Comments: 19
ActingDude17 [2012-07-18 07:10:30 +0000 UTC]
I love how the final stanza is so positive but the phrase "hold these pieces" jars you right out of that. You're reminded of the hurt that the narrator is going through even amidst all this hope and that's a very effective thing.
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ShadowOfBrokenWings In reply to ActingDude17 [2012-07-19 06:04:37 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! It was what I was aiming for and I'm glad I managed to reach this goal!
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Writer-In-Process [2012-07-16 20:29:12 +0000 UTC]
I love this, I feel like it is a hand reaching out and grabbing my emotions.
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jutsuwriter [2012-07-15 05:37:22 +0000 UTC]
I love poems like this, that stir up emotions, some mine, some not
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ElegantFaith [2012-07-14 00:31:30 +0000 UTC]
This almost reads to me like a song. It flows really nicely.
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Loveislightblue [2012-07-13 23:56:05 +0000 UTC]
You already know what I have to say about this poem...
but, is there a significance to using the word "We're" or did you mean to use "Where" ?
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