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Wanhaparta [2010-08-24 04:23:52 +0000 UTC]

I lajk it ! im no good with neither hand drawn nor any programs so my quality kind of depends on luck >w< (i smash different tools and hope they match xD)

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Nephele73 [2010-08-21 14:49:52 +0000 UTC]

this is really good and I love the colors!

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ixris [2010-08-06 21:44:17 +0000 UTC]

I really love the muted emotions in the images I've seen of yours so far. There's kind of a disconnection to the girls that I can relate to. Almost a melancholy feel. Their big doe eyes and the waifish bodies lend an eerie quietness to your pieces. I love it. Seriously.

I'm going to start with what jumps out at me every time I take a moment to look at this piece and think how I feel about it. ~Athena-Unleashed mentioned that the shadow was wrong. I agree and disagree. It's not that the shadow is wrong. It's that the pose and proportions/foreshortening you have on your girl do not match the angle of the background.

I'm basing this on an assumption here, and forgive me if I've interpreted this wrong, but I'm working under the impression that the dark spots above her head are footprints in the snow. If that's the case, then she's either very long or she's walking at a very extreme backwards-leaning angle. For the angle of the background (how I see it), her head ought to be where her shoulders are, her shoulders where her waist is, her waist where her knees are, and she'd have to have very tiny-looking legs due to all the foreshortening you'd need to pull off that angle of background. Considering how nicely-drawn and proportioned she is just in relation to herself, I'd suggest just changing the angle of the background, tilt it so you can see some sky behind her.

The guitar/cello case... needs help. D: I am thoroughly unconvinced of its existence. Add some corners to it and some edges. You took so much time crafting your girl with seams and frills and hair strands, it's frustrating to see that guitar/cello case looking that way. :\

The butterfly, well, a lot of people have talked to you about the butterfly. So I'll go easy. Honestly, I really love how you did his antennae properly - the little bulbs at the tips had me very convinced of its general species. The wings, not so much. The shape of the wings is the killer for me - they're supposed to be much more round than this. And also, considering the angle of the girl, the butterfly is pretty much flying upside-down. D: I'd've loved to have seen you use a real-life species of butterfly, but I think I kind of see what you were doing there.

The girl is very-well crafted! Your lines on her are a solid improvement from what I saw of your last work. That tutorial really came to your rescue! I love her clothes - the details in the seams and the hems, the colors and the general shape of everything is really awesome! And for her rubber-band legs, I wouldn't worry about it. I took it as the same waifish joy that I loved in your last image I reviewed. I feel the weird bend to her legs is signs of a marriage between perspective, anime-influence, and personal style. It really lends some character to the piece, and some motion in an otherwise pretty static shot. Her eyes, I love her eyes. And I love that face, where she seems unimpressed to see a butterfly in such cold weather. XD "Huh. Yeah. And?" she seems to say. I quite love it.

A few complaints: Her hidden hand, considering that she's got possibly a cello on her back? I don't feel like you should've hidden it. I feel like she's likely to smash her wrist between the case and her thigh if she stopped like that. D: And her raised hand, the shading on her cuff seems a little flat. :\ It matches neither the sleeve nor the rest of her outfit nor the shading on her hand. The strap on her shoulder I assume hooks up with the case on her back, but it just kind of disappears behind her shoulder. Her hair doesn't part for it, it just kind of swallows it up. So it looks like she's carrying a purse or a handbag, and the case is kind of glued to her. D: Lastly, the light reflection of light on the bottom by her shoulder is upside-down. It should curve the same way, pretty much, as the one on her head.

As for the rest of your shading, I feel like you've improved. It's hard to tell, considering how washed out everything is, but I mean, it's not so drastic a difference between this one and your girl on the swing. But then, I'm really bad with lighting, too, so maybe I'm wrong.

The way you shaded the background, I like it, but I don't feel like it fits with this picture very well. The shadows on the snow, they feel very realistic, while this girl is very obviously stylized. :\ So they don't match well. Also, snow is frequently shaded with blue, not grey, so the blue butterfly leaving a trail of blue glowiness kind of throws me.

I like the interesting brushes you've used. The kind of mistiness you swallowed everything in makes it really ethereal, adding to that melancholy/disconnected feeling I mentioned at the beginning.

I'd call this one an improvement. Be aware, mostly, of the shapes of things and the angles you're working with. But yes. This is totally an improvement, structurally, anatomically, and lineart-ly. !

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rosepetal987 [2010-08-04 20:20:53 +0000 UTC]

Butterfly on your right shoulder~ -makes me feel like singing that-

Now~ *Snaps knuckles slightly* Let's start this~ Haha~
Let's start from the left, or well left when you look at it, her right, argh, you know what I mean~ *Laughs*
The butterfly seems to almost, what is the word, glow to me? I mean how the shadow is, it seems to glow a bit, which is a nice affect but also do some level bothers me. It also feels like it has a papery feel to it, which I suppose I mean it feels flat, almost like a wind is pushing it back, this could be solved with shading I suppose, but maybe also the angling. On the note of wing shape, be careful with what kind of butterfly you are going for, as often the wings do overlap slightly. Now let's move past this little doll of death~
The girl, I have to say I love the angling of her eyes, her expression all together gives her a very calm but also somber look. The only thing that does slightly bother me is her left eye, but I am not sure why, needs to be higher, needs to be tipped more, smaller, I just can't put my finger on it. I am so bad at criticizing.. I do like how her flows though and the waftyness caused by the weather is a very nice effect. <3
On the note of her 'funky legs' I believe her right leg is just pointing a little to much inwards, is all. What else, what else~ The shadow, yes that, that. Judging by how the butterfly is, I would say it does need to be more to the right -I mean the right of the image, so the girl's left I suppose-
She shading on the snow is beautiful, and the little blue dots give it a nice sense of demention, perspective takes time, so keep practicing. ~Catcher

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Athena-Unleashed [2010-08-04 15:13:32 +0000 UTC]

i always say good things and things that need to be improved. you have an interesting angle here, a difficult one. you pulled it of amazingly except for one thing, the shadow. you will never find a shadow that is directing behind a person like this unless its against a wall and the grass tells me its not. also, never outline a shadow. shadows are transparent and outlining it gives it a sense of shape and form. it looks like its someone standing behind her. other than that i love the person and the prespective and her funky legs.

the butterfly next. its good but for some reason it looks a bit flat. i think its because its all one color (and no i dont mean color and mean shade..kind of what it would look like in black and white). most butterlfy species also have the detail of the upper wings overlapping the lower wings. make sure you get references for any animal your doing, your mind remembers details differently than you would like.

this is an awesome picture and i love it.

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chikeers [2010-08-04 07:25:00 +0000 UTC]

Line art always get me >.> I suck and your perspective is fine! you can definitely tell you're looking down on her~ The butterfly is beautiful!

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