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deviationanonymous [2013-08-04 18:33:27 +0000 UTC]
Shadowfox, sounds a whole lot like Tony Stark...
Love the story. Great plot so far, an the characters are quite interesting. Keep up the good work!
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Shadow-Fox13 In reply to deviationanonymous [2013-09-13 22:21:39 +0000 UTC]
Haha I've never made the connection but yeah I guess you're kind of right.
I'm glad that you enjoy it. The plot actually has been more or less writing itself as I type so hearing that you like it really means a lot because I worry if it makes sense to others. I'm actually rather proud of the characters if I do say so myself.
I hope that the following chapters don't disappoint.
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EncryptedFox [2010-10-23 07:46:54 +0000 UTC]
i really liked it too the next one
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Shadow-Fox13 In reply to Xzeit [2010-09-19 14:29:42 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I wanted to make them as "real" to the reader as possible so what better way then just turning real people into them.
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DemonRaily [2010-09-16 18:11:32 +0000 UTC]
Well I got interested in the story, and I would like to know a bit more about the settings of the world it is in. Their relationship between humans and anthromorphs. Well they hate each others guts, that's normal reaction when there are so much differences between two races. But how the world itself works? It's scary to think about politics for one. As the whole setting goes(at leas as I know) It reminds me a bit of "World Destruction" world setting only roles reversed.
As the story itself I liked that bit of violence, nothing too much, but still just right. The fact that this is not one of these stories where the main character is overly overpowered(or absurdly lucky) that it looks like he can take entire army by himself helps a lot. To tell the truth the part where he falls off the car because of a road bum onto the pursuers front window was quite fun to read.
Sorry that I probably won't read all the chapters in one day, because my eyes hurts a bit...
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Shadow-Fox13 In reply to DemonRaily [2010-09-16 20:46:16 +0000 UTC]
Well I don’t completely know how the world is right now. But what I do know is that large major governments are failing and smaller groups, organizations, cartels, ect. are taking control of the masses in the midst of the chaos. Except for the most part the power shift is unseen (that isn’t true in some cases and I plan to show some insight to this in an upcoming plot point).
I’m very very happy that like my writing style and character design. It took me a while to figure out how I was even going to write this one at first. I ever rewrote the entire first chapter three times over. I wanted to show that they are real and just like everything else they have weaknesses and can get hurt.
I have made this offer to many others but no one has taken me up on it but…
Would you like to have your own character in the story? (If so then let me know and I’ll give you more details then).
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DemonRaily In reply to Shadow-Fox13 [2010-09-16 21:41:03 +0000 UTC]
As I forgot to ask you, is there any concept art of the characters?
Well for a character in the story, I can always think something till it is a minor role.
Actually a cameo appearance would be enough. I wouldn't be sad even if he dies the next chapter...
That is my character I have created quite a while for one time purpose.
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Shadow-Fox13 In reply to My-Torn-Drawings [2010-09-16 13:15:54 +0000 UTC]
Hahaha I don't think you will ruin it. In fact I feel quite the opposite. I need secondary and "filler" to help the story flow better. Cause my biggest weaknesses are names and creating good "one-time-use" characters.
So if you ever change your mind just let me know.
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David-Hark [2010-07-24 15:21:16 +0000 UTC]
I must be a slow reader, but I am liking the plot I see so far! (Halfway finished reading this... XD some writer I am...)
Just remember to watch your tenses! I am seeing a lot of switching between the past and the present. For example, ..."KrystalBlaze." She raises her good hand to shake that of the collie's.
"Dr. Felecia A. Moore, pleased to meet you both." She responded while inspecting KrystalBlaze's shoulder...
I had trouble with this type of thing when I started writing my first draft as well, so you're not alone. Just try to stick to either the present or the past throughout the book (God I sound like my unofficial editor). ^^,
(BTW, that's also about where I am at XD...)
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