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Published: 2015-04-12 16:25:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 591; Favourites: 13; Downloads: 0
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Description I sit atop a lonely hill
and all beneath is quiet and still.
The thrum of busy life has gone,
its timpani will beat at morn.
Birds gather under eaves of night,
before they take the day’s end flight.
Till then I sit and let dusk glance
around me as the stars advance.

Light is fading, candles lit,
Memories reaching from a pit,
climbing up the hill to me,
blindly for they cannot see.
I’m steeped in shadows from the past,
knowing that they cannot last -
these sightless things, they strive to feel,
And reach to me atop the hill.
But brief are those that take my breath,
and render me a taste of death,
as I lay upon this silent hill,
not knowing what I really feel.

Dawn’s light arrives unflickering,
my breath returns, so I breathe in
and truth is telling very clearly,
the fact that I once loved you dearly..

I lay upon a silent hill,
Remembering all – as time stood still.
This perfect place with wondrous view,
the only thing it lacks is you.
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Comments: 8

omnibusjeremius [2015-06-22 16:07:50 +0000 UTC]

This is a lovely poem! Love the natural and fluid rhyming.  

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shelleypalmer In reply to omnibusjeremius [2015-06-22 16:10:46 +0000 UTC]

So pleased you liked this.  Thank you also for the fave!

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motifandcode [2015-04-15 17:00:37 +0000 UTC]

it does not have to be a sad situation remembering passed people (who left us or faded). It also tells you who you are and if you ever loved someone with all your energy it will always remain, no matter what, that is what I read in the last lines and if wrong, it is still true to me

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SyFaixan In reply to motifandcode [2016-08-25 05:55:19 +0000 UTC]

I really liked this poem and it made me wonder if the "you" could be a younger identity (with different friends, different hobbies and interests perhaps even a different personality) that you've overgrown but still remember fondly. I really like this poem!

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shelleypalmer In reply to motifandcode [2015-04-15 17:27:43 +0000 UTC]

It is true that it doesn't have to be a sad situation to remember someone or acknowledge to yourself that you did indeed love them. This poem was kind of meant to be the latter and a realization in a period of quiet time.  The death referred to was meant to be a death of way of thinking and acknowledging love that was felt but reading it through again I guess it could be interpreted in other ways.  But yes, as you say if you love someone with all your energy it does indeed remain - even if, for a while, this is cloaked in denial for some reason.  Thank you for commenting. Thanks for the fave.

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Supach [2015-04-12 18:23:48 +0000 UTC]

  so beautifully sad.

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shelleypalmer In reply to Supach [2015-04-12 21:09:10 +0000 UTC]

Thanks - I was going to write something funny but this came out instead!  Thanks for the fave!

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Supach In reply to shelleypalmer [2015-04-12 21:22:09 +0000 UTC]

you´re very welcome

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