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ChaosPhantom444 [2015-01-02 07:08:52 +0000 UTC]
Pretty and dangerous. I like it!
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Admiral-Thunder-Bolt [2013-08-02 20:05:12 +0000 UTC]
This guy is SOOOO not a pony based off of Black Beard!
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Priceless911 In reply to Admiral-Thunder-Bolt [2013-08-02 21:11:41 +0000 UTC]
she isnt a male. Blade is wearing a dress. fav.me/d5x27g3
moments prior, she was attending a galla in the Griffin Royal palace that was celibrating the start of a war, (since the griffin kingdoms is a war mongering nation) yet she is a mercenary who was working for the enemy army, so she decided to make her intro, one to remember.
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Admiral-Thunder-Bolt In reply to Priceless911 [2013-08-02 23:26:10 +0000 UTC]
Oh. I thought that the sparks comming off of the blades on HER dress were actualy fuses. Thats why I thought that the character was a ponyfied version of Black Bead. Sorry 'bout that.
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Priceless911 In reply to Admiral-Thunder-Bolt [2013-08-03 04:42:09 +0000 UTC]
np while she was in an alley she put on some special blades that attach to her wings. and the sparks where from the blades grinding against the alley walls
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Priceless911 In reply to Noble-Shield [2013-07-16 04:27:02 +0000 UTC]
I've actually written a story on the wing blades, they were an experimental weapon developed by the griffin kingdoms but due to their weight and uncomfortable shape, no griffin could use them effectively in combat because of the decrease in mobility, and agility. however Blade has used them since she stole them at a young age so she was the first to fight effectively with them, and because of her devious beauty, the weapons where dubbed "The Cupid's Kiss" however this story is set about 1006 years ago, before Nightmare Moon's imprisonment.
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Noble-Shield In reply to Priceless911 [2013-07-16 05:27:02 +0000 UTC]
You are now my new idol. I've been wanting to make stories like that and written that well for awhile now and that just blew my mind.
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Priceless911 In reply to Noble-Shield [2013-07-16 10:20:19 +0000 UTC]
Thx, the way i see it, everything that play a role in the story has to have a history of its own. if its something you make up yourself then you should give it its own history.
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Priceless911 In reply to Noble-Shield [2013-07-17 20:27:28 +0000 UTC]
i'll wish you luck. there isnt much advice i can give other then, choose something that interests you (comedy, action, adventure, drama ect.) the more interest you keep in the story, the better it will turn out for the readers. sometimes i find myself on the edge of my seat while i write just because while writing i may have a quick idea that throws a twist into the story and excites me for the next chapter. so dont always disregard these random ideas. even if you dont use it now, you can always fit it in later. Also find a good proofreader. id volunteer but im terrible even at my own work, lol. small things are understandable but the difference between Her and Here can always confuse the reader, and ruin a good moment in the story.
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Noble-Shield In reply to Priceless911 [2013-07-19 10:58:53 +0000 UTC]
I can see how that would ruin, since Romance stories are really my main goal here lol. But really my main concern is the use of commas and the fact that my spaceing has been on the fritz lately
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Priceless911 In reply to Noble-Shield [2013-07-19 12:42:54 +0000 UTC]
just remember a comma is used for a slight pause, but if you want a longer pause then three periods "..." is best to used. for example pausing for dramatic effect, or when a character is heavily breathing (due to pain or exhaustion or is hesitant on what to say next. This works very well in romance when the character is shy and worried he/she might say the wrong thing.
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Noble-Shield In reply to Priceless911 [2013-07-20 01:39:18 +0000 UTC]
Ive noticed i nmy RPs then ive been using the three dots where the commas should be. lol i guess its a good thing i took up RPing again, the practice is really good. But thank you for that tip.
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Priceless911 In reply to Dell-AD-productions [2013-07-16 04:20:46 +0000 UTC]
Thx but it inst my art, i only created the character and wrote the scene that is being shown here.
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