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ravenvalentine In reply to azmosis [2004-12-27 14:07:26 +0000 UTC]
thank you veeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrrryyyyyyy much!!
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IndiscriminateBullet [2004-12-02 02:38:38 +0000 UTC]
Whoah, code language. Well! I'm stumped! Anyway, good job on this piece. I can't say it enough times- you're gonna be great once your style is more developed. As for this particular piece... hrmm...
I think it progresses too rapidly. I think you're trying to set it up for continuation, which is definitely good, but it leaves me a little bit unsure of what's going on. Maybe it's just because I haven't read your other stuff. Also, try to make your words flow together more smoothly. Choose your words with precision. I don't want to get too in depth right now, because I haven't seen enough of your work, but I'm only saying this because I want to see you turn into a great writer.
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ravenvalentine In reply to IndiscriminateBullet [2004-12-02 02:43:39 +0000 UTC]
oh, yeah. i conceal a lot of bits and pieces in my works.
each story i write is often connected in the other.
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IndiscriminateBullet In reply to IndiscriminateBullet [2004-12-02 03:34:03 +0000 UTC]
No no no... it's cuz I was having some problems with these girls I know... well, AM having these problems, so I called this girl up, and I don't know, I feel better after talking to her, even though we just chatted for a while
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ravenvalentine In reply to colocoy [2004-11-01 05:23:23 +0000 UTC]
gago ka tlga Cyril...wla kang magagawa kung un ang desicion ni Death at ni...never mind...
oo nga pla, bat astig? ang pangit nga ehh....
[you're such and idiot, Cyril...you can't do anything of that is Death's desicion and...never mind....
by the way, why is it cool? it actually sucks....]
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ravenvalentine In reply to colocoy [2004-11-02 12:06:07 +0000 UTC]
ano magagawa mo kung aalis na cya....intayin m n lng bumalik....
[you can't do anything if he left...just wait for him to come back...]
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