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VaviStudios [2016-04-24 19:44:19 +0000 UTC]

Hey! couldn't help but notice the art! And here's my critique, if you don't mind:

Lineart: The lineart is a bump bumpy, most users on here can tend to enjoy clean lineart better, yet if you are using a mouse; then it's excusable, yet you may need a bit more practice. Other than that; it's a pretty good work! But like I said, work on the lineart a bit more.

Coloring: the coloring is smooth, nice, not much to say other than you may need to vary out between the shades of colors and not rely on the same shade of colors, yet that can be changed with the shading.

Shading + lighting: For me, the shading and lighting is in need of serious work. Keep in mind, this may be how the RID2015 is shaded, but you need to experience with the shading and lighting to make it look more interesting. for me it's clear that you're using the airbrush tool. And there isn't a problem with that, there really isn't; but experience! Try out new styles; find your own! Things will be much more interesting and you'll improve greatly!

IMPORTANT: I can't help but notice that the poses from the TF characters seems highly familiar to the episodes they are from; and it shows that it is way too familiar for it to be made, since there are details from the show that nearly no one can do except the cast themselves, which leads me with a question; have you been tracing?

Now, onto your OC herself,

Armor: this is what got me thinking; where is the rest of her armor?! any Cybertronian, techno- organic or not would way way more armor than this! Your Oc is highly vulnerable with this type of armor, and it looks thinner than a sheet of aluminium. I apologize if I sound harsh, but it does. You may need to practice on detail to add on some armor.

Extra: now, from what I know from your OC considering I've read your fanfictions and seen your art for a referance of her, she does seem a bit too overpowered. I'm not saying she's a mary- sue, though she is in some way; not all OC's are perfect. Though from what I know, considering that she is possibly a star of cybertron, that is highly frowned upon in this fandom. I'm not expert myself, so I may not know all; but that element needs to be removed or else those mary- sue reviewers will most likely roast you if they know about that. Again, sorry if I sound too harsh. Now onto the fact that's she's a techno- organic. now, as said before, that is highly frowned upon in this fandom unless there is a VERY GOOD DETAILED story and explanation to it. Now onto the part that she had powers (from  what I know of your fanfiction "She who likes wolves" I think was it called?), that is HIGHLY mary-sue, since no one in the TF fandom or shows ever had any powers, and the only techno- organic was Sari, from my knowledge. So I suggest you take out the powers immediately. 

Ships: Now, this is my advice, for one. But from what I know of Steeljaw, he wouldn't like to go after an Autobot, much less a techno- organic or star of Cybertron unless it was for power. Now I'm not saying for you to turn the story into,-- pardon the word-- rape like most authors do on a site I'm on, I'm not saying that. Though considering the two are so highly non- compatible, it can be very hard to believe that he could go for her. Though I'm not saying he'd go for a human with powers either, he wants to claim the world and offline them, remember?

Please notice that this is only for your good, I would like you to improve your flaws and make them smaller! I know it may be difficult to do so; and I'll be there to help you if you ever need it! This critique of both your OC and art is only to help you so please; don't take this like I'm attacking you. I only want what's best.

So if you have any problems with it; comment on my page or send me a note; I'd be more than happy to help and respond!

~ Mitzouka ~

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SailorShinzo [2016-04-23 23:38:31 +0000 UTC]

Is it me or does Elena look like she's under some sort of spell?

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TheAcefulDodger30 [2016-04-23 20:42:21 +0000 UTC]

This looks so real Interesting.

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