DannyDrozdov [2020-12-27 08:03:07 +0000 UTC]

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alapip [2020-12-27 02:26:53 +0000 UTC]

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BestBabu [2020-12-26 21:40:08 +0000 UTC]

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Lionnfart [2020-12-26 19:07:34 +0000 UTC]

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LindArtz [2020-12-26 10:05:37 +0000 UTC]

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dialtonepoetry [2020-04-05 19:38:14 +0000 UTC]

beautiful work here! every line is killing me all over again...

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successwithhonor [2020-04-01 08:31:00 +0000 UTC]

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MozartsNemesis [2020-03-31 04:02:24 +0000 UTC]

This is gorgeous. 

"the rain fell over the hills

and vanished

becoming blades of grass

or yellow flowers

again"

I also really like the repetition of this idea throughout the poem. You've managed to to create this whimsically magical background and then contrast it against seemingly mundane events (the bus route, the laundry pods.)

The ending is my favorite part. Well done.

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Tiger--eyes [2020-03-25 18:02:03 +0000 UTC]

"again I am desperate to get out of my body

the habits of hurting are wearing me down

my data is corrupted

I know crazy peace

where was I when the rain fell

over the hills

—I was leaving again

I need to fall in love insanely

there is no other way

I dream up a thousand unsatisfactory men

and kill them all..."

god i feel this. gorgeous and desperate.

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GuinevereToGwen [2020-03-24 15:20:03 +0000 UTC]

"This week the world is ending

and I am running out of laundry pods."

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palaeochannel6 [2020-03-23 07:17:02 +0000 UTC]

I'm bout to throw in the towel because you say it all better

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chromeantennae [2020-03-23 03:46:30 +0000 UTC]

i feel this so deeply.

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