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Published: 2005-09-17 15:04:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 94; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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Description Papercuts on the tips
of my fingers: you're like.

Why can't I have you when I want you?
(and                   vice                    versa)

I wish your scent
didn't remind me
of that top bunk
of that bed
and how high(up)
we once were
together.

I'm afraid of                                     you.
                     (what I might do with)
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Comments: 5

xauthorunknown [2005-09-17 17:18:19 +0000 UTC]

wow, i love the style of the poem. the spaces are really interesting.

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rainyguitardays In reply to xauthorunknown [2005-09-18 17:44:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

(you check out ee cummings if you like the spaces/punctuation. amazing poet)

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moosey88 [2005-09-17 15:07:45 +0000 UTC]

I have to admit i can't judge your 'emulation' as i haven't read any of their poetry (should i?) but it's a great poem! I love the style, how it seems to reflect your thoughts because of the layout and arrangement of the words. Like you're feeling all that emotion but it doesn't come together neatly and you're not quite sure how it works. Or am i reading too much into it? Lol, well at any rate, nice work!

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moosey88 In reply to moosey88 [2005-09-18 20:38:52 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the watch and the suggestion...

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rainyguitardays In reply to moosey88 [2005-09-18 17:56:16 +0000 UTC]

Yes, yes you should.

They're both completely AMAZING.

And thank you. It is pretty much a messy jumble
of thoughts and emotions and ideas
that don't communicate very well on paper.

But thanks.

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