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CosmicBacon [2012-02-01 05:10:11 +0000 UTC]
Oh Undertow.... That really is an amazing song, but it gave me such a head ache when we were practicing it during an honor band I participated in.
As a critique goes, I thought it was pretty well written, up until the point when you introduce a random person, Nick in this case, that just came out from nowhere. Maybe if you had either put an appositive somewhere in that sentence and explained who he was might have left me a little less confused.
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