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Hi. You mind reading this fanfiction of Star Fox: The Saurian Adventure?
The Saurian Adventure chp. 1Star Fox: The Saurian Adventure
Chp. 1
Dark rain clouds filled the sky, far as as the eye could see. Rain slashed down, blanketing the area in an impenetrable grey veil. Under these conditions, one would expect any person with even a grain of sense to be safely at home; yet, lightning flashes illuminated two figures steadily making their way through the skies in this foul weather.
One was male, a native of this world. He was a Cloudrunner, one of the members of the pterosaur-like inhabitants of this planet, and one of the two ruling tribes. His name was Kite, and he was currently on a special mission, given to him by no less than the Queen Cloudrunner herself.
His passenger was female, and if Kite was saurian in appearance, then hers could be called vulpine. Most males of any mammalian persuasion, and even some not, would consider her to be astonishingly
Also, in it, I think you might like the portrayal of Fox and Krystal's relationship, as it's summed up with this phrase right here:
"She knew he felt attracted to her, and felt similarly about him; but he was still trying to determine whether his feelings were grounded in anything more substantial than fluctuating hormones. That was one of the things she liked about him; he cared enough to make sure that he loved her, and did not simply lust after her."
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The novel wasn't updated long ago, and some people tried to write it and then gave it up. You can see this comic. But Fox's attitude towards Krystal in the first place was really bad.
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Well, I knew that it wasn't updated, so I made a continuation thereof:
www.fanfiction.net/s/12663800/…
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Then can you go on and finish it completely? But I think when they bring the fifth Krozoa spirit back to the palace, Krystal will still be sealed by Andross. But it doesn't matter. At least in this novel, she can join the Star Fox more honestly. I believe in her learning ability. There are so many similarities between Fox and Krystal that they sometimes feel that they are just a gender difference.
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I'm working on the next chapter now. Also, what do you think of what you read of it so far?
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Almost read the last chapter you wrote. I don't know how you arranged the plot - Fox was tied to a totem pole by some dinosaurs from the Lightfoot tribe, and then a pterosaur from the Cloudrunner tribe saved him. If it was to be adapted, Krystal would have to summon them with her telepathy.
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By that you mean, "the plot of after where I'm currently at?"
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It's up to you. Anyway, I don't think you can just let Pigma go easily. At least let Fox has to leave a scar on him. Why don't you give Fox a wonderful chance to vent his hatred.
In some ways, Fox McCloud and Harry Potter are very similar.
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Well, considering what Fox thought Wolf planned for him, he didn't think Pigma would be off that easily.
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It's better to let Fox kill the enemy himself, isn't it? That's Fox's last relative.
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Then, Pigma's role in Star Fox Assault would be nulified.
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I mean, since Pigma appeared in Assault, you could have Fox beat him up and vent his hatred in your story. But it's strange that you let Krystal do it.
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Well, I uploaded yet another chapter. I hope you check it out.
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Will Krystal still be sealed when they return the fifth spirit? It doesn't matter. I mean, your novel is well written. At least not let Krystal experience such a tragedy. Otherwise, Krystal would not be just an assistant role in the Super Smash Bros.
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Actually, I intend to have a different character be sealed instead before the release of the third spirit.
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Sorry, but… where's your chapter 33?
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Still working on it. What else do you think of Chapter 32, though?
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Great. Fortunately Sabre was there, or Krystal would have been tickled by Fox (sounds interesting). By the way, can Krystal use some ice magic? Of course, not like Elsa.
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She can, and in fact, in one of the earlier chapters, she did. Also what do you think of Fox touching Krystal with her consent?
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As long as it's not adult entertainment, your novel hasn't reached that level yet.
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Okay, but I was wondering what you thought of that from a characterization perspective.
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My bottom line is that Krystal can't be sealed by Andross again. The plot of "Star Fox: Adventure" is too old-fashioned.
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Well, I already told you that I intend to have a different character be sealed instead. Anyway, I was asking you what you think Fox touching Krystal's body with her consent says about their characters.
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Sorry, I'm not in love yet. So I'm not sure about that.
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Yes, but I was hoping you'd like the fact that Fox treats Krystal's sexuality with care and respect, letting her decide when he does sexual things with her.
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I have no other request, but I have to tell you one thing ahead of time. A friend of mine is reading your novel too. Before he saw the chapter in which Krystal venues Pigma (chapter 30), he thought that Panther had joined the Star Wolf in advance. My friend never liked those third people who took part in other couples. So my only request is that you don't let Fox say too much flirting. We all believe that facts speak louder than words. Fox will protect Krystal well.
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Well, Fox hasn't been doing much flirting so far. In fact, he has mostly been on the receiving end of being hit on.
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Fox has little contact with girls on weekdays, so I think Krystal will be more active in the future. Anyway, I'm looking forward to your updates.
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Well, I do plan on having a sex scene that is implied but not outright shown. Also, do you also like how Fox is letting Krystal decide when he does sexual things with her?
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Never mind. After all, it's a T-rated novel. If you have to arrange, arrange it at the end.
Falco: Get a room, you two!
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I think Krystal will be miserable. If it were me, I would really like Krystal and Kyte to retreat temporarily. She was overprotected by Fox because she was almost killed by Andross.
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