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ShivanDreams — The five senses.
Published: 2006-06-27 07:19:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 385; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 6
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Touch.Taste.
Hear.
See.
Smell.
With these words do we describe all the sensations our body has to offer.
The smell of the sea on a hot June morning.
The sight of the waves rolling to shore.
The sounds of them crashing against the beach.
The taste of salt in the air.
The caress of a loved one.
To experience the vast realm of sensations, you must open yourself fully to the experience.
The smell of fresh rain on the pavement.
The sight of lightning fills the eyes.
The roar of thunder crashing in the distance.
The taste of rain on the tongue.
The feel of raindrops on your forehead.
Sensation isn't always good.
The smell of burnt rubber.
The sight of a car accident.
The screech of the wheels.
The taste of blood.
The feeling that it will all end soon.
Take what you will from this Earth, but remember the way it felt.
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Comments: 29
i'd love to experience the first one, you already know i love the second as much as you do, and the third... it hits close to home, but it wasn't a car wreck
very well written hun. it really moved me.
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There's nothing like a night on the sea shore. Listening to the waves crashing. Smelling the sea breeze, Feeling the breeze rip through your hair, Looking at the ships far away till they disappear in the horizon. Nice message there
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You should always go outside! I spend a little of every day out in the sun, it makes me feel better every time.
~Luke
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good point, besides, fresh air can't kill me, at least not since last time I checked.
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It actually brought me to tears. I'm very sorry to hear about your friend.
Very powerful poem! The only critique I have as the sight line in the last stanza, I think it's too general of an image contrasted to everything else in the poem. But that could just be a nitpick.
Anyway, it's your best work yet!
Absolutely amazing!
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Thank you so much for the condolences. It means a lot. 
~Luke
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Wow such a true thing you said. A great comparison if good and bad, and mostly a good description of life.
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I like it. And I'm sorry about your friend. Very nice representation of both sides.
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I really like this! It speaks to the inner self....very deep. One thing...I think you may have just overlooked it....but in the rain segment, you need to put "of" between smell and fresh. Otherwise, it's a magnificent piece!
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Haha, I just noticed that error. Thanks for pointing it out.
~Luke
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Not a problem. I loved the poem. It was so deep and down to the bone. You have a very strong potential there!!
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That's simplistically deep! I like this one..it has a meaning I understand more than your other poem..
Bravo!
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Very neat, for some reason, it reminds me of a song on the Beach soundtrack, I can't remember which one.
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Odd...never saw that. Perhaps I'll go find the soundtrack..Thanks
~Luke
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I like how you demonstrated both sides, the good and the bad. Great message!
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Interesting. It's hard for me to tell some more about it, 'cause I'm not good in commenting Poetry or Prose. But I like it though...
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