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Published: 2013-01-09 22:41:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 63547; Favourites: 265; Downloads: 14
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Description Alana was a normal girl. She had brown hair, with 5'9" she was quite big and a little bit chubby. She was 19 years old, had a cute face and a good taste in style. But Alana had a problem: Her feet stank! Not the normal foot odor most girls had, for example after sport, her feet smelled horrible even if she didn't do anything exhausting! She had tried almost everything to get rid of her smelly feet, she washed them several times a day, had bought tons of foot spray, but her feet just seemed to absorb it... She even went to some doctors but they couldn't help her either. She was completely healthy and the doctors just said the smell isn't dangerous... at least for her!

She went to a girls' school and of course some of the girls make fun of her feet. "Hey, Alana, your socks smell so bad, you should get a weapons license for them", they joked. But Alana got accustomed to it. She didn't have many friends, but the ones she had, she could count on.
It was summer now, Alana's least favored season. Most girl's wear sandals or open shoes, but Alana wear sneakers, like the whole year cause she didn't want to torment her ambience with her feet.

Now she sat in class, while the teacher introduced a new classmate to them. The girl was japanese and called Itsuko. She was tiny and seemed to be a bit shy. Itsuko took a chair some places right to Alana. But during the lesson, Alana noticed that the new girl glanced at her several times. First, Alana didn't know if it was a coincidence, but after the third time, she was sure that Itsuko was watching her.

When the lesson ended and all the girls went to lunch, Itsuko finally went to Alana:
"Ehm, hello... My name is Itsuko, as you probably know... Are you Alana?", the tiny girl asked. Alana was astonished. "Well, yes, I'm Alana. Did we know each other?", she answered. Itsuko seemed to feel very uncomfortable. "No, that's the first time we met, I guess... It's just... I've heard, you got some kind of problem with your feet...?" Now it was out. First, Alana felt a bit irritated, than she started to get angry: "Oh, very good, seems that I'm even more popular than I've thought. Well, yes, my feet stink, okay? You want to start making your jokes? I actually know them all: You want to borrow my socks so you could kill someone and noone would ever find the weapon?",
"No, you don't understand", the tiny girl tried to apologize, but Alana was still in rage: "I don't understand? Okay, than please explain. I would love to hear your  explanation!"
"It's just... just...", Itsuko started to explain and blushed "I just would like to smell your feet...".
Alena was astonished another time. Than she started to laugh out loud and it was Itsuko's time to get astonished. "Okay, this one is new. Not really creative, but new. Sorry, but I've never heard something this stupid before", Alana said.
"But that wasn't a joke... I really would like to smell your feet...", Itsuko answered.
"You... really are serious about it, aren't you?", Alana said, more irritated than ever, "But why? You know that they stink! Geez, you should flee the moment I begin to take of my shoes!"
"Well... I just have a faible for girl's feet and when I've heard that in my new class is a girl who's feet should smell horrible...",the japanese girl stammered.
"Well, thanks for the compliment", Alana replied and Itsuko blushed even more, "Okay, so if that really isn't a joke... okay, if you are serious, come to my room, let's say at 6 pm, the number is 306."

When Alana was sitting on the couch, watching TV, she thought about this new girl in her class. Damn, this was weird! But maybe it was a joke after all and the tiny girl wouldn't come. Alana looked at the clock. 10 past six, not the promptest girl, it seemed. But than, someone knocked at the door.
"Come in," Alana shouted, and when the door went open, a shy Itsuko slowly went in. "Sorry, I've got lost a bit...", she apologized.
"No problem. Damn, even now I can't believe why you're here!", Alana answered.
"Well, I usually heard something like this when I'm telling someone my... little secret. But before we start, I've another request," and with this words, she pulled a pair of pretty small white socks out of her bag. "Ehm, would you please sniff them for me?", she asked and again, she blushed.
"Hey, wait, wait, wait", Alana said irritated, "shouldn't it be the other way round?" The situation got weirder every minute! But Alana also was a little bit curious, so she took the socks, sniffed at them carefully and smelled... nothing. She looked surprised at the socks, than take a deeper breath... But again, their was absolutely no scent to smell at all! Then Alana thought she got it: "Sorry but I couldn't smell anything. I guess these socks are new and a should wear them for you? Sorry, but you've got the wrong size." That was true. With size 11, she had pretty big feet for a girl and this socks looked as if they were made for a child...
Suddenly Itsuko started to giggle. It was the first time Alana saw this young girl laugh. She asked: "Hey, what's so funny?",
"No, I don't want you to put on these socks. These are mine and I've wearing them for three whole days, even jogged in them," the tiny girl answered.
"You're kidding me! Three days? If I would wear socks this long, they have to evacuate the school when I'll put off my shoes!", Alana said. She just couldn't believe it. It was at least 85F and this girl even ran in this socks?
"It's true. I nearly have no foot odor at all," Itsuko explained, even a bit apologetic.
"No way! You have to be the complete opposite of me!", Alana said. Now she noticed that the tiny girl really didn't wear her socks anymore. Itsuko smiled. But she also had a question at Alana: "Ehm, I've noticed that you wear sneakers in class, but I'm a little bit surprised that you're wearing them even here!",
"Oh, this. That's because my roommate said she can't even breath when I'm putting my shoes off. And maybe she's right... So I'm just taking them off, when I'm in my own room. But for you, I'll make an exception", Alana answered. Now, Itsuko really got excited. She waited until Alana took off her right sneaker, than the sock. When she gave the sock to Itsuko, the tiny girl even hold her breath until she pressed the sock against her nose. She wanted the full dose in one deep breath. Then she sniffed the sock... HOLY! The stink was worse than she had ever imagined! Even worse than the one time she sneaked into the girl's locker room of her old school, after a soccer match! Well, ten times worse, at least! She even felt a bit dizzy and had to sit on a nearby chair.
"Holy shit!," she said, "have you wear these socks for a week or so? They're almost unbearable, even for me!" Now it was Alana who was giggling:
"Nope, not a week. Just put them on an hour ago, after washing my feet," Alana answered with a smile. She started to find that whole situation a bit funny. "I couldn't inflict some of my really stinky socks on you, could I?"
Itsuko was stunned. "Just an hour? Now you have to be kidding! The sock smells worse than a whole soccer team! And I know what I'm talking about!"
Then the door went open: "Hi, Alana, I'm just back from GEEZ!", the young girl who just entered the room hold her nose with her hand.
"Oh, hi, Emma, sorry for the smell. But this girl here seriously wants to know how bad my feet smell!", Alana apologized. She had thought that her roommate wouldn't come back this soon.
Emma was a nice girl and one of Alana's best friends. They were roommates for some years now and Emma really tried to get along with Alana's 'little problem', but it was just unbearable! Emma played basketball in the school team and thought that she could easily handle some stinky feet, even thought that her own feet sometimes after practive smelled horrible, but it was nothing compared to the feet of her friend... Finally Alana started to wear her sneakers in their living room and Emma was glad about it, although she felt a bit bad...
"Well, nice to meet you, but I just have to go in my room, sorry...", Emma said and escaped the smell of Alana's single sock, foot and shoe.
"Okay, I guess we should go into my room, then," Alana sighed and went to her door. "Please hurry up to get into the room because I have to shut the door as quickly as possible", she explained and then opened the door to her own room.
Itsuko quickly went in after Alana, and a moment later she gasped. The room smelled worse than a locker room! And she just saw one pair of shoes (the sneakers Alana wear at class this morning), that could be in charge of this extreme smell!
"Well, this is my room," Alana explained, "Sorry, but I just could open the window over the night cause the neighbours complained about the smell..."
"No problem, at least, that's what I'm here for, right?," Itsuko answered. "Well, I guess there's one foot to be left..."
This time, Alana let the tiny girl put her off the sneaker by herself. She was more excited than ever in her life! Most of the girls she was brave enough to ask and who let her smell their feet were quite disappointing. Even after running their feet didn't smell this strong and now she had found a girl who's feet odor was stronger than all of her previous girls put together and she didn't even smell her gym socks yet... Itsuko slowly took of Alana's shoe and an extremely strong stench of foot odor hit her so hard, she nearly got unconscious! She tried to hold Alana's foot against her nose, but the stench was just overwhelming! After too sniffs, she had to push the foot away. "What's wrong?", Alana asked, "Don't you like the smell of my feet?"
"No," Itsuko gasped, "it's wonderful! But I just need a little pause now..."
Alana grinned. She knew that her foot odor would be a bit too strong for her new tiny friend. She remembered when Emma tried to sensibilize against Alana's feet. Emma wanted to smell some of Alana's socks she wear for just some minutes, but it was useless... "Come on, Emma, I've wear these socks for just ten minutes," Alana had said.
Emma didn't even press her nose against the socks, she had hold them in a distance of at least five inches. "Sorry, but even now they smell worse than my worst gym socks! How is this even possible?", Emma gasped, "no, I give up... I wouldn't survive another sniff..."
And now, this japanese girl tried to sniff socks that she wear at least more than an hour! Okay, Alana had to admit that this girl bore more than Emma ever had.

A bit dizzy, Itsuko looked around in Alana's room. There were shelves with books, DVDs and Games, also an open cupboard with clothes in it, but Itsuko didn't see any shoes. When she asked Alana about it, Alana answered: "Well, I keep them locked in a, ehm, smell secured box under my bed... together with my used socks... and my washed ones, too." She pulled three transparent boxes from under her bed. One filled with shoes, the next one filled with socks, but the last one was empty. "Sadly for you, I've just washed all my socks, so the box for the used ones is empty," Alana explained.
That really was dissapointing for Itsuko. But on the other hand, she had smelled more foot odor she could ever imagine and maybe a whole box of unwashed socks that smelled even worse than Alana's current feet could be more than even she could handle...
"Okay, but why are the clean socks also in a box?", she asked instead.
"Well, I'm washing all of my socks twice, but I just couldn't get all the stench out of them!", Alana explained.
That Itsuko just had to try out by her own. She opened the box and sniffed at one pair of gym socks... and really, she could smell Alana's foot odor, not very much but at least more than her own socks stank, and that's after tree days of wearing them!
"Oh, and I could tell you a story about one pair of my shoes here", Alana said, opened the box with the shoes and took a pair out of it. Itsuko gasped again. The smell that come out of the box hit her completely offhand! Even tears started to fill her eyes! These shoes smelled so horrible, she asked herself how Alana could stand all that stench! Yes, she loved stinky feet, but that was just too much! If she wanted to stay conscious, she had to hold her nose!
When Alana saw that the tiny girl couldn't stand the smell anymore, she quickly closed the box: "Oh, I have to apologize, I should have warned you that some of these shoes are a bit old, by now..."
"No, it's my fault... I have asked you... I just couldn't believe that your feet are soooo amazing!", Itsuko answered.
Alana laughed: "Well, amazing is the most politely word I've heard when it comes to my feet. Okay, now back to the story. These shoes originally belonged to Emma, my roommate. I have asked her to borrow me the shoes for PE one time, cause my old ones get bust the day before and happily we have the same size. Of course she know that my feet stink, but she is such a good person and borrowed them to me anyway. And I really tried not to contaminate them, ran as slowly as possible, even changed the socks three times in PE! But when I've given them back to her, Emma asked me if I'd run a marathon in them! Emma washed the shoes at least five times, even used too full bottles of shoe spray, but it was no use... She just couldn't get my smell out of them... So I've paid her the money for the shoes and now they are mine!"
Itsuko just couldn't believe it! This girl made one pair of shoes literally unwearable with just two hours in them! She couldn't await the next morning because then, they would have PE together!
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Comments: 14

jeff19984 [2022-02-03 11:28:12 +0000 UTC]

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smplm In reply to jeff19984 [2022-02-04 05:33:39 +0000 UTC]

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deviantm1973 [2015-03-28 20:36:32 +0000 UTC]

more like this one...with pics plz

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CoryNinjamaster [2014-03-30 14:08:39 +0000 UTC]

I love a cute girl with smelly feet ♡

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inu13sama [2013-08-31 12:14:12 +0000 UTC]

I must pass by a translator stories, so just finished the first chapter, and I must say ...

This great!
I'll try to make some pictures and the way you (if you agree)

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smplm In reply to inu13sama [2013-09-02 12:27:38 +0000 UTC]

Hi! Pictures would be great! I'm glad you like the Story!

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inu13sama In reply to smplm [2013-09-02 22:01:56 +0000 UTC]

Alana went up the image, look at her and tell me if you like
inu13sama.deviantart.com/art/A…

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inu13sama [2013-08-31 12:13:24 +0000 UTC]

yo debo pasar las historias por un traductor, por lo que recién termine el primer capítulo, y debo decir...

¡que esta genial!
voy a tratar de hacer unas ilustraciones y te las paso (si es que estas de acuerdo)

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inu13sama In reply to inu13sama [2013-08-31 12:15:30 +0000 UTC]

ups ... copy the wrong hehehehe ... n.nU

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skunkyfarts [2013-01-18 12:26:17 +0000 UTC]

Hey you did a great job here and It's really 'really' nice. You may want to run this through a word processor and use a dictionary on some of the larger words. You have a lot of instances where 'wear' should be 'wore' and where a large word could be used for a smaller one, and is used incorrectly. I'm not making fun of you. I simply think it'd be better off if you did. The story is great, no complaints from me I enjoyed it. It'd just make for an easier reead, and more enjoyment, if the tiny GUM *grammar usage and Mechanics ) errors were fixed.

Also you could, and probably should with your writing style, go into depth on how the feet smell what she's doing with them so on so forth. I mean I was about three paragraphs in and I wanted to know 'what do they smell like." Sure my imagination told me, but as a writer you should also give some incling that 'you know' what you want them to smell like. Maybe Alana has a distinctively different scent. or so on.

Hey all in all good work.

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MexicanMacabre In reply to skunkyfarts [2023-05-09 16:33:00 +0000 UTC]

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smplm In reply to skunkyfarts [2013-01-21 17:35:38 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the critique! It's pretty hard for me to write english stories, but I hope by writing more stories, I'll get used to it and with the help from guys like you, my english will get better!^^

To Alana's foot odor... I've thought about describing her smell, but I'd guess it would be more interesting if the readers will make their own thoughts about it... But maybe I'll change my mind in future stories!^^

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skunkyfarts In reply to smplm [2013-01-22 06:06:41 +0000 UTC]

Well kep writing i'm sure you'll get better!

As far as the odor goes i'd suggest this. "Give us an idea." I say that because as the writer you are first and formost the authoritive voice and you don't want people to be talking about your stories and that if you give uf just some little bt we'll get the rest. but that's my idea.

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lunadivervii [2013-01-16 03:18:00 +0000 UTC]

Please do more like these!

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