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Description Miss Williams! Miss Williams!
You’d really best come quick!
The wise men keep on arguing,
And Joseph’s just been sick!

The star somehow got broken,
We don’t know yet who did it,
Some say that it was Lizzie -
I think it was Ned Pitt.

The girls were playing with Jesus,
And his head somehow came off…
And the boy that sings the solo,
Just got a nasty cough.

The wise men are still bickering,
Over which of them is most wise,
And one really seems to think,
That he’s God in disguise.

The shepherds have just lost their sheep,
And don’t know what to do –
I don’t suppose that you’d know where
To find a random ewe?

Betsy says her tooth’s come out,
And that she wants her mum;
And by now Joseph is looking
Really rather glum…

The audience are coming in,
But we’re really in a state,
Do you think they’ll mind too much
If we’re about an hour late?

The scenery’s fallen down again –
I just thought that you should know,
And, Miss Williams, you’ll never guess…
Miss Williams? Where’d you go?
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Comments: 52

Daxalicious [2008-12-26 07:43:11 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha! That's lovely.

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cholie [2008-12-26 06:39:46 +0000 UTC]

This is so refreshing to read. It's so witty and flows so well. Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! It is well deserved. I too can relate to this, for my mom is also a teacher (she teaches pre k).

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BriannaTWedge [2008-12-26 05:48:25 +0000 UTC]

cool

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Areia [2008-12-26 04:31:05 +0000 UTC]

I could see the scene playing out in my head as I read this, and couldn't help but laugh aloud. Good work.

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lizziferandpandas [2008-12-26 03:27:58 +0000 UTC]

omg its so cute

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DeathItself [2008-12-26 03:24:56 +0000 UTC]

lol!! greeeat

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MiracleRaverDJMelody [2008-12-26 03:13:14 +0000 UTC]

This is too great. Such imagination in writing it! I really enjoyed reading it. ^^b

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DemonHearts [2008-12-26 03:02:42 +0000 UTC]

This made me giggle like a schoolgirl. Wonderfully written!

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TheBananaLamper [2008-12-26 03:02:36 +0000 UTC]

This is awesome! No wonder you got a DD!

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ff7aangel [2008-12-26 02:46:34 +0000 UTC]

this is very charming, and a perfect description of what christmas time at school is in a nutshell lol really great job, it is very descriptive and poetic

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MyLaundryStinks [2008-12-26 01:48:31 +0000 UTC]

Aaahahahahaha, that's awesome! Very cute.
I hope you had a very Merry Christmas.

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Yamatori-Chan [2008-12-26 01:43:29 +0000 UTC]

i luv this poem its so emotional and btw my mom is a teacher too XD

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Xandi5anders [2008-12-26 01:42:10 +0000 UTC]

So cute. Reminds me of the movie Simon Birch

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noelgray [2008-12-26 00:18:03 +0000 UTC]

This is just precious! And so true... I laughed the whole way, and the most at that cute (semi-)surprise ending!

On a stylistic note, your rhymes are refreshingly noncliche, and you refuse to be bound too closely to metre. It was truly a pleasure to read!

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ninetails390 [2008-12-26 00:05:21 +0000 UTC]

This is just adorable!

And ohhhh gosh, I know what you mean! I work in an after school care program, and the childrens are crazy during Christmas time! I think it's a mix of overexcitement and the fact that everyone seems to be sick during the winter. D8

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aspirin111 [2008-12-25 22:40:37 +0000 UTC]

this is soo amazing!

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oLIVEgREENcRAYON [2008-12-25 22:34:10 +0000 UTC]

Thisis just adorable; told from the view of an innocent, brutefully honest and blunt child.

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AngelHalfie [2008-12-25 22:15:20 +0000 UTC]

This definitely made me smile a LOT. I remember plays like this all throughout my first few years of schooling...thanks for this Christmas treat!!!

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TobiObito4ever [2008-12-25 20:38:22 +0000 UTC]

Very cute and witty! Kinda reminds me of A Christmas Story and The Best X-Mas Pagent Ever.

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Brat-Innocenty [2008-12-25 20:35:05 +0000 UTC]

I really hope you'll still be around to see your incredible work finally getting the recognition it always deserved to begin with... It's an incredible comical piece of poetry, well on the level of the published works Seeing it getting the Daily Deviation only once the author is away from the site for over half a year... I certainly hope it didn't come too late!

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shaedey [2008-12-25 20:30:34 +0000 UTC]

it reminds me of shel (sp)silverstien's style, really awesome rhyming .

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Almost-Certain [2008-12-25 20:18:47 +0000 UTC]

Ah nativity plays, I was Mary once, and the sunday school teacher gave me a row because i took a darker doll to be Jesus, and she was all like, 'OMG Jesus was white ><', and I was like, 'Was he? Where'd he grow up, Leeds?'

I didn't really say that, I was only like 5, but then she took being Mary away from me, and gave it to a girl who took a white doll in. My sunday school teacher was a racist. No wonder I'm an Atheist.

Merry Christmas.

Sorry about the Spam ><

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LightOrangeFur [2008-12-25 20:18:44 +0000 UTC]

awsome, it's very funny, and true.

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jsting [2008-12-25 20:03:53 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful poem.

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Daleeria [2008-12-25 18:22:02 +0000 UTC]

This is wonderful, and it was very true back in the days that I was in Christmas plays of any type. I remember one year we were dressed up as different christmas things in little boxes that looked like decorating houses and we were each suppose to memorize a page from the 'Night Before Christmas' I completely forgot to memorize and I basically just improvised... I wasn't the only one either. We got a standing ovation (though at the time we really didn't know what that meant). ^_^

It does make me worry about what I'm going to go through if I decide to become an elementary school teacher... maybe I should stick to high school?

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UrDanc3r [2008-12-25 17:40:39 +0000 UTC]

so cute!!!!!!
oh god i can relate to this - this brings back memories!!!!!!
wonderful!

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CrashHooligan [2008-12-25 17:31:13 +0000 UTC]

this is wonderful. it's so very cute and funny and the rhyme really fits the mood of the poem.

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xcitykat [2008-12-25 17:20:10 +0000 UTC]

Oh, this is just tremendous! I too am the child of a teacher (pre-kindergarten through elementary school) and also remember the disasters of my own youthful attempts at drama. I typically don't like rhyming poetry but this was very clever and the imagery is so clear. I can't wait to share this with my family later today when we get together. Congratulations!

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Sola84 [2008-12-25 17:14:13 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of the group of poems called 'Dog in the playground.' one poem was about a kid complaining to a teacher about a boy called Derek Drew. lol

I love this!

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Nedra19 [2008-12-25 16:55:56 +0000 UTC]

Lol! Fantastic job espescially the end!

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UchihaXSayu [2008-12-25 16:35:51 +0000 UTC]

LOL niiice!!! my moms a teacher...i could see her doing the same thing

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tenth-muse [2008-12-25 16:22:59 +0000 UTC]

Aw, this brings back some memories haha.
This reminds me quite a bit of Shel Silverstein

Wonderful job!

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orzokiki [2008-12-25 16:09:55 +0000 UTC]

Haha Jesus's head popped off

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raspberry-moon [2008-12-25 15:36:11 +0000 UTC]

ah yes, i remember all the christmas concerts that i had to do (as a student). i really liked this it made me smile.
merry christmas to you and congrats on the DD.

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DragonDreamer93 [2008-12-25 15:26:04 +0000 UTC]

this is hilarious!

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iheartmyjarhead [2008-12-25 15:16:31 +0000 UTC]

that was so cute. My Christmas hasn't been all that good without my boyfriend around, whereas he's in Iraq. Anyways that little poem just put a smile on my face, and actually made me laugh a little as well.

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moonlightdrippedtear [2008-12-25 15:08:42 +0000 UTC]

loti...Poor Ms. Williams!

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dark-amethyst [2008-12-25 13:13:45 +0000 UTC]

That was hilarious! I loved it. Lovely rhymes you've got there.

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gallymont [2008-12-25 13:08:23 +0000 UTC]

That is a really awesome poem. It reads like you have put alot of work into the conversational tone of the character.

When i was in kindy our infants class was having a nativity play, i was going to be a sheep, then two hours before the play the girl playing gabriel cut off her toe with a shovel! So i played gabriel... i don't remember it much, but there are photos of me, lol. I think they put her toe back on, buts she wasn't the sharpest tool in the shed.

Thanks for the trip donw memory lane... lol.

Merry Christmas (technically that ended 7 minutes ago for me...)

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Miss-Styk [2008-12-25 11:52:52 +0000 UTC]

Haha my last name is Williams!


Congrats on the DD! x

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melodythelittlepony [2008-12-25 09:37:33 +0000 UTC]

This was just lovely! It certainly made me smile.

I can relate to this, as I am also a teacher's daughter, and volunteered to help teach my mum's class 'Santa Claus is Back in Town'.

Merry Christmas!

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Chaldemone [2008-12-25 09:34:56 +0000 UTC]

In the line "The shepherds have just lost their sheep," I don't think "have" really does anything other than add a syllable to an already long line. Maybe get rid of it?

Anyway, it's a really fun poem and quite an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing it.

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Chaldemone In reply to Chaldemone [2008-12-25 09:36:40 +0000 UTC]

..lol, just noticed "that" two lines below the one I pointed out. I'd skipped over that word when I read it, and the poem flows well without it methinks. Just something for you to reconsider.

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hydrogenpops [2008-12-25 09:04:48 +0000 UTC]

wow ! this is really nice!

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LizzieMuder [2008-12-25 08:45:03 +0000 UTC]

wow.
that was amazing!
put a smile on my face!

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aslix [2008-12-25 08:41:01 +0000 UTC]

this is amazing

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DarkestElemental616 [2008-12-25 08:34:09 +0000 UTC]

You were wise to name yourself after a Muse.

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Lizs-art [2008-12-25 08:26:43 +0000 UTC]

This is pretty good. Congrats on the DD.

PS Merry Christmas!

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hyenacub [2008-12-25 08:18:43 +0000 UTC]

LOL! This is fantastic... Poor Miss Williams! Nicely done! Fun rhymes and vivid imagery. Congrats on the DD! : )

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SomethingFerocious [2008-12-25 08:09:30 +0000 UTC]

This brought a much needed post-frantic-Christmas-Eve smile to my face. I hope this receives all the praise it so evidently deserves. It really is a great poem. God bless Sunday school teachers and teachers in general, they've got difficult jobs...

Have a very merry Christmas, and congratulations on the Daily Deviation!

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