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ShadowOfBrokenWings — Smiling by-nc-nd
Published: 2012-01-22 20:11:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 90; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 2
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Description The world around us falls out of place
In the chaos we become engulfed in confusion
We can't focus as our world starts to erase
And in the midst of this; I struggle to find your smile

The rhythm of your heart fades from my ears
The grip between our hands begin to loosen
As loosing you has become one of my fears
I struggle to find your slowly beating heart

The smile from your face starts to fade
And the happiness begins to break
But for the feelings I have made
I cannot give in to the darkness

The echo of my past in motion
Whispering "It's hopeless" in my heart
I am weak with such confused emotion
I cannot give in to the thoughts in my head

But it's true is it not?
Waiting on something that might not be
A chance, a light I thought
But as my past dictates, it's the same

Or can you prove me wrong?
Will my ambition return to life?
Because I've been waiting so very long
To be the reason you're smiling
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Comments: 7

TheAngstyPoet [2012-02-18 00:57:16 +0000 UTC]

I really like how the first and third rhyme instead of the second and fourth because at the end of each stanza the thought really sticks in your head. <------[crazy run- on] Wonderful

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ShadowOfBrokenWings In reply to TheAngstyPoet [2012-02-18 16:11:31 +0000 UTC]

thank you glad it sticks out ^_^

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TheAngstyPoet In reply to ShadowOfBrokenWings [2012-02-19 03:27:11 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome :3

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senna24 [2012-01-29 17:55:46 +0000 UTC]

Wow! That's sooo beautiful!!! Amazing job!

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ShadowOfBrokenWings In reply to senna24 [2012-01-29 18:00:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I appreciate it

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senna24 In reply to ShadowOfBrokenWings [2012-01-29 18:04:01 +0000 UTC]

Anytime! I think I'm going to have to watch you now!

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ShadowOfBrokenWings In reply to senna24 [2012-01-29 18:08:44 +0000 UTC]

haha alright then, thank you

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