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SilverSugar — The Woman with Two Faces
Published: 2013-12-12 21:04:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 187; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 0
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Tain Village was long known for quaint flower shops, a charming dress-maker, simple yet scrumptious bakery, and a woman with two faces. One face was an ugly grey stare. As for her other face, none could say...No one who had seen the grey woman's face had been heard from in the small village for quite some time. It was rumored these people, had fled from her horrible sight to the great faraway city, Polseq. Many Tainese avoided the woman when they could. The local school-boys, however, had a bet with one another: “See how close you can get to the grey woman and goad her to reveal her second face!” The winner would get a satchel coins collected from their lunches.
One day, a poor youth ran up to the woman. He had no bet to claim, but still asked her, “If I should impress you, would you show me your other face?” The woman shrugged. With that, the boy gently took her hand, planted a soft kiss, and whispered, “They're wrong about you, you're beautiful.”
Moved by by his kind gesture, the grey woman smiled. In that moment, everything about her took on a golden glow. She was radiant. His classmates, having witnessed the scene, clamored at the boy's daring. In awe, the poor youth called after her as she turned to go on her way, “Fair lady, what is your name? Why hide your other face?”
“Fortune,” she said, and nothing more.
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Quite a nice little piece you have here, but I'd be lying if I said I wasn't left wanting more than the rather ambiguous ending. Overall though, for what you were working with it was an excellent one.
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I get where you're coming from, but I actually wanted the ending to be open to interpretation a little. I tried to imply a lot, but when I sit down I actually only see two ways that this story could end, but I probably have more floating around in my head influencing it. In general, I sort of like when short stories have more than one meaning depending on who is looking.
That said, was it just the end that bothered you? Were you confused by it, or just wanting something finite? Did you have a solid idea as to the end, or were you torn in two (or more) directions?
Just for some clarification. If you want to leave it at your original thought, you are more than welcome. Regardless, thank you very much for taking the time to comment.
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I was just wanting more. I was wanting to know more about the woman, the boy, etc. I was enthralled, but left wanting more.
It's a weird comparison, but I see it as the last meal I had at school. We had some curried beef, and it was really good but felt like it was missing something. That's how the story came across in my mind. I liked what I got, but there were a few more things I was wondering about and it left me wanting more.
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Ahaha, that makes sense.
If this was something I felt was incomplete I'd fiddle around with it more. I do have some other stories to submit that have proper endings, you might like those too when I get around to posting them!
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