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Published: 2009-02-01 01:53:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 21029; Favourites: 408; Downloads: 121
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Description Death slouches over the edge of her bed, licking his lips as he caresses her thighs. He sings the noise of wind and rain crashing all around and her head throbs with the sound. Her head is hot. Her forehead is on fire and her cheeks catch alight with it. She burns silently and sees red, red, black.

Tiny insects have crawled beneath her fingernails and they dig with tiny claws and teeth until they are swarming beneath her skin, biting outward at her flesh. Each vertebrae carries bruises and as she tosses her body about the bed they ache loudly and sharply.

All the heat has rushed to her face, her body shakes like a leaf in wind and goosebumps make known on every limb. I am dying, she tells herself- she can hardly hear this amongst the sound of hornets and the pressure in her head, but death smiles.

Her voice is lost. She calls aloud for someone and only death can make out the words. She cannot swallow, she can no longer move. Her hands desperately comfort her skin and she feels it like she never has. Her empty stomach growls beneath her fingers. Find me sleep, she begs, but sleep ignores her cries. The sickness holds ever tighter to her fragile body and she cannot find the strength to cry.

Just take me then, she whispers to the blackness leaning against her bed. And he begins to, takes hold of her legs, pulling himself up until he is lying atop her, taking the air from her lungs and lying heavy. Then the valium kicks in.

She dreams things she cannot explain and the night stretches on for months.
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Comments: 104

Randomnameofuser [2017-02-04 06:04:49 +0000 UTC]

... well that was interesting.

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RWBY42 [2015-11-07 06:59:31 +0000 UTC]

Wow...this is amazing...so visionary, so great! Good job!

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HyaRay [2012-09-20 02:56:31 +0000 UTC]

Been there. I feel ya.

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mesingze [2011-11-29 23:34:14 +0000 UTC]

".. and the night stretches on for months."

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pikapi19 [2011-09-08 08:42:55 +0000 UTC]

omg its so sad ithink im gonna cry! that insect part was grossssssssssss!!!

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Septeara [2011-06-21 23:41:06 +0000 UTC]

That was very well written. I can relate. The insects part was very beautiful and descriptive. I've read a few of your literature pieces and i have to say, I adore your mind

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KiraJacqueline [2011-06-19 02:59:36 +0000 UTC]

Totally feeling you. As in, right now.

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MISAMISA2NDKIRA [2011-05-07 21:57:07 +0000 UTC]

This is really good! I love your sensory detail!

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littleblueninja [2011-04-25 07:01:20 +0000 UTC]

whats valium?

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GoldenGirl954 [2011-04-04 21:14:31 +0000 UTC]

Really vivid description.
And yes, I guess we all had those moments when we aren't feeling well

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0Meg [2011-03-10 20:32:51 +0000 UTC]

.... this made me cry(in a good way)

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dontblinkphotography [2011-03-04 20:56:09 +0000 UTC]

awesome "then the valium kicks in."

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Jinxxescapethefate [2011-03-02 21:32:29 +0000 UTC]

Amazing.
You described it perfectly.

Feel Better soon.

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TeakupFieldBerry [2011-02-22 02:58:47 +0000 UTC]

Lovely! I can identify with this; I've suffered from about three bouts with the flu, a cyst, mono, a concussion, and dehydration for the past year, and it's sucked. So great piece!

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Pegz-with-a-pencil [2011-02-19 09:44:53 +0000 UTC]

I feel a little bit like that when I have period pains. Only without the fever. I hate having period pains

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mkdsingergirl [2011-01-09 01:56:52 +0000 UTC]

Funny thing is i'm reading this while i'm in bed sick with Step or something. Great discription

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LaurenLoverOfArts [2010-09-22 00:06:33 +0000 UTC]

What a wonderfully morbid piece of fiction.

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sommerfield-akatsuki [2010-08-03 02:41:54 +0000 UTC]

U did a great job, i felt this way too. i get strep every fall and it makes me feel terrible

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UltimaKhaos14 [2010-03-03 22:08:58 +0000 UTC]

Sounds like when I had a combo of mono/swine/strept a few months ago...

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BlackWhiskers [2010-02-17 19:09:11 +0000 UTC]

ugh. whenever Iยดm sick my lungs fill up with gunk. and my feet like to pull me backwards I love the images you put into it ^^

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zzzsleepyrockerzzz [2010-01-22 03:33:23 +0000 UTC]

This is beautifully written. i understand. weird stuff happens when youre sick. i love the way u personify death. rarely seen

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The-Kid-Who-Screams [2009-11-30 20:55:14 +0000 UTC]

dude forget that stuff! that was AWSOME!

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Deadwolf21rise [2009-09-27 15:15:46 +0000 UTC]

wow, this is something amazing. I've felt dis way many times, mostly cuz im a sickly child. But to see it expressed in words, thts awesome.

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numbuh-14000 [2009-09-26 00:05:04 +0000 UTC]

ugh. I know what you mean. I'm sick with the flu right now. Let's hope it's not swine flu.

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inkblot-101 [2009-09-21 16:03:20 +0000 UTC]

this is exactly how i feel right now ugh....
good writing... *attempts a smile*

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chiyna [2009-04-21 14:29:18 +0000 UTC]

This was very well written and descriptive. I could really feel your illness as I am feeling similarly myself today. Well done.

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violet-x [2009-04-19 12:58:29 +0000 UTC]

Amazing imagery
But sounds so terrible.

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JetCar [2009-04-06 09:45:15 +0000 UTC]

It reminds me of when I had chicken pox, the flu, and a cold all at once... Ugh. Chills, impossible to breathe, and constant migrains. :S

Being sick SUCKS!

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Simply-Autumn [2009-03-31 10:57:51 +0000 UTC]

Wow! You must have been pretty miserable!

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licoricefactory [2009-03-14 12:02:58 +0000 UTC]

I love how you personified death. Damn, you have inspired me to write more often.

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XdefineXweirdX [2009-03-13 22:27:24 +0000 UTC]

Amazing. You paint such a vivid picture with your words. Would you mind if i tried to draw this?

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InsmouthFishPerson [2009-03-04 00:20:14 +0000 UTC]

This is entirely different if you misinterprit the first scentence and are under the impression Death is the girl.

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Koronue [2009-02-20 23:12:03 +0000 UTC]

if thats how you get sick, i never ever wanna catch it!!
thats terrible
this was so long ago, i do hope that by now you are better
i love how you wrote this, bad that i find neat things in yer pain.... erm.... >_<
K

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Death-by-Candy [2009-02-09 09:49:06 +0000 UTC]

Wow, that's brilliant. Nice imagery in the words .

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secret-soul [2009-02-08 22:28:40 +0000 UTC]

This is amazingly written. The emotion behind your words is quite surreal.

xx

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aestheticirony [2009-02-06 02:48:42 +0000 UTC]

it's very good. i love how you incorporated some sense of sensuality into it (or maybe i am just imagining this?). it's hard to describe the way you feel when you're reading this.

you are too good at this for your own good. even when you are sick, far too good.

and yes, i do know the feeling. i hope very much that you feel better, dear nirrimi.

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LilKirov [2009-02-05 07:06:58 +0000 UTC]

Nicely captured im sick all the time Dx. This speaks to me
*clap*

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112358clee [2009-02-04 15:41:35 +0000 UTC]

sounds like my last few days

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avalanchepark [2009-02-04 02:41:37 +0000 UTC]

riveting prose - a very dark image - I frankly didn't expect the subject to live

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ungraciouspastor [2009-02-04 01:34:11 +0000 UTC]


I thought this was a re-imagining of the Pluto and Proserpina story.

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wiccalaura [2009-02-03 22:48:39 +0000 UTC]

It's really cool... And I hope you get better soon

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dinosawrawr [2009-02-03 17:18:00 +0000 UTC]

i thought it was about a necrophiliac...my bad...
brilliant writing though!

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TomeiMikka [2009-02-03 07:16:27 +0000 UTC]

I'm sorry this happened to you

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YouInventedMe [2009-02-03 01:59:09 +0000 UTC]

fantastic imagery


xo!

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february-night [2009-02-03 00:36:33 +0000 UTC]

Incredible. Would you understand if I said it was agonizing in a good way?
Also... how do you do that?! I always found it astounding that you can write a full story just about a certain subject - storms, sickness, being sat on by old crazy men - without making it seem like an essay for school. And how do you know if something will make a good story? I seem to always write about my experiences long after they've passed instead of as they're happening.
Anyway, awesome work. Hope you feel better soon!!

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SpamSp4mSpam [2009-02-02 23:20:59 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful. Way to make soemthing great out of shitty circumstances!

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brassteeth [2009-02-02 10:00:37 +0000 UTC]

great final line...

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entropy-herself [2009-02-02 06:41:51 +0000 UTC]

Grossly accurate. Haha. ^____^ This was me, as well... And I never get sick... But it finally happened. Still recovering. *koffkoff*

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Reizza [2009-02-02 06:19:53 +0000 UTC]

That sounds awful. I was pretty miserably sick last night as well though. So cold! Except for my head which was hot. Being sick suuuuucks. T_T

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PsychicSkitty [2009-02-02 04:02:20 +0000 UTC]

I think this is a very interesting poem that captures the feeling of being very sick in a very interesting way. I like it.

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