, I can sense a great premise in your story. Keep it up!
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