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xxFadedxAwayxx09 [2005-05-14 01:12:34 +0000 UTC]
It was all very well written but
"...And then I felt awake, as I never had been before - aware of every single leaf that the wind blows away, aware of every single blade of grass that crunches beneath our shoes. But their voices seemed so far away, and a second step ignited my adrenaline..."
was definatly my favorite part. ^-^
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Melilot [2005-05-10 17:36:43 +0000 UTC]
I really admire this piece of writing. i am a readoholic myself, and I liked the way you described with a lot of detail what was going on, like the grass crunching beneath feet. But, the end is quite confusing. There has to be a sequel, right?
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Melilot In reply to ravenvalentine [2005-05-11 13:45:07 +0000 UTC]
YAY! i bet it will be great!
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ravenvalentine In reply to Melilot [2005-05-11 14:53:49 +0000 UTC]
Try reading the other chapters...
It may help if the story seems vague...
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Melilot In reply to ravenvalentine [2005-05-11 16:11:07 +0000 UTC]
ok, i will if i get time!
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onionburst [2005-05-10 06:05:13 +0000 UTC]
Nice piece...but whats withn the diff. languages in the responses.......it confuses me....x_x
-Mesh got pwnd by diff. languages....somehow...lmao.....all i know is 'Guten tag'...and uhmm...vulgar language in other languages...lmao
anyways........i'm goin to sleepy town...night night!!!!
- Teh Onion
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lavetite [2005-05-10 04:08:07 +0000 UTC]
asteeg nmn!!! may nabasa n aq uli!!! yey!!!
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colocoy [2005-05-09 05:56:11 +0000 UTC]
At last!!! Mga ilang linggo nating pinag isipan yan a!!! Sa wakas nabasa ko na rin...
Sa wakas action na!!! Di na ko makapaghintay sa susunod na chapter!!! ^^
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digitalparadice [2005-05-09 03:57:01 +0000 UTC]
ooo...chills down teh spines >>;;
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