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xXDragonWingsXx In reply to SilverSalient [2014-03-19 17:54:45 +0000 UTC]
oh, sorry. XP It's still great! They need to put dates on when deviations were uploaded.
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xXDragonWingsXx In reply to monkeyquestlover54 [2014-06-20 00:59:25 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, I was pretty stupid. I actually found that a few minutes after I replied there.Β Β Β
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kuro-kai08 [2013-01-10 06:52:21 +0000 UTC]
so sweet
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Visr [2012-05-13 22:30:34 +0000 UTC]
Just... just a beautiful picture.
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Visr In reply to SilverSalient [2012-05-13 23:33:54 +0000 UTC]
No problem!
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Novaprime12 In reply to SilverSalient [2012-05-14 22:35:05 +0000 UTC]
hey i'm working on a AU fanfic of this story-->[link] and i was wondering if you have any tips, tricks, or other crazy cool ideas.
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SilverSalient In reply to Novaprime12 [2012-05-15 04:13:38 +0000 UTC]
hmmm....well if you wanted to continue, i could see some very intense cutting-it-close drama/action trying to save (and eventually saving) astrid. check this [link] i actually wrote a strikingly similar story to this situation, only my character ejected out of a burning plane instead. the chapters after that are full of the drama too. i don't really like the idea of it being hiccup's dream, honestly, it seems too cliche. i personally like something heart-poundingly intense where you dont know if someone will actually live or die.
plus, at the end of said idea you could end it with a scene like "for everything else" something cutesy and romantic that will melt someones socks off. I actually really like what the author did with this prompt, but as previously stated, a dream would be too cliche. make it real. make the reader feel something! thats the goal when I write things. feel free to browse my other stories if you need more inspiration; 99% of them have either romance, awkward relationships or intense drama like above.
wow that was long...
so, in a nutshell:
~keep going with what the author wrote. dont go back and tell the reader "oh this actually didnt happen"
~make it intense, imagine what the reader would feel reading this. make them gasp or break their heart or cry with joy. just make them feel something!
~incorporate the senses! i know when im terrified there are certain things i feel, and hiccup is more than terrified in this situation.
~work on getting rid of words like "is" "and" "but" "there" "was" etc. use bigger, bolder words to force the reader to read slower and enjoy what you wrote, but dont be too complex that they need a dictionary when they read it (instead of saying 'hiccup cried' say 'a sob caught in his throat, and as he bowed his head in sorrow his heart shattered, and the tears came, running down his cheeks in endless rivulets" or something
WOW I WROTE YOU AN ESSAY hope that helps feel free to ask for more help if you need it. i love this kind of stuff and wish there was more of it out there to read!
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Novaprime12 In reply to SilverSalient [2012-05-15 12:23:02 +0000 UTC]
Yeah i have saved astrid already (thx OC) and i would like some help after that
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SilverSalient In reply to Novaprime12 [2012-05-15 13:34:44 +0000 UTC]
outline for me what you have so far. astrid falls, then what?
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