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Published: 2012-07-08 21:38:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 2713; Favourites: 89; Downloads: 11
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The killing seasonis upon us again -
our sons gone underground,
our trees become weapons
and the last bloom
of our youth
laid bare by carrion.
In town the men
all ask for cigarettes -
the nicotine on their breath
stalking new prey
as it mingles in the streets
and tries to look
indifferent.
The women wear handkerchiefs
like bandages
wrapping their heads;
and from the buildings
stream white flags
and sheets,
warning the children
there are vacancies
below the surface.
Our houses
do not recognize us -
we leave the doors open
while the windows look
disinterested
and the gardens starve.
But we shall collect wounds
this harvest -
roots trapped in soil,
dry husks in crates
and barrels by the score
to haul to market,
the slender barter
of our dreams
a final afterthought
treading on our tongues.
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Thanks! I had the first line in my head for about half a year.
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it's a great line, and you fleshed it out perfectly.
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This one is smooth and cool. Dark and artful while seemingly effortlessly conveyed. Very good.
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Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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Wow...that was beautiful. Amazing work.
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This is haunting. It rivals some of the poetry I've read from English writers in World War I.
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"our trees become weapons
and the last bloom
of our youth
laid bare by carrion."
Very chilling, the poem as a whole.
If you do publish, do post on DA to let us all know. Would love to have a book of your work.
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Love that the whole world blooms alive in your poetry.
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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Unsettling and slightly dark. You have a way with words.
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*Smiles* I seem to dwell in unsettling and slightly dark these days. It may become my motto! Thanks.
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You could adopt the street name 'Exlax'
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Beautiful imagery layered with disquieting descriptions, stunning work! My only question is "The women wear handkerchiefs/like bandages", what sort of imagery did you expect the readers to gain from that line?
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White squares of cloth wrapped around their heads like bandages. Many thanks!
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Oh I understand now, I was picturing band-aids rather than gauze... rather disgusting imagery...
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Goodness! Halloween isn't for a few more months at least! 
I loved it and I quite enjoyed "but we shall collect wounds this harvest"
and "While the windows look disintegrated and the gardens starve"
Your poetry is a delicacy for the tongue.
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*Smiles* Maybe I should do a Xmas one next? Many thanks!
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Christmas in July does seem to be a trend.
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When I do visit D.A. I look at your poetry in my inbox first, and it's never a dissapointing visit.
Again, another beautiful piece. (please make a book and publish it!)
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Thanks very much. I am halfway through self-publishing a book, but I put it on hold. I have started submitting a lot of work to online poetry sites and print magazines. Most have strict rules regarding work already in print.
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How delightfully bleak, my dear - quite masterful.
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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Very powerful...I was hooked with the first stanza. Amazing job.
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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You're very welcome.
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They should just label you the God of Poetry if they haven't already. You always write such strong pieces, it's like every word warps into an image. 
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That is incredibly nice of you. Many thanks!
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Just speaking the truth. ^^ Youβre welcome!
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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You are very welcome
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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I am glad you like it -many thanks.
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To make more space underground, we can always pile more ground on top of bodies to lift it higher. Someone is always willing to make an excuse to start it happening.
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Unfortunately, that is all too correct!
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Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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I just got back on here after a break. I just finished reading this and WoW...beautiful! Your words are delicious. I want to eat this poem
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Thanks very much - I appreciate it.
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When I saw this on my Watch I closed my eyes and said, "Yes...!"
Beautiful as always, though I especially liked the first stanza. I thought that "carrion" was a good word to use and it really popped for me.
I must say that I miss poetry month and how it forced you to write something new every day ^_^
Keep up the great work!
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Thanks. I should try and do something every day again...if my muse will cooperate!
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I know what you mean 
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