Comments: 4
Kijara1 [2010-08-27 21:10:47 +0000 UTC]
Page looks fine to me - frames work out, composition works out. But maybe it's not like it 'looked in your mind', if you know what I mean?
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psychorooster [2010-08-26 13:17:59 +0000 UTC]
I agree with Kytri about Jamie's hand being the only thing you really need to change. I've been left standing awkwardly in a strange house before and those first three panels pretty much have a grasp on how uncomfortable it is before you finally suck it up and just sit down, haha.
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kytri [2010-08-25 22:31:07 +0000 UTC]
What all were you planning on changing? Personally I think the first three panels do a good job of capturing that awkward feeling of being left alone in a room in a strange house.
If you do redraw it the only thing I'd really suggest changing is the way Jamie's holding the mug in the last panel. The cup looks a little small in comparison to his hands, and I should think if it's hot he'd be holding it by the handle.
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