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PinkieDiamondstone15 [2017-09-25 15:10:33 +0000 UTC]
Holy! The textures are wonderful,Nice done!
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adam-ant2 [2017-09-23 16:17:14 +0000 UTC]
Tremendous work on the texturing.
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NairaDNV [2017-09-22 20:54:48 +0000 UTC]
Hi! here from ProjectComment
She looks really nice, especially for your first try! I think the style is more of a stylized semi-realism that actual realism, it looks really good to me, but if what you want is realism, you should pay a little more attention to the proportions: the eyes are a little too big, the mouth too small, and the neck too narrow. There are a lot of resources for learning face proportions online, you can ask me if you want some Β
I really like how you did the hair, the highlights and the texture look very good, although the top of the head is a little unpolished. Is not a big deal, but it does make the picture a bit incomplete.
Another thing I think you could improve is the skin: while the soft shading you put works on most of the piece, adding some hard edges would make it pop out more, especially around the nose and eyes.
Which brings me to the eyes: you did a great job on the iris, but it seems to me like you neglected a little the rest of them. The top of the eyes could be a little darker, and the lacrimal (I'm not sure if that is the right word.. the pink thing at the edge of the eye) is a bit too pink, normally is redder. The eyelids are almost invisible, and maybe is because of the reference you used, but most of the skin around the eyes is too light or neutral when it should probably have a little more shadow and hard edges... also, the eyelashes. I know they can be very hard to get right, you could try making them longer and then using a soft eraser to "blend them in" with the rest of the skin, that usually looks good.
I really like the mouth it's so cute and nicely shaded... I think it is my favorite part of the painting <3
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ReiAndHana In reply to NairaDNV [2017-09-23 04:30:20 +0000 UTC]
R: thank you very much for this detailed critique! I really appreciate all the efforts you put into writing this.
A lot of people have been mentioning that the top of the head looks a little off, and that the shading needs more contrast and fine-tuning.
I suppose it still does look stylized; after my previous WIP, I couldn't bring myself to give her the proper neck structure; in comparison to my (truly) stylized drawing, a anatomically neck looked to manly. xD
When you meant the "top of the eyes" you meant right underneath the eyebrow ridge, right? I agree with you. Shortly after reading your critique, I followed the majority of the critiques given, and the painting does look like it's heading in a different direction. The pink lacrimal felt better after I colored it a similar hue to the lips.
And lastly, I'm so glad you like the mouth! Apparently people have been telling me that that's my strong point! xDD Lips are fun to draw (that just sounded so weird...)
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xDonnervogelx [2017-09-22 10:37:19 +0000 UTC]
I would add some more fine hair strains. It looks quite good from far, but the details there are a bit few. Try to make some edges look more deeper, darken them more and with tinier brushes.Β
The face itself looks good, though I agree with MorisComics. All in all still a wonderful job, keep practicing (=
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ReiAndHana In reply to MorisComics [2017-09-23 16:17:53 +0000 UTC]
R: it's alright, I'm glad you took the time to give me some input! Thanks again!
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HamishMitty In reply to ReiAndHana [2017-09-23 07:39:50 +0000 UTC]
Ah, sure. Here's a link to what I think is her best drawing:Β
Β (It'd be awkesΒ if that gives her a mentioned notification and she finds out I'm talking about her behind her back. If it does work that way, then hey look I found someone who drew something similar to your style! )
Is your sister's name pronounced the same as Hannah, or is it more like the Japanese γ―γͺ? :L
I was actually thinking of opening up commissions myself for a bit of extra money, haha. Although the decisions for if you should charge money or not is an interesting one, because charging money can give the impression that you're professional and confident in your work, and you intend on delivering it within a certain timeframe which could increase traffic, but it could also reduce it because people don't think in terms of "Oh this'd be cool, having a picture!" and more "Oh is this worth this much money?" Sort of in the same way that you're more likely to get people to help you move house if you don't offer them money, because if you don't they think of it as they're helping out a friend, but if you do offer money in return they think economically about it, wondering if the money you're offering is worth the work they're doing. :L Personally though, I'd rather do commissions instead of requests, because as well as getting you money, it holds you accountable. You need to finish it in a timely manner, because you're being paid for it, and I'd rather that accountability that would train me to be a writer worthy of being hired by someone down the track over the freedom I get from being able to take as much time as I can. :L
But with all that being said, if you want to draw a picture of one of my characters, I'd be pretty happy with that! I'm actually doing an art trade with the friend I mentioned at the top of this comment right now, and it's really cool seeing one of my characters have a face for once! (I'm not a drawer lel, just a writer. )
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ReiAndHana In reply to HamishMitty [2017-09-23 16:36:48 +0000 UTC]
R: wow~ That's some impressive work! As we both know in retrospect, your friend did pop in to say hi~ xD I like the colors! Red hair is pretty fascinating to draw.Β
My sister's name "Hana" is actually just her pen name, chosen because it sounds similar to her real name. It's pronounced asΒ γ―γͺ, but you can call her either way. ^u^
That's a very good analysis of commissions and requests. I feel like that's pretty much on the mark; as striving manga/webtoon artists, we don't have much time to devote to requests and commissions, so accountability was and is a key factor in our decision. We like to be flexible, and although we try not to make the requested wait longer than a few weeks, there are times we can't squeeze it into our schedule. So, like stated before, currently requests is servingΒ it's purpose as an interesting experimentΒ and practice- while also getting to know the community. But commissions are a good idea too! I like how you want to appear professional and accountable. The discipline will be a great asset.Β
Just out of curiosity, did you ask me that question from a surveyor's point of view?
And also, if you want me to draw one of your characters, then it would be nice if you can follow the rules written on our Da ID (post under one of our galleries a reference picture- or in your case, the story describing the character). I'll be happy to check out your work, but like I mentioned before, we can get pretty busy; and if you're asking for a request, I might have to turn it down due to time constraints. :/
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ReiAndHana In reply to HamishMitty [2017-09-24 13:39:35 +0000 UTC]
R: Red hair is nice to color~ So bright. xD
A surveyor is someone who takes surveys. ^u^ It sounded like you were collection opinions in order to further study/confirm your observation about requests and commissions.
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HamishMitty In reply to ReiAndHana [2017-09-26 12:18:11 +0000 UTC]
Oh, no. Not me.
I do have someone I'd like to make a request on, but since your rules are really strict I don't know if you'd want to do it. :L Here's the link to the story though.Β
Before the Primordial gates.Β Β Β Β Β My quest is nearing its end. At long last, Iβve made it to the Gates of Eternity, the final link to the ancient world yet to be broken. By far the most perilous. Itβs down to this. One final push. That thought weighs down on me, like the ancient blade I wear at my side, digging me into the ground. I can barely stand under all the pressure, but still, I will continue. My people will be free of our curse. The gates stand tall and mighty, untouched for countless millennia, its mere presence rejecting me in these strange lands twisted by a thousand years of corruption. Even now, itβs already forcing itself into my mind, mocking me, its first visitor for as long as time has been counted. But I wonβt let it in! Iβm no longer the boy I was when I first received the burden this blade holds, all those years ago. I dig my heels in and stand firm in defiance. No! I reject YOU!
Oh, puny mortal. You reject me? Very well thenβ¦
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ReiAndHana In reply to HamishMitty [2017-09-26 12:54:16 +0000 UTC]
R: It's a very interesting story; quite well-written! I like how it pulls the reader in. It's fairly intriguing. It doesn't say much about the character's features tho.
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ReiAndHana In reply to HamishMitty [2017-09-26 17:41:03 +0000 UTC]
R: Well, I don't see why not. Unless you want a picture of this character having a gory stab wound, or he's half naked, emitting flames or has a devilish eye or something like that. xD Also, if you send a note, then we won't be able to tell who you want this character to be drawn by (Hana-chan or I) and in what style. I guess since we discussed this on this particular picture, then you want a realistic picture from bust up? I can put your request on my queue since I rather busy atm. ^u^
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RoXXieChuu [2017-09-22 06:06:20 +0000 UTC]
This is azmazing as for the first time! Her face is adorable~~
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RoXXieChuu In reply to ReiAndHana [2017-09-22 18:18:22 +0000 UTC]
I think she's in her 20' she looks here very young :>
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Jennyliino [2017-09-22 05:51:24 +0000 UTC]
cool. top of the head is a bit too sharp tho.
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Jennyliino In reply to ReiAndHana [2017-09-23 04:40:04 +0000 UTC]
no problem π
I'm happy to help.
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Hiroki-Ajame [2017-09-22 03:06:03 +0000 UTC]
cool art!!>w< it good to try than do nothing
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Raven-Fallington [2017-09-22 03:05:59 +0000 UTC]
...may I ask HOWW?! 0.0
She's gorgeous!!!!!!Β
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Raven-Fallington In reply to ReiAndHana [2017-09-22 18:51:17 +0000 UTC]
ahhhh, thatz really cool!!!
and she really is!!
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Raven-Fallington In reply to ReiAndHana [2017-09-23 00:28:15 +0000 UTC]
YOU HAVE BEEN HUGGED
Spread the DA love around! (you can copy and paste this message on their userpage!)
RULES:
1- You can hug the person who hugged you!
2- You -MUST- hug 10 other people, at least!
3- You should hug them in public! Paste it on their page!
4- Random hugs are perfectly okay! (and sweet)
5- You should most definitely get started hugging right away!
Send This To All Your Friends, And Me If I Am 1.
If You Get 7 Back You Are Loved!
1-3 you're bad friend
4-6 you're an ok friend
7-9 you're a good friend
10-& Up you're loved
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ReiAndHana In reply to Raven-Fallington [2017-09-23 04:11:12 +0000 UTC]
R: alright, I'll return a hug~ But I don't think I'll have the time to do what you're asking. >w>;;
I guess I'm a bad friend~ xDD
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