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qyll — Us and the Universe
Published: 2005-12-21 20:18:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 192; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 8
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Description Close your eyes and spread your wings,
Let me take you to Saturn’s rings,
Where you’ll be the queen and I’ll be king;
Let us go amongst the stars,
Pluck them down and make them ours;
Chase a comet – We’re on its trail,
Reach out your hand and grab its tail;
Hold the sun in the palm of your hand
And admire its beauty – Divine and grand;
The universe is always gentle and tame,
So let me show you across the flame.

We’ll conquer the stars and catch their rays,
And make them illuminate a galactic haze;
I’ll show you what we can do,
And I promise you – I promise you
That we’ll reach space’s walls,
Through unknown tunnels and hallowed halls,
Play baseball with Pluto and Mars,
And hit the planets beyond the stars;
We’ll sit in a lonely black hole,
And when I look at your face, I’ll see your soul,
Your soul – A soul that I have loved for all time past,
And we’ll be alone together at last….

You seem scared – Your cheeks are cold,
But your eyes are beaming and your skin is gold;
And this – This – I must be dreaming;
Sitting with you on a crescent gleaming?
Is this real? – What is this emotion I feel?
As if the universe has something to conceal;
It says, “Each star is a grain of sand
That makes a beach of a much bigger land – ”
And though we are only souls of dust,
I feel my heart with your affection’s gust,
And if we are only souls of dust – ‘Tis true,
I am happy as long as I am with you – Just us two…
So let cruel nature play its tricks on men,
As long as I am with you again,
And with this, my love – my dear – I must depart
Into the darkness but not from your heart.
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Comments: 12

outminder [2006-01-03 09:14:49 +0000 UTC]

W O W!!! I love it... *bows down and worships... btw thanks for checking out my stuffs...

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Slaneyder [2005-12-22 22:57:18 +0000 UTC]

This is truly beautiful. And you're only 16?!

Christ, I wish I had talent.

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qyll In reply to Slaneyder [2005-12-22 23:28:33 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much, Slaneyder! Your poems are awesome* as well. Thanks for the faves and watch!

*Awesome (adj.): Superbly, extremely, hauntingly, breathtakingly, faintingly beautiful!

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gao [2005-12-22 17:59:13 +0000 UTC]

Yes. See? You're getting popular already! Good poem!

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qyll In reply to gao [2005-12-22 21:41:23 +0000 UTC]

Yay! gao! You're most enthusiastic fan fo sho!

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gao In reply to qyll [2005-12-23 00:05:59 +0000 UTC]

What can I say? I like your poems!

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Kaos266 [2005-12-22 01:44:18 +0000 UTC]

i like it. it kinda sounds like the people from your last poem 'summer storm' only in space. only more directed towards the audiance. cool rhyiming scheme.

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qyll In reply to Kaos266 [2005-12-22 23:26:19 +0000 UTC]

Thanks Kaos! I sprinkled a minimal amount of irregular rhyming into this one, and I thought it worked out well

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Marduk-666 [2005-12-21 21:50:02 +0000 UTC]

Woah, really interesting concept, I love your rhyming scheme in this one, it's really good. . Favorite for sure.

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qyll In reply to Marduk-666 [2005-12-22 00:53:20 +0000 UTC]

Thanks marduk!

I just try to emphasize the rhymes where there's a word that skips a beat such as "black hole." I'm glad it all worked out

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betsytheripper [2005-12-21 21:46:41 +0000 UTC]

Aw... That is really sweet... Oh, I like it so! It sounds really personal, and I feel like it's directed toward the reader, which gives it that extra bit. Very nice.

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qyll In reply to betsytheripper [2005-12-22 00:49:36 +0000 UTC]

Oh thanks! I'm so glad you noticed

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