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Published: 2012-06-17 12:34:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 1470; Favourites: 89; Downloads: 37
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A contest entry for the Lost Kids Cover. Saw the comp last minute but decided to enter anyway.[link]
Heres the link for the competition that ends in a few hours. Tried my best to get this right
. Comments and suggestions are welcome
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Here from :devFeedback Frenzy:~ ALRIGHT LET'S DO THIS~!
First off I love the overall feel of this. ;u; The atmosphere is entrancing and captivating, and SUPER eye pleasing~
The lighting has me a little confused though. Is the light shining up like if you were to point a flashlight upwards from below your face? If so, then the lighting here is lookin' kinda off. The only way anyone would get lighting like that is if there were light coming from all around the sides of the girl, which it doesn't seem to be.
This includes the hair highlights from the top.
And it's very scribbly in a few areas, like the hair around the girl's head, and in her forehead. I'm also a little confused as to whether or not he hair is in pigtails. A little minor, but still unclear.
On a final note, it kinda looses it's presence, below the neck. I'm not sure if that was on purpose, but in my opinion, it kinda takes away fro the body of the picture. (no pun intended)
This is still a lovely picture though~
Hope I helped some. 'u'
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The face is done really well in this piece, it's also the first feature that catches the eye. The eyes have an anime-ish feel to them, but still have a feel to them that pulls you in. I would have liked to see more then just a head, and a glowing ball where her body would be, but I assume that there was a reason that she looks like this. I wuld say that the hair in this one has a bit of deinition around the face, but it really loses it's "body" as it fades away which has a nice look to it. You said you entered this in the lost kids contest so i assume this follows the theme of the contest, and I wish you good luck in the contest.
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i love this, especially the eyes and lips they just look so good
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Really like this, it's well done and the facial features are also very well done.
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I love the whole detail of the face, specially the nose! (mainly cause noses cause me trouble.) Keep up the good work and good luck!
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glad u like it mate
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Hello from another #FeedbackFrenzy participant!
This is a really striking image where high contrast has been used to great effect and the focal points are clear. It's simple but effective. The rendering is also very nicely done, especially on the eyes. For a critique, the lighting seems a bit random to me. The light source appears to be below her, but her nose and hair are lit from above, the cheeks from either side, and the lips from the front it seems. The only areas actually lit from below are the eyes and some wisps of hair. The neck would also be at least partially illuminated by that light source. I highly recommend studying the effects of light and shadow, preferably from life. Think about the subject as a three-dimensional object made up of simple planes, and observe and analyze how those planes react to the light depending on its source. Also, I find that bright shape in the top left rather distracting; it's lighter than the values of the face and pulling attention away from the focal points. I think you have a lot of potential as an artist, but you need to focus on improving your understanding of light if you want to take your work to the next level. Good luck and god speed!
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Yes, thnks a lot for the insight regarding the light. I'm somewhat having trouble with it at the moment.
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eviri here, from #FeedbackFrenzy #35
Beautiful composition! The way the elements are arranged, the swirls, the face, then the orb, all in a vertical line really give energy to the piece. The arrangement almost tells its own story, a girl coming from nothing then becoming something beautiful.
I think that this piece would have a more finished look if the hair was the same details as the face. I know you're going for a fading out look with the sketchy lines above her bangs, but if it was kept with the same detail as the pieces around her face then you could show a lot more movement of the hair wisping away into nothing on the ends.
My favorite part of this work is the hair strands around the face because it shows that there is some sort of ethereal power, and gives flow and movement to the piece.
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Hi! I'm from #FeedbackFrenzy
When I look at this, it captures me. My eyes are directly turned to hers, and the focus stays there. It's like she's staring straight through me, that she knows everything about me. I get the feeling that she's somewhat intimidating. I know nothing about her, and that makes me curious. You've really pulled out the feeling and vision about this piece *fumoffu89 ! I love that.
I love her eyes and the details in her face and hair, and I love that the light comes from below. If I should be a little critical about it, I wonder why you've painted her nose from the upper side. You can actually keep that, but add a thin white light effect below the nose, to make it look more natural, and maybe make her nostril a bit more visible.
Her hair is simple, yet gorgeous. It's good that you didn't overwork it there, as I usually do. I have a hard time thinking about whether you should keep it as it is, or make it a little more detailed so that you can see how long it is and all the curls, but on the other hand, the blurriness of the picture makes it almost creepy, and if you try you can see another face in that "mist" (lack of a better word).
I don't have much more to tell you, but be careful when you crop pictures. In the top of the picture her hair it cut straight of, while in the bottom of the picture, the light is completely round and that can make the image loose quality. [link] is a good tutorial. It's for photography, but it totally work for painters too.
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I like the mysteriousness around this alot
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Thnks alot, Really don't know her story, you'll have to follow the lost kids page to find out
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Really interesting concept, so her eyes differ a bit regarding the shape
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cheers, and thnks for the input
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I like this. Reminds me of camping and telling ghost stories ^_^
But past that, I like the subtle outlines of her neck and shoulders are shadowed away makes her like a little more ghost like. (though i am not sure if that was intentional or not) If not i would suggest lowering the light and showing more of the body and letting the light source work like a spot lite hitting a mirror in a dark. (if you haven't done that before i suggest you do it 
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I see what you mean, especially with the pointed flashlight from the bottom. I will take what you've said to heart. Thanks a lot for the lengthy insight, I appreciate the time taken
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Anytime 
I am just glad I could be of insightful thought again ^_^
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Hi there! Your feature for this piece is now up on my homepage! Please be sure to check it out ♥
Have a nice week!
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Wow, thank you very much. You've just made my day
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thnks, might not win act...lots of other awesome work
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thnk you very much
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