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A quick redline for lirans c:
Ok I decided to put the points to make in the description instead of in the picture because my handwriting is crapola.
I'll go from head to toe- er- waist lol

- The first thing I'd say about the hair is to give it movement. There's a lot of straight lines, but hair very much curves and tends to all go in the same direction to give it that "flow" look.
- The head was a bit too big. The general rule is that each shoulder should be the width of the head (of course there's wiggle room for that one, but it should be close)
- You should also give the face shape. There is a brow bone, eye socket, cheek bone, chin, and jawline to keep in mind- the side of the face isn't a straight line.
- You did pretty good with the position of the eyes, though the nose should be bigger and the mouth higher. Eyes are usually in the middle of the head, the botton of the nose halfway between the eyes and chin, and the mouth fairly close to the nose.
- The neck should always curve into the shoulders and head. I also added a tendon on the right side since her head is turned as well as her collarbone.
- Giving curves to the collar of her shirt makes it flow with her body and shows that it's folded- shirt collars generally pop up higher than the shoulder line to give it depth. The curve thing goes for the button line as well- it follows her body as well as the wrinkles. Also her breasts would not look so pronounced. Wrinkles show that they're there, but the fabric would not allow their specific outline to show. I also added cuffs to her sleeves and wrinkles at the elbows to give it a look of motion.
- Her arms are just a tad too long. Elbows reach the bottom of the ribcage and fingertips reach mid-thigh. Also the wrist on the hand holding the key should not be bent back so far.
- Body curves are insanely tricky, but if you imagine a skeleton it gets a little easier. See how her back curves where her ribcage would be and her waist is between that and her hip bone. Her hips curve from there into her thighs, but you can only tell a bit since she's wearing a skirt. Since her hips and kinds cocked, the curve there would be more prominent on the left, which you did well in the original c: you also did pretty good with the skirt flow, so I think that's about it!

Description
A quick redline for lirans c:
Ok I decided to put the points to make in the description instead of in the picture because my handwriting is crapola.
I'll go from head to toe- er- waist lol

- The first thing I'd say about the hair is to give it movement. There's a lot of straight lines, but hair very much curves and tends to all go in the same direction to give it that "flow" look.
- The head was a bit too big. The general rule is that each shoulder should be the width of the head (of course there's wiggle room for that one, but it should be close)
- You should also give the face shape. There is a brow bone, eye socket, cheek bone, chin, and jawline to keep in mind- the side of the face isn't a straight line.
- You did pretty good with the position of the eyes, though the nose should be bigger and the mouth higher. Eyes are usually in the middle of the head, the botton of the nose halfway between the eyes and chin, and the mouth fairly close to the nose.
- The neck should always curve into the shoulders and head. I also added a tendon on the right side since her head is turned as well as her collarbone.
- Giving curves to the collar of her shirt makes it flow with her body and shows that it's folded- shirt collars generally pop up higher than the shoulder line to give it depth. The curve thing goes for the button line as well- it follows her body as well as the wrinkles. Also her breasts would not look so pronounced. Wrinkles show that they're there, but the fabric would not allow their specific outline to show. I also added cuffs to her sleeves and wrinkles at the elbows to give it a look of motion.
- Her arms are just a tad too long. Elbows reach the bottom of the ribcage and fingertips reach mid-thigh. Also the wrist on the hand holding the key should not be bent back so far.
- Body curves are insanely tricky, but if you imagine a skeleton it gets a little easier. See how her back curves where her ribcage would be and her waist is between that and her hip bone. Her hips curve from there into her thighs, but you can only tell a bit since she's wearing a skirt. Since her hips and kinds cocked, the curve there would be more prominent on the left, which you did well in the original c: you also did pretty good with the skirt flow, so I think that's about it!