Onform15 [2021-09-01 07:56:08 +0000 UTC]
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yeokaiwen31801 [2015-07-04 14:53:41 +0000 UTC]
I like your ideas in this story. But I do find that the chapters seem to be quite short and the story is already progressing quite fast. Maybe you can try adding more details (relevant ones) to each chapter and read it from a reader's point of view the next day (since it is better to reread it with a fresh state of mind).I think this is the first time I have seen a story with split choices. Not many authors like to try that because it's troublesome and it needs to write two different story lines. Can't (or can) wait for the next update.
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RoseAnDarkholm In reply to yeokaiwen31801 [2015-07-04 20:14:23 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for your advice.