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Published: 2012-03-11 03:15:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 953; Favourites: 28; Downloads: 6
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some woman had been walking down a stretch of sterile, brown, treeless neighborhoods due to an old fire when three boys came bumping and smacking into her along the way. she was pissed as shit so she asked where in fuckland they were going, and they said they slain a monster, and stole his typewriter and books of nude photography.
she came across an old abandoned bungalow which was popular among squatters; the door was open and there was a white linen sheet strewn across the entrance. inside she had wondered around wondering if the boys had played a cruel trick on anybody and they needed some help, until a long, slender, dark figure started to slowly stumble to her, clutching a part of his face. It was only when the figure had fallen into the light of a window that she realized he didn't have a face at all, and was bleeding from a recent blow to the head. she screamed bloody murder.

it's been a long time since ive thought of characters or a story at all for deviantart, huh?
after a fit of pacing, and finding photographs of a disfigured person with syphilis, I came up with a not very original couple of people.
the pissed shit woman is Olya- a Russian immigrant, and model for drawing classes. she was inspired by the women in those old 1920s art films...
and the man with the injury on his face is Arlo. not sure how his face got disfigured yet, but i have been assuming the circumstances of war and/or burns or something have been the culprit. idk. He cant see anymore, he has great difficultly speaking and eating, and wears a surgeon face mask over his mouth when out in public. poor guy loved art, but cant see it anymore, poor guy loved learning Estonian, now he can barely speak. poor guy is afraid to get surgery, and has great difficulty eating, thus he eats very little, in turn making him weak and looking emaciated.

the pissy shit ballz lady Olya a few days later found the figure puttering to the squatter's house, poking the ground with a skinny white cane, wearing the face-mask and she knew it was the monster. but the monster was helpless and harmless and blind, so she asked if he wanted any help walking to the front porch. He nodded, and she took his arm and led him there; afterword he said 'thank you' by putting his fingers where his lips should be and curving them towards her. then placed that hand down to hers, in the place of kissing it, and Olya thought the monster was charming.
but he aint a monster, silly woman. he's just an injured guy.
doesn't matter though, she fucking falls for him. who knew. wow. surprised.

because she can see past all that lack of face. and see Arlo's pretty cool. he doesn't kno what she looks like, and she doesn't know what he used to look like- there seems to be an appeal between then because of that, cuz its a fucking mystery. now he can share his old love of nude photography.

months later Olya decided to spend the night with Arlo, because she wanted to. After shit was done, Arlo locked the bedroom door after hearing some boys smoking far off outside. Olya woke up at about 12 at night, freezing, hearing clunking, violent shuffling and knocking, and boys voices wondering where all the good shit was, and if the monster was still squatting there. Olya had found her hand in Arlo's, and he was shivering, and huddling his face towards the pillow with the other arm.

it happens folks
i missed thinking of odd story shit like this

hope u like
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Comments: 17

Obman-Veschestv [2012-12-25 15:51:31 +0000 UTC]

[link] lol i made something dunno what is this

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Russalad In reply to Obman-Veschestv [2012-12-25 18:16:37 +0000 UTC]

Teeeehehe thank u darling I'll have urs today probably

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Obman-Veschestv In reply to Russalad [2012-12-25 18:57:10 +0000 UTC]

:3 yey!

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Obman-Veschestv [2012-12-24 18:50:23 +0000 UTC]

I love Olya's design. I really do. Arlo looks intriguing, it would be really fun to draw these two! :3

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Russalad In reply to Obman-Veschestv [2012-12-25 00:54:57 +0000 UTC]

Teehee why thank u :3

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GoodTiming [2012-03-25 22:56:34 +0000 UTC]

Ah! The story, it's so sweet. My heart has exploded.

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Russalad In reply to GoodTiming [2012-03-25 23:02:33 +0000 UTC]

Naww thank u

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JuneRevolver [2012-03-20 17:04:35 +0000 UTC]

wow I am in serious love with this...

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Russalad In reply to JuneRevolver [2012-03-20 21:40:32 +0000 UTC]

aww im so glad, thank u

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feral-kitty666 [2012-03-14 22:48:15 +0000 UTC]

My my, it's been a long time since I've done character analysis along with an actual art critique. Let's see what I can come up with...
For the characters: Typical salad and yet very different from the normal. You seem to trend towards having the ugly duckling type of character along with the loving and sensitive partner. Also someone has to be Russian. No surprises in that department. However, there are various traits that make them unique. Olya isn't one to back down. She's understanding, yes, but there's a bite to her that I haven't seen before. Unlike the prince in 200 People in Yarling or the nameless female in Sugar Pie, she has a strong spirit and tough-as-nails attitude. I liked her instantly. ;D Arlo would be your normal misunderstood character, but he too has a twist. He's conflict is the horrible disfigurement that causes him to lose essentially everything that's made life bearable. It's easy for the reader to sympathize with him and also allows them to understand why the snarky Olya would comfort him. I like the idea of the surgeon's mask to cover up his face--normally people would use obvious bandages, but that little characteristic makes him rather special.
Now for the art: It's important to make the characters speak volumes of their past, present, and future just by looking at them, which you've managed to do very successfully. Olya shows nothing but 20's glam especially in the make-up and hairstyle. I just wish I could see her with more of a variety of expressions. Here, I can only see blankness, slight compassion, and mild irritation. This is not Olya. To really make her character shine on paper as in text, you might want to show her with anger, full-blown love, sadness, confusion, etc. Arlo, on the other hand, is very different. If his face was burned/beaten...then how is he able to show expression in his eyes? Wouldn't his eyes be singed off at the very least? Eye sockets don't tend to move. In his case, maybe you should make a detailed facial-map of where his wounds are so you can see where an eyebrow might quirk or a dimple may show. That's only if you really want to be accurate, though. At first glance, the emotions portrayed are easy to understand and the audience really isn't questioning them. I'm just being critical and nit-picky. Still, there's no denying that these two go well together. Something about the way they're sketched out in the same quick-and-fast style or the equal tones. (see? you can make comments on lines and color!) They look cute together is all.
...good lord, I am SO happy deviantart doesn't have a character limit. This has to be my longest comment ever in the history of life. O.O Hope this tides you over for a bit. Send me an ask with the title of the piece you want me to critique next!~

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Russalad In reply to feral-kitty666 [2012-03-14 23:01:31 +0000 UTC]

HOT DAMN THANK UUUUUU <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
holy shit ur comments are the best
yeah Arlo's range of expressions aint accurate at all, but i did want expression in there, its not accurate but its more of a design element haha XD
thank u thank u thank uuuuuu <3 this made my night

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chupacabracadabra [2012-03-12 02:57:12 +0000 UTC]

Your character designs never cease to amaze me- their so inventive!

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Russalad In reply to chupacabracadabra [2012-03-12 10:19:18 +0000 UTC]

aw thanks hun

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Crayn [2012-03-11 13:08:10 +0000 UTC]

Those TEETH :U

Arlo's teeth are AMAZING <3

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Russalad In reply to Crayn [2012-03-11 14:28:21 +0000 UTC]

thanks hun

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hikasika [2012-03-11 10:50:16 +0000 UTC]

Very interesting characters

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Russalad In reply to hikasika [2012-03-11 14:28:08 +0000 UTC]

thank u <3

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