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Red--Roses [2011-12-16 12:15:01 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic detail!!

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SmilinJack [2011-09-15 05:39:25 +0000 UTC]

I can't seem to get the reference link to work, so I can't comment on the likeness really at the moment, but she has nice character and expression to her. Especially in the smile. Overall a fine drawing, I hope my comments can help make it a stronger finished piece.

Eyes: Her left eye seems a bit wider than the right, but it's further back, even if slightly it should appear smaller to us.
(that's her left, not the viewer's left)

Fingers: The outer edges are kind of smooth, little distinction between the digits. Try adding some curve to the underside, remeber there are fatty pads there! Fingers are always tricky to draw, they are so simple but bumpy at the same time.
Here are links to some good books on hands: [link] [link]

Shading: Overall well done, I just think you can take it a bit farther, the clothing especially. Wherever your darks are on the clothing, I'd add a darker dark to that end of your value scale. Just add a bit and blend it into the rest. Creases in clothing tend to be a bit dark too. Under her chin/inside of the collar should be one of the darkest shadows.

Hope this was all helpful!
-Jack

P.S.
If you're nervous about changes, try them out on a piece of trace first

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Rulhoolie [2011-02-14 00:06:25 +0000 UTC]

The way you did the hair is beautiful! The strands that fall from her hand grabbing her hair look very naturalistic. I would say though, however that you need not smudge your pencil work as much. Of course, for the beginning layers of the pencil work, smudging is good as a way to lay down foundation, but as you build your layers, you want to stop so you can get deeper tones. As for the likeness, I would say that you did a pretty good job! The only thing would be that I think the girl in the photo's eyebrows are more arched.

Overall, I think this is a good piece! I think you can work back into it, but if you've decided it's finished like you said, then I would just move on and keep working!

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ideoteqa [2011-02-13 23:49:45 +0000 UTC]

I like the shadowing on the face, and also that the eyes are not the same, that gives the expression on the face, the eyes are almost always the most important thing, i have seen people that draw one eye exactly the same to the other, sort of wrong.

The proportions on the face are a bit odd, and one thing i would suggest is to work the background, when you paint the background black (i mean pencil black), the image becomes more powerful.

Just an opinion, #GimmeFeedback demands me to comment artworks, good job overall

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ThousandEnemies [2010-10-09 21:52:18 +0000 UTC]

i love the folds on her sleeve .

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bolsterstone [2010-09-10 03:32:27 +0000 UTC]

It's good.

But I wouldn't stop working on it, Wondering-Souls. Rather, and this is just my suggestion mind you, I'd let it sit for a little while (a week or two) and then come back to it. This is the type of artwork which the artist can learn from again and again. Sometimes, we overwork an image and we get blind to the flaws. There is still some work waiting to be done here -- mostly with your knead eraser and a hard pencil - and I think you can make it REALLY, really good. (I know you have the talent. ) But you just need to be patient.

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entwineddarkness [2010-09-08 06:25:15 +0000 UTC]

I do think you've done a nice job on the sleeve; however her pupils should be drawn flatter and more towards the right (as in your reference picture). Also, I'd suggest making her face a little more oval and not so round, to improve the likeness.

I like how the hair came out too.

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EverythingIhave [2010-09-05 08:53:02 +0000 UTC]

As far as the likeness goes, you did pretty well. The mouth is a bit too pointed downward and the hand is slightly too long but the general shape and positioning of her features are pretty spot on, nice job

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x-surrealist-x [2010-08-20 05:25:17 +0000 UTC]

=howardtj43147 pretty much stole my comment. Yeah, you did a fantastic job with the hair and the sweatshirt. Especially the hair. And the eyes, too! But the left eye IS a little too high... The hand needs a little more detail and the fingers bent a bit more. The face looks like it is pointing a different direction than in the picture, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, and in the picture her mouth is open a little wider. But even with those differences it's still a good drawing. Keep up the good work!

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howardtj43147 [2010-08-18 00:56:46 +0000 UTC]

I am no expert, I am still taking drawing classes. I probably will be for a long while. But I do a lot of photography.

Off hand, to answer your question/request:

The hair and sweater are great. The eyes are a bit off, her left eye is a little high I think. The hand (they are always hard) is a bit off also. The mouth is just a little too far down.

At a distance, it looks very good. Keep it up.

R/
Howard

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shaving-breakdown [2010-08-16 17:07:13 +0000 UTC]

wow, I think you did an awesome job on this one!!! Looks very realistic and your pencil skills are great, I especially love the detail in the hair

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giglebox [2010-08-13 02:31:09 +0000 UTC]

I would first like to say that the detail given to this piece is quite commendable. The shading put into the hair and clothing is very nicely done. I think perhaps the lips could use some work. The lips appear to be drawn as you would normally see lips not how they appear in the picture. What I mean is if you take a look at the picture and then your reproduction you will notice that the black outline you have on the mouth does not appear at all in the source. In fact her lips actually appear to blend in with her skin on the right side of the picture. Draw what you see not what you think you should see and you will grow substantially.

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marcostad [2010-08-11 12:45:11 +0000 UTC]

Great Work

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fatilovely [2010-08-07 21:21:17 +0000 UTC]

wonderful photo great job

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mhdphotography [2010-08-06 21:55:44 +0000 UTC]

I like what you did with this piece. You did a nice job with the shading and the folds in her clothing. She looks realistic and her expression is lovely.
good job

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K-L-ee [2010-08-06 08:26:18 +0000 UTC]

There are a good number of issues with this piece as far as itslikenes to the reference photo and the basic anatomy itself. The hand seems a bit flat and awkwardly-placed. If that were stylistic, I'd actually think it was really cool, but in relation to this picture and the effect (I think) you were trying to achieve, it looks out of place.

Her face is also pretty asymetrical. The eyes are on two different levels, whereas the pupils should, ideally, in the same position. I'm not really sure I'm explaining this well enough, er... Okay, if you were to draw a slightly curved horizontal line across her face either right below her eyes or through her pupils, you'd see the the eyes weren't level. If you don't do this already, I'd recommend that you always draw a horizontal and vertical line through the faces you draw in order to get a better feel for where things go. The mouth is also a bit off... The middle of her lip dips don a bit too much, and it makes her seem as though she has a snaggletooth.

Here come the good things! The hair looks amazin. Fantastic detail, shading, and lighting there, and the jacket also looks great. You have a really good grasp on where wrinkles should go and how deeply shaded they should be. Ignoring the shape, the shading and lighting of the eyes is also fantastic And I love that you were observant enough to give her freckles.

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DemonOfSarila [2010-08-05 14:33:01 +0000 UTC]

the likeness is close, but the expression is a bit different. Also cropping it changes the composision slightly. If you used an image editor to put your sketch in multiply over the image you could probably see all the things that are slightly different. but really the only ones I would worry about are how on yours her hand doesn't cast as much of a shadow, and as her right shoulder goes around there should be some darker shading. good highlights on the skin and eyes.

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epic-bando88 [2010-08-02 17:50:46 +0000 UTC]

I think you did a generally great job!
The only things that I want to give you some constructive critism on, are they eyes, and the pose. The eyes are welsoe, but they're a little lopsided and uneven in placement.
The pose seems a little off to me, but it might not be, since I can't see the whole body it probably just looks off.
The hair is beautifully done though!
(do you do art trades? haha)

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Birgitte-Gustavsen [2010-08-02 04:10:58 +0000 UTC]

Vybeosa has already given some good advice, so I'll just add my little bit on the likeness

The first and most noticeable thing that is off is the way her nose and mouth is at a different position, turned more towards us than in the photo, and this has distorted her features. Her cheek in particular differs from the reference and has changed her a good deal. The nose is too deeply set for the angle so this extra space now left empty in the cheek has broadened her face and changed the structure of it. The mouth in the drawing is also bigger and much broader in smile than the more ambiguous and relaxed one from the photo. Though besides that the lip form is spot on

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