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Published: 2008-10-19 23:55:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 81; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Description Stating the obvious

The grass is green
The sky is blue
It’s kinda silly
How much I love you

Birds fly by
The moon will rise
My heart is beating
With you it lies

Wind blows
Seasons change
Wanting you
To call my name

Cars pass by
Fish swim away
I now know
You will stay

Flowers grow
People speak
Dreaming of you
Deep in my sleep

Circles spin
Time goes on
Here with you
Nothings wrong

Rain falls down
The sun will set
You’re the thing
The best thing yet

Movies end
And so must we
I don’t know when
Will it be you or me?
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Comments: 23

nekogirl11 [2009-08-03 04:46:23 +0000 UTC]

in the 5th stanza did you mean to place two lines in one? becoz, I think that:

Flowers grow
people speak
Dreaming of you
Deep in my sleep

that would look more appropriate for this type of poem formatting. Lovely poem though.

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to nekogirl11 [2009-08-03 20:16:54 +0000 UTC]

Yeah thats what I ment to do.. I've been doing that mistake a lot resently...

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nekogirl11 In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2009-08-03 23:04:56 +0000 UTC]

no worries, there is always time to go in proof read and fix stuff.

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to nekogirl11 [2009-08-04 23:34:54 +0000 UTC]

I should do that more...

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nekogirl11 In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2009-08-04 23:35:33 +0000 UTC]

lol

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xJCSxSPADEx [2008-10-21 00:07:28 +0000 UTC]

I think its good has a meaningful vibe to it

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to xJCSxSPADEx [2008-10-21 00:43:08 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-20 19:47:28 +0000 UTC]

I like it..
you could replace the word "movies end" with "life ends"
it sounds alot more dramatic XD
its your call though *)

overall its hawesome *D

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-20 21:45:16 +0000 UTC]

I thought about life ends, but it was really sad and idk I didn't want this coming off as like sad or anything, just something to think about. Thanks though

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Spade-n-Heart In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2008-10-20 22:05:08 +0000 UTC]

no prob *)

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-20 22:06:23 +0000 UTC]

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Spade-n-Heart In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2008-10-20 22:10:26 +0000 UTC]

Fun, fun, fun..

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-20 22:28:49 +0000 UTC]

in the sun

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Spade-n-Heart In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2008-10-20 22:34:17 +0000 UTC]

baking a bun
XD
(horrible lyric, but it still rhymes...)

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-20 22:55:50 +0000 UTC]

it would be

fun fun fun
in the sun
baking a bun
after a run

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Spade-n-Heart In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2008-10-20 23:18:03 +0000 UTC]

awesome XD

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-20 23:24:02 +0000 UTC]

your awsome

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Spade-n-Heart In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2008-10-20 23:34:16 +0000 UTC]

You're awesome *D

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-21 22:13:35 +0000 UTC]

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Spade-n-Heart In reply to Queenofhearts9900 [2008-10-21 22:23:08 +0000 UTC]

*)

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to Spade-n-Heart [2008-10-22 15:12:28 +0000 UTC]

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WaxDoll885 [2008-10-20 03:25:56 +0000 UTC]

I really like it, I don't even have words but it makes a lot of sense to me. But anyway it's really good.

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Queenofhearts9900 In reply to WaxDoll885 [2008-10-20 21:46:03 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much! It means so much to me that I can get people feeling the way I am.

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