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SapphireTheHedgekid — baby mouse pt 3 preview
Published: 2011-05-25 17:25:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 412; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 48
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Minnie looked in the soft, brown, wide, eyes of her dearest love." I thought that you'd be angry mick. You said you didn't want kids, and i though if i told you would hate me and leave me forever."Related content
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It's looks like things are going good, keep it up Sapph ^^
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cool just read it XD
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Nice work for the preview. Still some issues of capitalization, but that's the only issue with the typing. As for the story, maybe mention how long she's been sick, how long she's been trying to hide this secret, but I don't want to write this story for you.
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^w^ it's okay... umm like what capitalization problems do i have. i want to fix em
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Three places to always capitalize -
1) I. As in "I want to fix 'em."
2) Beginning of names. As in "Mick..."
3) Beginning of sentences. As in "It's okay. What problems do I have?"
Stuff like that makes the works easier to read and look better.
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pt. 3 is done [link]
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oh okay ^w^ thanks for telling me
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