Comments: 9
DarkDelusion [2012-03-29 10:45:49 +0000 UTC]
Your work moved with a gentle rhythm that pulls the reader along. I love the description not only of the grandparents house but also their individual attitude to it. I found it so easy to picture what you had created. The smooth transition to the past regarding the father character worked well, especially since you revealed in small pieces that his disappearance seemed mysterious and not just a man leaving his family for say, another woman.
The inner monologue from the protagonist gave a strong connection allowing the reader to see through the eyes of the childhood memories. You built up the mood beautifully.
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little-supernova [2012-02-08 21:51:07 +0000 UTC]
Ooh, I encourage you. I like the fantasy of the unicorn and the reality of the narrator's life.
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